Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and avoid repetition. Add one specific detail about the kinds of support shoes and use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially supportive running shoes because I work out regularly. For example, I usually buy cushioned trainers with good arch support to protect my feet, and I shop for them about once or twice a month.

提案: Make sentences grammatically correct and avoid filler words. Give one clear reason with a linking word and a brief specific example of a reliable site or return policy.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it is usually cheaper and more convenient than going to stores. For instance, I often buy from a trusted retailer with a good return policy, which saves time and money.

提案: Use clearer structure and correct number expressions. Start with a general statement, then give specific price ranges using correct currency phrasing and a linking word to contrast the types.

例: It depends on the type of shoes. For example, I usually spend around 1,000 yuan on a pair of sports shoes, but for simple slippers I might only spend about 100 yuan.

提案: Answer directly and correct small errors (plural/singular, word choice). Provide one reason with a linking word and a short specific example of the features you value.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I exercise a lot and need good support. For example, I choose shoes with cushioning and strong ankle support to protect my feet during workouts.

× Well I like buying shoes, particularly buying support shoes because I like workout so need some support shoes to use.

✓ Well, I like buying shoes, particularly supportive shoes, because I like to work out so I need some supportive shoes to use.

The sentence has incorrect verb forms and word choice. 'Buying support shoes' is awkward; use adjective 'supportive shoes'. 'I like workout' is incorrect: use the infinitive 'to work out' or the noun phrase 'working out'. Also add 'I' before 'need' for a complete clause. Suggestion: use 'I like to work out' and 'supportive shoes'. Note: This correction addresses verb + -ing and word form issues to make the sentence grammatically complete.

× So I basically buying shoes one to two times per per month and I really like it.

✓ So I basically buy shoes one to two times per month and I really enjoy it.

The original uses 'buying' without auxiliary, causing tense/structure error; change to present simple 'buy' for habitual action. 'Per per month' is duplicated; remove duplicate. 'I really like it' is acceptable but 'I really enjoy it' is more natural. This fixes verb form and duplicate word.

× Definitely I have bought the shoes online 'cause the online shopping is cheaper than stores or shops.

✓ Definitely, I have bought shoes online because online shopping is cheaper than stores.

Use 'have bought shoes online' (no 'the' before 'shoes') because speaking generally; remove redundant 'or shops' and use 'because' instead of informal ''cause'. This corrects article use and refines present perfect usage for experience.

× So I will buy some clothes or shoes online and I often, uh, shopping online because they are uh, efficiency and more convenience and more cheap.

✓ So I buy clothes or shoes online, and I often shop online because it is more efficient, more convenient, and cheaper.

'I will buy' suggests future; for habitual action use present simple 'I buy'. 'I often, uh, shopping' is ungrammatical; use 'I often shop'. 'They are efficiency' is incorrect word class; use adjective 'efficient' or adverb phrase 'more efficient'. Use parallel adjectives 'more efficient, more convenient, and cheaper'. This addresses verb -ing misuse and incorrect adjective/adverb use.

× Well, I think it depends on these types such as if I bought some sports shoes I will spend 1000 China yuan, but if you if I want to buy a slippers I will spend 100 this enough so it's different.

✓ Well, I think it depends on the type. For example, if I buy sports shoes I will spend 1,000 Chinese yuan, but if I want to buy slippers I will spend about 100; it is different.

Use present simple 'buy' for general/hypothetical statements; 'bought' (past) is incorrect here. 'These types' should be 'the type' or 'the type of shoe'. 'China yuan' should be 'Chinese yuan'. 'a slippers' is wrong: 'slippers' is plural and does not take 'a'. Use 'about 100' to indicate approximation. Clarify sentence structure and numbers formatting.

× Well, to be honest, I prefer to buy some comfortable shoes 'cause I'm a big fans of work out so I need some comfortable and quality shoes to protect my foods and it can provide more comfortable to me.

✓ Well, to be honest, I prefer to buy comfortable shoes because I'm a big fan of working out, so I need comfortable, high-quality shoes to protect my feet and provide more comfort to me.

Multiple issues: 'a big fans' should be singular 'a big fan' (subject-verb/number). 'Work out' should be 'working out' or 'to work out' for noun/verb form. 'Comfortable and quality shoes' should be 'comfortable, high-quality shoes' (adjective order). 'Foods' is incorrect for body part; use 'feet'. 'Provide more comfortable to me' is ungrammatical; use 'provide more comfort'. This corrects adjective use, pluralization, and noun choice.