Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then expand with a reason and a frequency detail using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., "approximately," "I don't need to buy"). Use one or two supporting details and keep within five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy two or three pairs a year because my shoes last a long time, so I don't need to shop monthly. For example, I rotate pairs for different occasions, which helps them wear evenly.

提案: Give a direct answer followed by clear reasons and at least one specific example. Use linking words like "because" or "however" correctly and avoid repeating phrases. Correct grammar: say "I have never bought shoes online" and clarify why with specific concerns (fit, quality, returns).

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I worry about the fit and quality. For example, I prefer trying shoes on in a store to make sure they are comfortable and to avoid the hassle of returns.

提案: Answer directly with a clear range and add a brief explanation of why you spend that amount. Use correct currency phrasing (e.g., "$20 to $30") and one linking phrase to connect the reason. Keep it concise and natural.

例: I usually spend about $20 to $30 on a pair of shoes because I prefer affordable options and I don't buy shoes very often.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence then support it with one or two specific reasons or examples. Use natural phrasing (e.g., "I prefer comfortable shoes because...") and avoid repetition. Add a short example showing how comfort matters in daily life.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I spend a lot of time walking and standing. For instance, I choose cushioned sneakers for commuting rather than stylish but uncomfortable shoes.

× I like buying shoes approximate almost every year because I don't need buying shoes every month or every week.

✓ I like buying shoes almost every year because I don't need to buy shoes every month or every week.

Use the infinitive 'to buy' after 'need' rather than the -ing form. Also 'approximate' is incorrect here; use 'almost' before 'every year'. Suggestion: use 'I like buying shoes almost every year because I don't need to buy shoes every month or every week.'

× But also every year I buy two or three shoes and wear them for one year.

✓ But every year I buy two or three pairs of shoes and wear them for a year.

Countable items like 'shoes' when referring to multiple items require 'pairs of shoes' for clarity. Also 'for one year' is fine but 'for a year' is more natural. Suggestion: say 'two or three pairs of shoes'.

× Never, I never bought shoes online because I don't use online shops and online platforms because online shares and every products from online are not good then offline shopping.

✓ Never. I have never bought shoes online because I don't use online shops or platforms; products shared online are not as good as those in offline shops.

Use present perfect 'have never bought' for life experience up to now. Avoid repeating 'because'; combine clauses with punctuation. 'Every products' is incorrect plural form; use 'products' and 'not as good as' for comparison. Suggestion: use 'I have never bought shoes online because I don't use online shops or platforms; products online are not as good as those offline.'

× ...products from online are not good then offline shopping.

✓ ...products online are not as good as offline products/shops.

Use comparative structure 'not as good as' and correct preposition usage: 'online' modifies 'products' without 'from', and 'than' should be 'as' in 'not as good as'. Suggestion: 'products online are not as good as products in offline shops.'

× I would say between 20 and $30 and because I don't spend as much money on shoes.

✓ I would say between $20 and $30 because I don't spend much on shoes.

When giving a price range include currency symbol consistently ('$20 and $30'). Remove redundant 'and' and 'as' in 'as much money'. 'Spend much' is natural in negative contexts. Suggestion: 'I would say between $20 and $30 because I don't spend much on shoes.'

× Actually I prefer comfortable shoes because I don't need good looking or or fashionable shoes.

✓ Actually I prefer comfortable shoes because I don't need good-looking or fashionable shoes.

Use the hyphenated adjective 'good-looking' and remove duplicate 'or'. Suggestion: 'I prefer comfortable shoes; I don't need good-looking or fashionable ones.'

× I don't care people. I don't care what say people.

✓ I don't care what people say.

'Care' requires an object clause: 'I don't care what people say.' The fragment 'I don't care people' is ungrammatical; combine into one correct clause. Suggestion: use 'I don't care what people say.'

× I care only about my comfort and my comfort.

✓ I care only about my comfort.

The phrase repeats 'my comfort' twice; remove the redundancy. Suggestion: 'I care only about my comfort.'