Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğrudan ve samimi fakat düzensiz ve yinelemeler var. Cümle yapısı ve dilbilgisi hataları (örn. 'I have I think 2000 shoes', 'Mostly of my shoes are Jordans and blue and red I prefer') anlatımı zayıflatıyor. Geliştirme için: daha net bir konu cümlesi kur, tekrarları azalt, sayı ve tercihler hakkında açık ve düzgün dilbilgisi kullan. Bağlaçlarla cümleleri mantıklı biçimde birleştir (e.g. 'and', 'because', 'so'). Ayrıca günlük alışveriş sıklığını gerçekçi gösteren kısa açıklama ekle.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy new shoes every few months rather than every day because I like to save for special styles. I have many pairs, mostly Jordans, and I prefer blue and red colors because they match most of my outfits.

提案: Cevap kısa ve tekrarlı; mantık ve dilbilgisi sorunları var (örn. 'when I bought from online I can try it' anlam bozukluğu). Daha iyi bir cevap için: doğrudan cevapla, online alışverişin neden tercih edilmediğini net sebeplerle açıkla ve bir örnek veya tek deneyim ekle. Bağlaçlarla düşünceler arasında akış sağla.

例: I have bought shoes online a few times, but I generally avoid it because I prefer trying shoes on to check the fit and comfort. For example, once I ordered a pair that looked good in pictures but felt too tight when they arrived, so I returned them.

提案: Cevap fikir veriyor ama rakam ve bağlam karışık; dilbilgisi hataları ('I I'm influencer', 'This is the good for that') ve belirsiz ifadeler mevcut. İyileştirme: belirgin bir harcama aralığı ver, neden bu kadar harcadığını açıkla (ör. iş veya hobiler), ve sponsorluk durumunu kısa ve net açıklayarak mantıklı bağlam oluştur.

例: I usually spend around $500 to $1000 a year on shoes, although it varies. Since I'm an influencer, I sometimes receive free pairs from brands, which reduces my personal spending.

提案: Cevap net ve doğrudan, ama son cümle eksik ve biraz tekrar var. İyileştirme: tercih nedenini somut örneklerle destekle, kısa bağlaçlarla açıklama ekle ve cevap uzunluğunu 3-4 cümleyle sınırlı tut.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them all day and need good support. For example, I choose sneakers with cushioning rather than high heels, so I only own four or five fashionable pairs for special occasions.

× I have I think 2000 shoes.

✓ I think I have 2,000 pairs of shoes.

The student used '2000 shoes' which is technically plural but awkward; we normally count shoes in pairs. Also word order is incorrect ('I have I think'). Correct order: 'I think I have...' Suggestion: place the phrase 'I think' before the verb and use 'pairs of shoes' for clarity.

× Mostly of my shoes are Jordans and blue and red I prefer.

✓ Most of my shoes are Jordans, and I prefer blue and red ones.

'Mostly of my shoes' is incorrect; use 'Most of my shoes'. The sentence also lacks conjunction and correct object for 'prefer'. Add a comma and 'ones' to refer to shoes. Suggestion: use 'Most of' and separate ideas with a comma or conjunction.

× Yes but not much. I don't prefer it because I want to see on my feet.

✓ Yes, but not often. I don't prefer buying online because I want to see how they look on my feet.

'Not much' is informal and unclear; 'not often' fits frequency. 'I want to see on my feet' lacks an object and verb; use 'see how they look on my feet.' Suggestion: use 'how they look' to describe appearance when worn.

× Is it good look? Is it soft? Good for me.

✓ Do they look good? Are they comfortable? Are they good for me?

Questions about shoes need plural forms and correct verbs: 'Do they look good?' and 'Are they comfortable?' 'Good for me' should be a question with 'Are they...' Suggestion: match subject and verb and use appropriate adjectives (comfortable).

× But when I bought from online I can try it.

✓ But when I buy online I can try them on.

Tense and phrasing are mixed. If speaking about ability when buying online in general, use present tense 'buy' and modal 'can'. 'Try it' is wrong for shoes; use 'try them on.' Suggestion: use 'try them on' for fitting shoes and keep consistent tense/modal.

× I don't like it because of it's not good I think.

✓ I don't like it because I think it's not good.

Word order and contraction are incorrect: 'because of it's not good' should be 'because I think it's not good' or 'because it's not good.' Suggestion: place 'I think' before the clause or omit 'of.'

× I buy shoes every day. Yeah, every day because I like them.

✓ I buy shoes every day because I like them.

Repetition 'every day' and 'Yeah' are conversational fillers; grammatically it's fine but redundant. Merge into one clear sentence. Suggestion: remove extra filler words for clarity.

× It's like $1000. I think it's really much, but I I'm influencer so there I take it sometimes for free.

✓ I spend about $1,000. I think that's a lot, but I'm an influencer so sometimes I get shoes for free.

'It's like $1000' is vague; 'I spend about $1,000' is clearer. 'Really much' is ungrammatical; use 'that's a lot.' 'I I'm influencer so there I take it' has many errors: missing article 'an', wrong word order and verb choice. Use 'I'm an influencer so sometimes I get shoes for free.' Suggestion: use correct article 'an' and natural verbs like 'get' for receiving items.

× This is the good for that.

✓ This is good for that.

Extra definite article 'the' is unnecessary. Use 'good for that' or rephrase for clarity: 'That helps.' Suggestion: omit 'the' before adjectives used predicatively.

× But I spent a lot of money for shoes.

✓ But I spend a lot of money on shoes.

Use 'spend money on' not 'spend money for.' Also tense consistency: present habitual 'spend' fits the conversation. Suggestion: use 'spend on' and maintain present tense for habits.

× Shoes are the most.

✓ Shoes are my biggest expense.

'Shoes are the most' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Clarify what 'the most' refers to: 'my biggest expense' or 'I buy them the most.' Suggestion: complete the comparison with the noun being compared.

× Of course, I prefer comfortable shoes. I don't like fashion much, but comfort is really important for me, so I choose it.

✓ Of course, I prefer comfortable shoes. I don't like fashion much, but comfort is really important to me, so I choose comfort.

'Important for me' is acceptable but 'important to me' is more natural. 'So I choose it' has unclear pronoun 'it' referring to comfort; repeat the noun 'comfort.' Suggestion: use 'to me' and repeat the noun to avoid ambiguous pronouns.

× I only have four or five fashionable shoes. And also.

✓ I only have four or five pairs of fashionable shoes.

As before, count shoes as 'pairs of shoes.' 'And also.' is a sentence fragment; remove it. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; finish thoughts or combine sentences.