Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然并直接回应问题，第一句用主题句表明态度，然后用一到两句具体原因或细节支持。注意语法和单复数（如 "shoes" 而不是 "it"），避免多余填充词。可以加入连接词使逻辑更清晰，如 "because" 或 "so"。

例: I don't buy shoes very often. I usually buy new shoes about twice a year because most pairs last a long time, and I only replace them when they wear out or I really like a new style.

提案: 回答要避免重复并提高连贯性。第一句直接回答然后用一两句具体原因，避免口头语如 "umm"。注意语法（"many types", "lots of discounts"），用连接词如 "and" 或 "also" 串联句子。

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it's very convenient and offers a wide variety of styles. Also, online stores frequently have big discounts, so I can find good quality shoes at lower prices.

提案: 回答应更准确和自然。开头用完整句说明价格，并解释原因时注意语法（如 "they are durable"，"quality is guaranteed"）。去掉口头语，给出一两个具体理由支持观点。

例: I usually spend around CN¥600 on a pair of shoes. I prefer that price because such shoes tend to be more durable and the quality is usually more reliable.

提案: 回答要更简洁和语法正确。先用一短句表明偏好，然后用一两句具体经历或原因支持。注意动词形式和词序（"a very trendy pair of shoes"，"made my feet tired"）。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes. I once bought a very trendy pair that looked great but made my feet sore, so now I always choose shoes that feel comfortable for walking.

× I usually buy it twice a year because I think most of shoes are durable, so unless I really love it, I will not buy them very often.

✓ I usually buy them twice a year because I think most shoes are durable, so unless I really love them, I will not buy them very often.

句中“most of shoes”量词搭配不当，正确表达为“most shoes”。同时代词需与复数名词一致，用“them”代替“it”。建议：当名词前有“most”且没有“of + the/these/etc.”时，直接使用复数名词（most shoes）；代词应与所指名词的单复数一致。

× Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it's more convenient and with many umm types of shoes that I can choose.

✓ Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it's more convenient and there are many types of shoes I can choose from.

原句中“and with many types of shoes that I can choose”介词和连接结构使用不当。改为“there are many types of shoes I can choose from”更自然；注意英语中“choose from”表示从……中选择。建议：使用完整的主语+谓语结构（there are...），并使用固定搭配“choose from”。

× Besides, there are lots of discount in the online shop so I usually choose to buy them online.

✓ Besides, there are lots of discounts in the online shops, so I usually choose to buy them online.

“lots of discount”中“discount”应为可数复数“discounts”或使用不可数表达“a lot of discount”不自然；同时“shop”复数更符合一般情境。建议：当表示许多单项优惠时使用复数形式“discounts”，并在复合句中用逗号连接。

× It's about CN¥600 for a pair. I think at that price, the shoes always be durable to wear and umm, the quality has the guarantee. So yeah.

✓ It's about CN¥600 for a pair. I think at that price, the shoes are always durable to wear and, umm, the quality is guaranteed.

原句用“always be durable”和“the quality has the guarantee”时态和表达不正确。应使用一般现在时“are”表示习惯性判断；“quality is guaranteed”是被动固定搭配更自然。建议：用一般现在时表述普遍事实，使用被动语态“be guaranteed”来表示“质量有保证”。

× I prefer buying comfortable shoes because once I follow the trend by a very trendy shoes which really makes me tired of my foot. Since then I tend to buy the shoes that really comfortable.

✓ I prefer buying comfortable shoes because when I once followed a very trendy style of shoes, they made my feet very tired. Since then I tend to buy shoes that are really comfortable.

原句句子结构混乱，时态和代词不一致：“once I follow”应为过去经历“when I once followed”；“by a very trendy shoes”介词及单复数错误；“which really makes me tired of my foot”主语指代不清且单复不当；最后一句缺少系动词“are”。建议：描述过去的经历用过去时，保持主谓一致，用复数代词“they”指代“shoes”，并在形容词前加系动词（be）形成完整句子。