Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ปรับโครงสร้างประโยคให้ตอบตรงคำถามก่อน (topic sentence) แล้วอธิบายเพิ่มเติมโดยใช้คำเชื่อมให้ลื่นไหล เช่น because / so / when นอกจากนี้แก้ไวยากรณ์ (ใช้ do/does, singular/plural) และหลีกเลี่ยงคำฟุ่มเฟือย ฝึกตอบไม่เกิน 3-4 ประโยค

例: I don't buy shoes very often. I usually buy them only when I really need a new pair because my old ones are worn out or unsuitable for a specific occasion.

提案: ตอบให้ชัดเจนว่าเคยหรือไม่ แล้วให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจงเกี่ยวกับครั้งหนึ่ง โดยใช้คำเชื่อม (for example / when / because) แก้คำผิดและไวยากรณ์ เช่น 'bought shoes online', 'it was a casual pair' และหลีกเลี่ยงคำอื้ออึง (uh)

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online. For example, I once bought a casual pair of shoes for a job interview because I wanted something smart but comfortable for my first job interview.

提案: ให้คำตอบที่มีความสมเหตุสมผลและเฉพาะเจาะจงมากขึ้นโดยใช้หน่วยสกุลเงินและช่วงที่เป็นไปได้ และอธิบายเหตุผลสั้น ๆ ใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น usually / because เพื่อความชัดเจน

例: I usually spend around 1,000 to 2,000 baht on a pair of shoes because I prefer good quality that lasts, though I might spend more for special occasions.

提案: ตอบตรงคำถามด้วยประโยคหัวเรื่องแล้วอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจน ใช้คำเชื่อม (because / so) แก้ประโยคให้สมบูรณ์และหลีกเลี่ยงการสะดุด พยายามให้ตัวอย่างประกอบเหตุผล

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because wearing uncomfortable shoes makes my feet hurt and affects my ability to walk or work all day, so comfort is more important to me than fashion.

× Is doesn't matter for me because I buy the shoe when I think it's necessary for me.

✓ It doesn't matter to me because I buy shoes when I think they are necessary for me.

The sentence uses incorrect subject 'Is' and wrong pronouns and articles. Use 'It doesn't matter to me' for the impersonal expression (subject 'it'), plural 'shoes' for general statements, and 'they' to refer back to 'shoes'. Also use 'are' to agree with plural 'shoes'. Ensure preposition 'to' after 'matter' rather than 'for'.

× Oh yes of course I ever bought shoe online.

✓ Oh yes, of course I have bought shoes online.

The adverb 'ever' is used with present perfect; the correct auxiliary is 'have' plus past participle 'bought'. Use plural 'shoes' for general statements and include commas for clarity. Placement: 'I have ever bought' is unnatural in affirmative; 'I have bought' or 'have you ever bought' are preferred.

× It is a cashew.

✓ It is a casual pair.

'Cashew' is the name of a nut and is incorrect here. Likely intended 'casual'. Use 'a casual pair' or 'a casual shoe' to describe style. Choose the correct noun and article for clarity.

× I use it for a interview date.

✓ I used it for an interview.

If referring to a past purchase, use past tense 'used'. Use 'an' before vowel sound 'interview' and omit unnecessary word 'date' unless specifying. If meaning 'job interview', say 'for a job interview'.

× Uh, for the for first job for me.

✓ Uh, it was for my first job.

The fragment is ungrammatical and uses wrong word order. Use past tense 'was' for a past purpose and possessive 'my' before 'first job'. Remove duplicate 'for'.

× Around 1000 to 200,000.

✓ Around 1,000 to 200,000 (currency) or more likely 'around 1,000 to 2,000' depending on intended range.

The range '1000 to 200,000' is likely unrealistic and lacks unit (currency). Use commas in large numbers and clarify currency. If intended 1,000–2,000, correct the upper bound. Ensure consistency in magnitude.

× I want comfortable shoes because I if I use an uncomfortable shoe, I think I. Feel he's in my my.

✓ I want comfortable shoes because if I wear uncomfortable shoes, I feel pain in my feet.

Multiple errors: remove extraneous 'I', use 'wear' not 'use' for shoes, plural 'shoes' to generalize, correct phrase 'I feel pain in my feet' instead of unclear 'I feel he's in my my'. Ensure correct possessive 'my' and noun 'feet'.