Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更直接、语法正确并且言简意赅。出现了词汇用错（players → pairs）、时态和单复数错误（old one is wear out）。尽量用一到两句给出明确的主题句，然后用一到两句补充细节和频率，避免填充词如 uh。可以练习用简单现在时描述习惯，例如“I usually buy…” 并说明原因或例外。

例: I don't buy shoes very often. I usually buy a new pair about once a year when my old shoes are worn out or for special occasions.

提案: 回答时态和连贯性有问题，句子未完成且逻辑不清。要用一致的时态（现在完成或一般现在）并把意图说完整。使用连词（but, so, therefore）使句子顺畅，并补充比较什么（价格、款式、尺码）。避免使用 firstly 不自然地插入句中。

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online, but I usually try them on in a physical store first. If the size and quality suit me, I then compare prices online before I purchase.

提案: 内容混乱且不够具体，句子未完成并有多余停顿词（umm）。要直接给出比例或大致金额，并解释原因。用一到两句清楚地说明花费比例或数额，再用一句解释消费习惯或优先级。

例: I spend about 30% of my clothing budget on shoes. I prefer buying clothes and dresses, so I don't buy shoes very often and usually choose affordable pairs.

提案: 回答方向正确但句子不完整，表达有重复与程度词过强（really bother me extremely）。应避免重复，使用一到两句陈述偏好并给出具体情境或例子，结尾要完整。可以提到具体鞋类或品牌作为支持细节。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because uncomfortable ones can cause pain and blisters when I walk long distances. For example, I often choose cushioned sneakers for sightseeing or commuting.

× I don't like buying shoes because I think I already have enough players.

✓ I don't like buying shoes because I think I already have enough pairs.

此句中将 pairs（鞋对）误写为 players（玩家/球员），属于复数名词拼写错误且语义不符。应使用 pairs 表示“（鞋）一双双”的单位。建议注意名词的拼写与词义，谈论鞋子数量时用 pair/pairs。

× I only buy shoes once a year when I, uh, when my old one is wear out, wear out or I need a new one for some special occasions.

✓ I only buy shoes once a year when my old ones wear out or when I need new ones for special occasions.

原句使用了不正确的动词形式“wear out”之前缺少主谓一致，且单复数混用（old one → old ones；a new one → new ones）。动词 wear 应与复数主语 ones 一致为原形或加 -s（在一般现在时第三人称单数才加 -s，但 here 主语是复数 ones），所以用 wear out。建议注意主语单复数一致并使用正确的动词形式。

× Yes, I always bought shoes online but most of the time I try the shoes at physical store firstly and if the size and quality make me satisfied and the shoes really fit on me, I will compare the.

✓ Yes, I usually buy shoes online, but most of the time I try them at a physical store first, and if the size and quality satisfy me and the shoes really fit, I will compare them.

句子时态混乱：开头用过去式 bought 与 later 的一般现在时 try/will 混用，应统一为一般现在时表达经常性动作（always/usually）。此外存在代词和介词使用错误（try the shoes at physical store → try them at a physical store first；fit on me → fit），以及不完整句尾（compare the → compare them）。建议：描述习惯性行为时用一般现在时，注意代词替换和介词搭配。

× Actually, I prefer to buy new clothes and dresses instead of buying shoes. So umm, suspending my spending. All shoes approximately account for 30% of my total expenses. I I actually don't like a lot of.

✓ Actually, I prefer to buy new clothes and dresses instead of shoes, so I limit my spending. Shoes account for approximately 30% of my total expenses. I actually don't buy many shoes.

原句存在结构不完整与表达不清问题：“suspending my spending” 用法不自然，应改为 I limit my spending；“All shoes approximately account for 30%” 语序不当，应为 Shoes account for approximately 30%...；最后一句不完整（I I actually don't like a lot of.）应补全为 I actually don't buy many shoes。建议说完整句子并使用自然搭配（limit spending，account for，buy many/much）。

× I prefer to choose comfortable shoes because uncomfortable shoes really bother me extremely.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because uncomfortable ones bother me a lot.

使用 redundant 强调词不当：really ... extremely 同时使用显得冗余且用法不自然。改为 bother me a lot 更简洁自然。也可用 uncomfortable ones 代替 uncomfortable shoes 以避免重复。建议避免重复或冲突的程度副词。

× In the occasions that I need long distance walk, it cause pain and blister and nowadays some comfortable shoes are.

✓ On occasions when I need to walk long distances, they cause pain and blisters, and nowadays some comfortable shoes are available.

原句问题包括介词短语和动词形式错误（In the occasions → On occasions；need long distance walk → need to walk long distances；it cause → they cause；blister 应复数 blisters），句尾不完整（some comfortable shoes are → are available 或 are better）。建议注意固定搭配（on occasions, walk long distances）以及主谓一致和复数形式，保持句子完整。