Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct small errors (e.g. 'study leather' likely meant 'sturdy leather'), and avoid redundancy. Use one linking phrase to add a specific reason or example. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially boots in winter. I usually get a new pair once a year to lift my mood and because they keep me warm. For city walks I often choose sturdy leather boots because they are durable and comfortable.

提案: Good clear answer and concise reasons. To improve further, add a brief linking phrase and a specific example (e.g. a past experience or a preferred store) to make the response more vivid.

例: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I'm worried they won't fit properly. I prefer trying them on in a physical shop so I can check the comfort and size; for example, I usually go to a local sports store to test different styles.

提案: Content has a clear preference but contains an unrealistic figure or typo and some phrasing issues. Clarify the typical amount (e.g. per pair) with a realistic number, correct grammar (e.g. 'rather than'), and keep it concise. Add one linking word to justify the expense with a specific benefit.

例: I prefer to invest in quality rather than buy the cheapest options because cheap shoes wear out quickly. I usually spend around CN¥1,000–1,500 on a good pair to ensure they are comfortable and durable.

提案: Strong, natural response with appropriate contrast and reasons. To be even better, add a brief linking phrase and a short specific example of each occasion to make your answer more concrete, while keeping it concise.

例: It depends on the occasion. For casual outings, I prefer fashionable shoes to look smarter and make a good impression, for example when meeting friends. However, for long walks or excursions I choose comfortable shoes because they provide better support and prevent sore feet.

× I often choose study leather ones for city walks.

✓ I often choose sturdy leather ones for city walks.

The student used the word 'study' which is incorrect in this context; the correct adjective is 'sturdy' meaning strong and durable. Replace the incorrect adjective with the appropriate one to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: Learn commonly confused words and their meanings; here 'sturdy' describes durable shoes, while 'study' is a noun or verb unrelated to this meaning.

× When it comes to shoes, I prefer to invest in quality other than buy the cheapest options because cheap shoes usually wear out quickly.

✓ When it comes to shoes, I prefer to invest in quality rather than buy the cheapest options because cheap shoes usually wear out quickly.

The phrase 'other than' is incorrect here; the correct phrase for contrasting preferences is 'rather than'. Use 'rather than' to link two alternative actions. Also maintain base verb form after 'rather than' (buy). Suggestion: Use 'prefer to ... rather than ...' structure for clear contrasts.

× I typically spend at least CN¥10,000 on the new pair to ensure they are comfortable and durable.

✓ I typically spend at least CN¥10,000 on a new pair to ensure they are comfortable and durable.

Using 'the new pair' implies a specific pair already known; the student means any new pair, so the indefinite article 'a' is required. Use 'a new pair' when speaking generally. Suggestion: Use 'a' for non-specific items and 'the' for specific, known items.