Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, natural and directly answers the question with a topic sentence and supporting detail. To improve, shorten one sentence to avoid slight redundancy and add a brief connective phrase to enhance coherence (e.g., “because” or “so”). Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., use “durable” instead of repeating “last”).

例: I don’t buy shoes very often — usually about twice a year because I prefer investing in durable, high-quality pairs. For me, shoes are more of a necessity than a fashion item, so I focus on practicality rather than appearance.

提案: Good direct answer with reasons and an example. Improve coherence by adding linking words (e.g., “for example” or “because”), correct minor grammar (add comma after “Yes”), and use a slightly wider vocabulary (e.g., “affordable” or “discounted”). Make the example more concise.

例: Yes, I have, and I actually prefer it. Buying shoes online is often more affordable because prices reflect demand; for example, if a style isn’t popular but I like it, I can usually buy it at a discount.

提案: The answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and unclear phrasing (“without costing a few future”). Improve accuracy and clarity: correct sentence structure, remove redundancy (“usually” and “typically”), and give a specific price range or clearer description of brands. Use linking words like “so” to connect reason and consequence.

例: I usually spend a moderate amount — around $50–$100 — because I try to balance style and affordability. So I often choose mid-range brands like Nike or Adidas that provide decent quality without being too expensive.

提案: Strong, relevant answer with reasons. Correct the minor grammar issue (“wore in” → “worn in”) and tighten phrasing to avoid repetition. Add a linking word such as “therefore” to improve flow, and give a brief example of a comfort feature you look for (e.g., cushioning, arch support).

例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I’m on my feet a lot during the day, so I need good support. If my shoes are worn in and well-cushioned, I can concentrate better on work and study. Therefore I check materials and features like cushioning and arch support before buying.

× Typically I tend to go for middle range brands that offer decent quality without costing a few future such as a Nike, Adidas.

✓ Typically I tend to go for mid-range brands that offer decent quality without costing a fortune, such as Nike or Adidas.

The phrase 'middle range' should be 'mid-range' (compound adjective). 'costing a few future' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'costing a fortune'. Also 'a Nike, Adidas' is incorrect article and punctuation; brand names do not need 'a' and items should be joined with 'or'. Use 'such as Nike or Adidas' for examples.

× Yes I have and I actually like it.

✓ Yes, I have, and I actually like it.

The original is missing commas for clarity rather than a tense error; however the auxiliary 'have' is present perfect which is correct. Adding commas improves readability: 'Yes, I have, and I actually like it.' No tense change needed.

× I think buying shoes online is more cost effective because the price depends on market demand.

✓ I think buying shoes online is more cost-effective because prices depend on market demand.

Hyphenate 'cost-effective' as a compound adjective. 'the price depends' is better as plural 'prices depend' when speaking generally about different shoes; this matches present simple tense for general truths.

× If a pair isn't popular but I personally like it then I can usually get it at a reasonable price.

✓ If a pair isn't popular but I personally like it, then I can usually get it at a reasonable price.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs a comma before 'then' for clarity. The gerund form usage is fine. No verb form change required.

× I typically buy shoes twice a year since I prefer investing in good quality pairs that can last for years.

✓ I typically buy shoes twice a year since I prefer investing in good-quality pairs that can last for years.

Use a hyphen in 'good-quality' when it modifies 'pairs' to form a compound adjective. The rest of the sentence is correct.

× If I feel comfortable and wore in my shoes, I can focus better on my work and studies.

✓ If I feel comfortable and worn in my shoes, I can focus better on my work and studies.

'Wore' is the past tense of 'wear' and is incorrect here. The correct adjective is 'worn' (past participle used adjectivally). Use 'worn in' to mean broken-in or comfortable. This keeps the conditional present meaning.