Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like buying shoes and how often, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and filler (e.g. 'I I', 'um'). Correct small grammatical slips (e.g. 'it's not even annually' → 'not every year' or 'infrequently').

例: I don't buy shoes very often; I probably buy a new pair once every two or three years. This is because I focus on high-quality shoes that last longer, so I don't need to replace them frequently.

提案: Start with a direct answer ('No' or 'Yes, but...'), then give a specific reason and, if possible, mention an exception or brief example. Use smoother linking words like 'because' or 'so' and correct minor grammar (e.g. 'in online shop' → 'from an online shop').

例: No, I've never bought shoes from an online shop because it's hard to know if the size and fit will be right. For example, I prefer trying shoes on in a store to check comfort and support before buying.

提案: Clarify the amount and avoid contradictory or confused figures. Give a clear currency and approximate price, then explain why you spend that much. Remove hesitation and filler, and use correct sentence structure ('I usually spend about...').

例: I usually spend around ₹2,000 (about $25) on a good pair of shoes because I prefer high-quality materials that last longer and provide better comfort.

提案: Answer directly and clearly, then support your opinion with a reason and an example. Avoid hesitation and small errors ('comfort blue shoes' seems unintended). Use linking words ('however', 'also') to connect ideas and be concise (max 3–4 sentences).

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I value support and all-day wearability. However, nowadays many brands combine comfort with style, so I can often find shoes that look fashionable and feel great, like cushioned sneakers with a sleek design.

× I really buy shoes like it's not even annually because I tend to buy the highest quality so that it could last longer and I don't have to buy I I don't have to buy it often.

✓ I rarely buy shoes because I tend to buy the highest quality so they last longer and I do not have to buy them often.

ID:6 Present tense issue. The student used 'I really buy shoes like it's not even annually' which is unnatural and mixes tenses and phrasing. Replace with 'I rarely buy shoes' to correctly express low frequency in the present simple. Change 'it could last longer' to 'they last longer' to match plural 'shoes' and present simple. Remove repeated 'I don't have to buy'. Use 'them' as the object pronoun for 'shoes'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and appropriate adverbs of frequency (never, rarely, often).

× I never bought it in online shop because I think online shopping is not for things that need specific size like shoes.

✓ I have never bought shoes from an online shop because I think online shopping is not suitable for items that require a specific size, like shoes.

ID:5 Past tense issue. The student used simple past 'I never bought' but context of life experience fits present perfect 'I have never bought'. Also 'it' is incorrect for 'shoes' (plural) and 'in online shop' should be 'from an online shop'. Replace 'not for things that need specific size' with 'not suitable for items that require a specific size' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experiences and match pronouns and prepositions to nouns.

× I never bought it in online shop because I think online shopping is not for things that need specific size like shoes. We need to try it offline.

✓ I have never bought shoes from an online shop because I think online shopping is not suitable for items that require a specific size, like shoes. We need to try them on in person.

ID:22 Article errors. 'in online shop' lacks the article 'an' and uses wrong preposition. 'it' and 'them' were used inconsistently; use 'them' for shoes. Also 'try it offline' is unnatural: use 'try them on in person'. Suggestion: use correct articles before singular countable nouns and use appropriate verbs and pronouns ('try on' for clothing/shoes).

× I usually spend. ₹2 million, which probably about 1, umm, $15 and that's enough amount of money to spend for spent on high quality issues.

✓ I usually spend about 2,000 rupees, which is probably about $15, and that's enough to spend on high-quality items.

ID:6 Present tense issue. The sentence has fragmented punctuation and incorrect amount '₹2 million' seems wrong; corrected to a plausible '2,000 rupees'. Use present simple 'I usually spend' followed by a clear amount. Use 'which is probably about $15' not 'which probably about'. Use 'enough to spend on high-quality items' instead of 'amount of money to spend for spent on high quality issues'. Suggestion: keep sentence structure simple, use correct linking verb 'is' and hyphenate 'high-quality' when used as adjective.

× Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?

✓ Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?

ID:12 Incorrect use of pronouns. The question sentence is fine as is. No correction needed. Suggestion: maintain clarity; no change required.

× Well, if that's the question, then I will choose comfort blue shoes because that's umm, because I prefer comfort more than fashion.

✓ Well, if that's the question, then I would choose comfortable shoes because I prefer comfort to fashion.

ID:7 Future tense issue. 'I will choose' is a bit strong for a hypothetical preference; 'I would choose' is more appropriate for hypothetical statements. 'comfort blue shoes' is incorrect: use 'comfortable shoes'. Use 'prefer X to Y' rather than 'prefer X more than Y'. Suggestion: use conditional/modal 'would' for hypothetical choices and correct adjective forms.

× But in today's era, I think we have a lot of choices and we have a lot of comfortable shoes that are also fashionable.

✓ But nowadays, I think we have many choices and many comfortable shoes that are also fashionable.

ID:13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs. 'In today's era' is wordy; 'nowadays' or 'today' is more natural. 'a lot of choices' is acceptable but 'many choices' is more formal. Repeating 'we have a lot of' can be streamlined. Suggestion: use concise adverbial phrases and consistent quantifiers ('many' with countable nouns).