Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence, correct basic grammar (use singular/plural, articles), and add one specific reason with a linking word. Keep to 1–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Not really. I only buy shoes once or twice a year because choosing the right size and style is difficult for me, so I prefer to keep what I have until it wears out.

提案: Make the answer more natural and varied: start with a direct statement, use a linking word to add one supporting detail about why it's convenient (e.g., selection, price, delivery), and correct verb forms.

例: Yes, I buy most of my shoes online because it is convenient and offers a wider selection; for example, I can compare styles and prices easily and have items delivered to my home.

提案: Provide a clear direct answer with correct grammar and specific figures. Avoid fillers and repeated words. Use one sentence to state the typical amount and a second short sentence to explain why you spend that much.

例: I usually spend around $10–$20 on shoes. I don’t spend much because I prefer basic, affordable styles and rarely buy new pairs.

提案: Answer directly, correct grammar (articles, word order), and give a specific reason with a linking word. Keep to two sentences: one stating preference and one explaining why with an example or reason.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for long periods and need good support. However, I also care about style sometimes, for example when I go to events I choose shoes that look smart but still feel comfortable.

× I buy a shoes twice a year or once a year because I I think choose shoes is a hard thing for me.

✓ I buy shoes twice a year or once a year because I think choosing shoes is hard for me.

Use plural 'shoes' without article 'a' when speaking generally. Replace 'choose shoes is' with the gerund 'choosing shoes is' or 'choosing shoes' to make a correct noun phrase. Remove duplicate 'I'. Suggested improvement: when talking generally about items use plural nouns without 'a', and use gerunds after verbs like 'think' when describing an activity.

× I buy a shoes twice a year or once a year because I I think choose shoes is a hard thing for me.

✓ I buy shoes twice a year or once a year because I think choosing shoes is hard for me.

After 'think' when referring to an activity, use the gerund form 'choosing'. Using base verb 'choose' here is incorrect. Improve by practicing gerund structures: 'I think doing X is difficult.'

× Yes, I bought all my shoes online.

✓ Yes, I have bought all my shoes online.

When describing life experience without a specific time, present perfect ('have bought') is more appropriate than simple past. Use present perfect to indicate experience up to now.

× Online is a convenient way to buy things you want.

✓ Online shopping is a convenient way to buy things you want.

Add the noun 'shopping' to make the subject clear; 'online' alone is an adverb/adjective, but 'online shopping' is the correct noun phrase. Alternatively, 'Buying things online is...' works.

× I really like buy shoes online.

✓ I really like buying shoes online.

After 'like' when referring to an activity, use the gerund 'buying' not the base verb 'buy'. Practice with 'I like doing something.'

× I think uh, no more than $20 often it it just uh, umm, $10.

✓ I think, no more than $20; often it's just about $10.

Use the present simple 'it's' for 'it is' and include 'about' to indicate approximation. Remove duplicate 'it' and filler words. Ensure subject and verb are present ('it is').

× Around I I won't spending much much money on on my shoes.

✓ Generally, I don't spend much money on my shoes.

Use present simple 'don't spend' instead of incorrect 'won't spending'. 'Won't' (will not) with present participle is ungrammatical here. Remove duplicate words and fillers. Use 'generally' or 'around' correctly at sentence start.

× I prefer comfortable shoes, but you know, sometimes fashion is a important aspect too for me.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes, but sometimes fashion is an important aspect for me too.

Use the article 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound ('important'). Place adverb 'sometimes' in a natural position and move 'too' to the end. Maintain parallel structure.

× So I think both of them are important, but I prefer comfortable shoes because you normally people don't care what shoes you wear, but.

✓ So I think both are important, but I prefer comfortable shoes because most people don't really care what shoes you wear.

Remove redundant 'of them' and correct word order: 'most people' rather than 'you normally people'. Avoid ending with 'but' without finishing the thought. Use 'don't really care' for natural expression. Replace informal 'you' with 'most people' for general statement.