Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha doğrudan ve düzenli olmalı; gereksiz tekrarlardan kaçının. Konu cümlesiyle başlayın, sonra sıklık bilgisini verin ve nedenini kısa ve net destekleyici cümlelerle açıklayın. Kelime seçimine dikkat edin (örneğin "poor economy" yerine "difficult economic situation"). Ayrıca dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin (ör. "we don't have a good economics" → "our economy is not strong").

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually buy them a few times a year. However, I don't shop very often because our economic situation in Turkey makes shoes relatively expensive, so I try to save and shop only during sales.

提案: Cevap kısa ve net olmalı; geçmiş deneyimi belirtirken zaman uyumuna dikkat edin ("have bought"/"I buy"). Sorunun geçmiş deneyim olup olmadığını sorduğunu unutmayın ve sonra avantaj ve dezavantajı iki kısa cümlede verin. Dolaylı konuşma dolgu kelimelerini azaltın (um, uh).

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times because they are often cheaper than in stores. However, I sometimes have difficulty finding the right size, so I check return policies before I order.

提案: Daha organize bir yapı kullanın: önce tipik harcama miktarını söyleyin, sonra nedenini destekleyin. Gayriresmi ifadeleri (wanna) formal şekilde değiştirin. Kısa, mantıklı bağlaçlar kullanın (for example, because, so). Ayrıca zaman ifadelerini ve alışkanlıkları doğru ifade edin (I usually wait for sales).

例: I usually don't spend a lot on shoes; I wait for big sales like Black Friday to get good deals. This helps me save money because I also need to buy other items such as bags and clothes.

提案: Cevabı doğrudan verin, ardından neden ve bir örnek/dengeleyici nokta ekleyin. Dilbilgisi ve kelime sırasına dikkat edin ("most of the time"; "I prefer fashionable shoes"; "I often regret not buying comfortable shoes"). Bağlaçlarla mantıklı akış sağlayın (however, therefore).

例: Most of the time I prefer fashionable shoes because they complete my outfits. However, I sometimes regret it when they are uncomfortable, so I also buy at least one comfortable pair for long days.

× Also, I think that is the most important thing in my outfit is shoes too.

✓ Also, I think the most important part of my outfit is my shoes.

The sentence uses an awkward structure and misuses 'thing' and 'too'. Replace with noun phrase 'the most important part of my outfit' and possessive 'my shoes' for clarity. Use 'part' (noun) not 'thing' and avoid redundant 'is'. Suggestion: simplify clauses and use possessive adjectives.

× But I can't buy too much shoes because I'm in, I'm living in Turkey, so we don't have a good economics and shoes are too much.

✓ But I can't buy too many shoes because I live in Turkey, and our economy is not very good, so shoes are expensive.

'Too much' modifies uncountable nouns; 'too many' is needed for countable 'shoes'. 'I'm in, I'm living' is redundant; use 'I live'. 'Economics' is incorrect in this context; use 'economy'. 'Shoes are too much' should be 'shoes are expensive'. Suggestion: use 'too many' for plural countables, 'economy' for national economic condition, and 'expensive' for cost.

× Of course I buy shoes online, uh, because it's can be cheaper than uh store, but uh, it's sometimes it's a difficulty, like I can't uh, proper my size when I buy in online.

✓ Of course I buy shoes online because it can be cheaper than in a store, but sometimes it's difficult to find the right size when I buy online.

Remove unnecessary fillers and fix verb forms: 'it's can be' should be 'it can be'. Use 'in a store' for location comparison. 'It's sometimes it's a difficulty' has duplicate 'it's' and wrong noun choice; use 'sometimes it's difficult'. 'Proper my size' is wrong; use 'find the right size'. Also 'buy in online' should be 'buy online'. Suggestion: streamline sentences, use 'can be', 'in a store', and 'find the right size'.

× Not too much money spending on shoes because I always catching a Black Friday like that because I don't wanna spend all my money in my shoes because I have to buy other things like bags like clothes.

✓ I don't spend much money on shoes because I always shop during Black Friday sales; I don't want to spend all my money on shoes since I have to buy other things like bags and clothes.

'Not too much money spending on shoes' is ungrammatical; use 'I don't spend much money on shoes'. 'Always catching a Black Friday like that' should be 'always shop during Black Friday sales'. Use 'don't want' not 'wanna' in formal correction. 'Spend all my money in my shoes' should be 'spend all my money on shoes'. Use 'since' or 'because' once and list items with 'and'. Suggestion: use standard verb patterns 'spend money on', 'shop during Black Friday', and avoid colloquial contractions.

× Most of time I always prefer to fashionable shoes because it's important for my outfit.

✓ Most of the time I prefer fashionable shoes because they're important for my outfit.

Use 'Most of the time' (add 'the') and avoid redundant 'always prefer'. 'Prefer to fashionable shoes' is wrong: use 'prefer fashionable shoes' or 'prefer to wear fashionable shoes'. 'It's important' should agree with plural 'shoes' -> 'they're important'. Suggestion: correct collocations 'prefer X' and subject-verb agreement for 'shoes'.

× But I always get regret to not buy comfortable shoes, so I have to buy both of them in case comfortable shoes not look good.

✓ But I always regret not buying comfortable shoes, so I try to buy both types in case the comfortable ones don't look good.

'Get regret to not buy' is awkward; use 'regret not buying'. Use gerund after 'regret'. 'Both of them' is vague; 'both types' clarifies fashionable and comfortable. 'In case comfortable shoes not look good' needs auxiliary and article: 'in case the comfortable ones don't look good'. Suggestion: use 'regret + -ing', 'both types', and include auxiliaries and articles for negative clauses.