Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện điểm ngữ pháp và tính mạch lạc: trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi phát âm/nhầm từ. Nên có một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Có/Không + tần suất), sau đó một hoặc hai câu chi tiết giải thích lý do và ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: "buy once a year", "comfortable shoes", "a bit expensive", "worth it"). Hạn chế dài quá 5 câu.

例: Yes, I do. I usually buy new shoes about once a year because I prefer quality over quantity. I tend to choose comfortable, well-made shoes even if they are a bit expensive, because they last longer and are worth the price.

提案: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên và lựa chọn từ: sắp xếp câu mạch lạc hơn, dùng liên từ hợp lý (for example, so, because) và sửa các cụm từ không chính xác (ví dụ: "it's happy time" không phù hợp). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về trang web/ứng dụng, cách bạn so sánh và đọc nhận xét để tăng điểm nội dung.

例: Yes, I have. I often buy shoes through shopping apps or online retailers because they offer a wide variety of styles. For example, I compare prices across different sites and read customer reviews to check sizing and comfort before I make a decision.

提案: Sửa số tiền và cách diễn đạt cho rõ ràng; nói một con số hoặc khoảng giá cụ thể và giải thích lý do. Tránh lặp từ và dùng từ chính xác (ví dụ: "I usually spend around 300 to 500" hoặc "around $50 to $100"). Nên thêm câu giải thích ngắn về ưu tiên (comfort, durability).

例: I usually spend around $50 to $100 on a pair of shoes. I prefer to buy shoes that are comfortable and durable, so I am willing to pay a bit more for better quality.

提案: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu và rõ ràng trong việc so sánh: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu sở thích chính, rồi giải thích khi nào bạn chọn giày thời trang hoặc thoải mái. Dùng liên từ (however, but, because) để kết nối ý. Hoàn thiện phần kết thúc câu với ví dụ cụ thể về hoàn cảnh (work, parties, home).

例: I generally prefer comfortable shoes for everyday use because they are better for walking and long hours. However, for special occasions or important events I choose fashionable shoes since they make me feel more confident and look elegant.

× Uh, yes, I meant you buying various type of shoes and normally I just buy it for I just buy once a year.

✓ Uh, yes, I mean buying various types of shoes, and normally I just buy them once a year.

The student used incorrect pronouns and demonstratives: 'meant you buying' is incorrect; 'type' should be plural 'types'; 'it' should refer to plural 'shoes' so use 'them'. Also remove redundant phrases and fix verb tense to present simple 'I mean' for general statements. Suggestion: simplify to 'I mean buying various types of shoes' and use 'them' for plural pronouns.

× I tend to arm brunch shows for wearing it underwear a little expensive but it's worthy for us it's worth.

✓ I tend to buy branded shoes for wearing; although underwear is a bit expensive, they're worth it for us.

This sentence has many word choice errors: 'arm brunch shows' likely intended 'buy branded shoes'; 'wearing it underwear' is nonsensical and misplaces noun 'underwear'; 'a little expensive' should be 'a bit expensive'; 'it's worthy for us it's worth' is redundant. Correct by choosing appropriate words and keeping subject agreement: 'they're worth it'. Suggest checking vocabulary and using concise clauses.

× Yes I have, I usually buy shoes on apps like shopping or other online shops because it's happy time and offer a wide variety of style.

✓ Yes, I have. I usually buy shoes on shopping apps or other online stores because they often offer a wide variety of styles.

The clause 'it's happy time' is incorrect and likely unintended; subject-verb agreement: 'offer' should match plural 'apps or stores' so use 'they offer' or 'they often offer'; 'style' should be plural 'styles'. Also separate sentences for clarity and keep present simple for habitual actions. Suggest: 'I usually buy shoes on shopping apps or other online stores because they offer a wide variety of styles.'

× I can easily compare price and read customer reviews before I decide to buy.

✓ I can easily compare prices and read customer reviews before I decide to buy.

Use plural 'prices' when speaking generally. The rest of the sentence is correct. Suggest always pluralize countable nouns when referring to general comparisons.

× MMM as normally 300 to 5A500I as I mentioned before I I lean to wear more plant shoes for for comfort and durability.

✓ Hmm, I normally spend about 300 to 500. As I mentioned before, I tend to wear more plain shoes for comfort and durability.

There were typographical errors '5A500I' and 'plant shoes' should be 'plain shoes'. Use 'spend' to indicate money and 'tend to' for habitual preference. Also remove duplicate words and add commas for clarity. Suggest proofreading numbers and word choices.

× This event on my situation on some occasions or important events, I usually off some fashionable shows, which make me more confident to communicate and look very elegant, but sometimes in in the in the house or.

✓ On special occasions or important events, I usually wear fashionable shoes because they make me feel more confident and look elegant; but sometimes at home I prefer comfortable shoes.

Original sentence has incorrect structure and many repeated words ('on', 'in the'). 'I usually off some fashionable shows' is wrong; proper verb is 'wear fashionable shoes'. 'Make me more confident to communicate' should be 'make me feel more confident' and complete the contrast with 'but sometimes at home I prefer comfortable shoes.' Suggest simplifying clause order and using correct verbs like 'wear' and expressions like 'feel confident'.