Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 질문에 직접적으로 답하고 이유와 구체적 예시로 답변을 확장하세요. 문장은 최대 5문장으로 자연스럽게 연결어를 사용해 흐름을 매끄럽게 만드세요. 예를 들어 주제 문장(좋아하지 않는다)을 말한 뒤 이유(주로 흰색 스니커즈만 필요함), 빈도(거의 안 삼), 그리고 예시(어떤 옷에 잘 어울리는지)를 덧붙이세요. 발음이나 문법 문제로 의미가 불분명하니 단수·복수 일치와 동사 형태를 점검하세요.

例: I don't really enjoy buying shoes because I usually stick to a few pairs of white sneakers. I buy shoes only once every year or two, since white sneakers go with almost all of my clothes. For example, I own two pairs that I wear for both casual and slightly smart outfits.

提案: 짧고 명확하게 답한 뒤 구체적 이유와 한 가지 예를 덧붙이세요. 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 사용해 문장을 논리적으로 연결하고 문법(‘fit’ 대신 ‘feet’ 또는 ‘size’ 표현)과 어순을 바로잡으세요. 온라인 구매 경험이 없다면 대신 과거 시제와 상황 설명을 깔끔히 제시하세요.

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because my feet are an unusual size and I worry they won't fit well. For instance, I once ordered shoes online and had to return them because they were too narrow, so now I prefer trying shoes on in a shop.

提案: 금액과 기간을 정확히 표현하고 문장을 간결히 구성하세요. 예: 연간 지출액을 말한 후 그 이유(대부분 스니커즈를 사서)나 한 가지 예시를 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 쉼표와 반복을 제거하고 숫자 표기는 자연스러운 영어 표현으로 고치세요.

例: I usually spend about half a million won a year on shoes, mainly on sneakers. For example, I might buy one or two pairs a year because I use them regularly for walking and casual wear.

提案: 명확한 주제 문장(편안한 신발 선호)을 말한 뒤 이유와 구체적 예를 덧붙이세요. 연결어(because, so, therefore)를 사용해 논리를 강화하고 이중부정 같은 문법 실수를 피하세요. 문장 수는 2~4문장으로 유지하세요.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot during the day. For that reason, I choose sneakers or cushioned shoes rather than fashionable ones, which are often less comfortable. For example, I avoid high heels because they hurt after a short time.

× White sneakers is. Community all of all kind of clothes.

✓ White sneakers are. They go with all kinds of clothes.

The noun 'sneakers' is plural and requires the plural verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement). 'All of all kind of clothes' is ungrammatical; the correct expression is 'all kinds of clothes' or 'all types of clothes'. Use a pronoun like 'They' to avoid a sentence fragment and connect ideas. Suggestion: Use plural verbs with plural nouns and the phrase 'all kinds of' for general categories.

× I don't like buying shoes because I just want a few white sneakers.

✓ I don't like buying shoes because I only want a few white sneakers.

The phrase 'just want' is acceptable but 'just' can be ambiguous here; 'only' more clearly expresses exclusivity. No major grammar category from the provided list applies other than sentence clarity and word choice. Ensure adverb placement before the verb for clarity. Suggestion: Place 'only' before the verb phrase to indicate limitation.

× I don't like buying shoes online because my fits are very.

✓ I don't like buying shoes online because my feet are a very unusual size.

The original is a fragment and uses 'fits' incorrectly. 'Feet' is the correct noun; 'very' needs an adjective to complete the thought. Use 'unusual size' or 'weird size' to describe the feet. Also maintain sentence completeness. Suggestion: Use the correct noun 'feet' and follow 'very' with an adjective or use a complete descriptive phrase.

× Weird feet have a weird size so when I was buying. Online.

✓ My feet are an unusual size, so when I was buying online it was difficult.

Sentence fragmentation and incorrect word order: 'Weird feet have a weird size' is unnatural; native order is 'My feet are an unusual size.' 'So when I was buying online' needs a main clause to complete the thought. Combine into one coherent sentence. Suggestion: Use natural adjective placement ('My feet are...') and complete the clause after 'so'.

× I usually spend. Half million won in a one years, uh. Usually sneakers, uh, have.

✓ I usually spend half a million won in one year. Usually, sneakers are...

Fragments and article errors: 'half million' needs the article 'a' as in 'half a million.' 'In a one years' is wrong; use 'in one year' or 'a year.' The final fragment 'Usually sneakers, uh, have' is incomplete; 'sneakers are' or 'sneakers have' must be followed by a description. Suggestion: Use 'half a million' and correct time expressions ('in one year' or 'a year') and avoid sentence fragments.

× Fashionable shoes is not usually not comfortable.

✓ Fashionable shoes are usually not comfortable.

'Shoes' is plural and requires 'are' not 'is'. Also there is a double negative 'not usually not' which should be 'usually not' or 'not usually.' Suggestion: Use 'are' for plural subjects and avoid double negatives; choose 'usually not' for natural word order.

× I like walk around, so I usually like comfortable shoes.

✓ I like walking around, so I usually choose comfortable shoes.

After 'like' the verb should be in the -ing form: 'liking walking' becomes 'like walking.' Also 'I usually like comfortable shoes' is repetitive; 'choose' clarifies preference. Maintain parallel structure. Suggestion: Use gerund after 'like' and vary verbs to avoid repetition.

× No, I don't like buying shoes online because my fits are very. Weird feet have a weird size so when I was buying. Online.

✓ No, I don't like buying shoes online because my feet are a very unusual size, so it was difficult when I bought them online.

Multiple fragments combined into a single, coherent sentence. Replace 'fits' with 'feet', complete the adjective phrase, and connect clauses properly to express reason and result. Suggestion: Combine related fragments, use correct nouns, and provide a complete result clause after 'so'.