Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and addresses the question with a topic sentence and an example, but there are minor grammar errors and an unclear phrase (“said last”). To improve, correct small mistakes, keep sentences concise (max 5), and add a linking word to connect reason and example. Also prefer more precise vocabulary (e.g., “invest in high-quality footwear”).

例: Yes, I do, but not very frequently. I usually buy new shoes about twice a year because I prefer to invest in high-quality footwear. For example, I recently bought a durable pair of leather work boots, so I treat shoes as practical items rather than fashion statements.

提案: The answer covers reasons and gives advantages, but contains a confusing word (“stairs” instead of “styles” or “sizes”) and a few punctuation issues. Improve clarity by correcting word choice, using a linking word to list reasons, and being slightly more specific about examples of comparison (e.g., reading reviews, checking sizes).

例: Yes, I have, and I actually prefer shopping for shoes online because it is often cheaper and more convenient. For example, unpopular styles are usually discounted, and I can compare prices, read customer reviews, and have the shoes delivered to my home.

提案: This answer is specific and relevant, but has a repeated word (“I I”) and could be tightened with a linking phrase. Improve fluency by removing repetition, using a clearer topic sentence, and adding a brief reason why that price range suits you (e.g., lasts longer or fits budget).

例: I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes because I try to balance style and affordability. For example, I buy mid-range brands like Nike or Adidas that are durable and comfortable, and I typically pay between $50 and $100 per pair because they offer good value and last longer.

提案: The response communicates a clear preference and reason, but contains grammar mistakes (“wore in” should be “worn in”; “materials in the V features” is unclear). Improve by using correct verb forms, clearer vocabulary (e.g., “materials and features”), and a linking word to connect preference and consequence. Keep to under five sentences.

例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I am on my feet a lot during the day. If my shoes are comfortable and well worn-in, I can concentrate better on work and study. Therefore, I always check the materials and supportive features, such as cushioning and arch support, before buying a pair.

× I usually buy shoes about twice a year because I prefer investing in high quality pairs, said last.

✓ I usually buy shoes about twice a year because I prefer investing in high-quality pairs instead.

This sentence has a sentence structure and word choice issue not listed by exact ID but maps to 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26). The phrase 'said last' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'instead' or 'lastly'. Also 'high quality' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective before a noun: 'high-quality pairs'. Suggestion: replace the unclear fragment with 'instead' and hyphenate 'high-quality' to make the sentence grammatically correct and clear.

× Prices are driven by demand, so stairs that aren't popular can be sold at a good discount.

✓ Prices are driven by demand, so styles that aren't popular can be sold at a good discount.

This is a word choice error falling under 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26) because 'stairs' is a wrong word in context; the intended word is 'styles'. Use the correct noun to match meaning. Suggestion: use 'styles' when referring to models or designs of shoes.

× I I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes because I try to balance style and affordability.

✓ I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes because I try to balance style and affordability.

This sentence contains a duplicated subject 'I I' which is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove the extra 'I' to correct the sentence. Suggestion: read aloud to catch repeated words.

× I tend to buy middle range brands such as Nike or Adidas that are durable and comfortable and I typically spend around $50.00 to $100 per pair.

✓ I tend to buy mid-range brands such as Nike or Adidas that are durable and comfortable, and I typically spend around $50 to $100 per pair.

'Middle range' is incorrect collocation; 'mid-range' is the correct adjective (ID 14: Incorrect use of quantifiers/word choice). Also write currency amounts consistently without unnecessary decimals. Add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Suggestion: use 'mid-range' and format numbers consistently.

× If I feel comfortable and wore in my shoes, I can focus better on my work and studies.

✓ If I feel comfortable and if my shoes are well broken-in, I can focus better on my work and studies.

The clause mixes present 'feel' with past simple 'wore' which is incorrect (ID 5/6). The intended idea is a present conditional about the state of the shoes. Use an adjective phrase 'well broken-in' or present perfect passive 'have been broken in'/'are well broken-in' to match 'feel' and the conditional. Suggestion: use consistent tense/aspect in conditional clauses: 'if I feel comfortable and my shoes are well broken-in'. Also 'wore' is the past tense of 'wear' and not suitable here.

× That's why I usually pay attention to the materials in the V features before buying a pair.

✓ That's why I usually pay attention to the materials and features before buying a pair.

The phrase 'materials in the V features' is unclear and ungrammatical (ID 26). Likely the student meant 'materials and features'. Remove the stray 'V' and connect the nouns properly with 'and'. Suggestion: keep noun coordination simple: 'materials and features'.