Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğal fakat tekrarlar ve kelime kullanımı geliştirilmelidir. "sporty sports shoes" gibi tekrarlar kaldırılmalı; ayrıca açık bir konu cümlesi ile başlayıp 2-3 destekleyici detay verin. Bağlaçlar (for example, because, so) daha tutarlı kullanılmalı. Örnek: hangi sıklıkta aldığınızı (monthly/seasonally), hangi aktiviteler için ve son satın alma deneyiminizin kısa sonucu (comfort/durability) ekleyin.

例: Yes, I buy shoes fairly often, usually every few months because I exercise regularly. For example, I recently bought a new pair of running shoes for jogging and a pair of trainers for my football team. Both were comfortable and provided good support, so I’m very happy with them.

提案: Cümle yapısı ve dilbilgisi hataları var; ayrıca çelişkili ifadeler bulunuyor ("usually" vs "prefer"). Net ve kısa bir konu cümlesi ile başlayın (Yes/No). Sonra sebebi ve bir örnek verin; beden ve marka farklılıklarından bahsederken daha açık olun. Bağlaçlarla mantığı güçlendirin.

例: No, I don’t usually buy shoes online because sizes and fits vary between brands. I prefer to try shoes on in a shop so I can check the comfort, and once I find a suitable pair I might buy the same model online if it’s cheaper.

提案: Cevap net ve doğrudan, ancak detay biraz genelleyici; neden daha pahalıya çıktığınızı spesifik örneklerle açıklayın (malzeme, marka, kullanım süresi). Ayrıca aralık verirken bağlam eklemek (monthly/yearly) faydalı olur.

例: I usually spend about 2000 to 3000 TL per pair, but occasionally I spend up to 6000 TL on premium brands. I’m willing to pay more for leather or specialised running shoes because they last longer and offer better support.

提案: Cümle tamamlanmamış ve sebep daha doğal ifade edilebilir. Konu cümlesini net söyleyip nedenini açıkça verin ve bir kısa örnek ya da karşılaştırma ekleyin. Bağlaçlarla neden-sonuç ilişkisini güçlendirin.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I walk a lot every day. For instance, I choose cushioned sneakers that protect my feet even if they are less trendy.

× I usually everything shoes online because of it can be uncertain and size or from vary between brands.

✓ I usually buy shoes online, but it can be uncertain because sizes can vary between brands.

The original sentence uses incorrect word forms and word order. 'Everything shoes' is wrong; the correct verb is 'buy'. 'Because of it can be uncertain' is ungrammatical; use 'but it can be uncertain' or 'because it can be uncertain'. 'Size or from vary' should be 'sizes can vary'. Suggestion: use a clear subject-verb-object structure: 'I usually buy shoes online, but it can be uncertain because sizes can vary between brands.' This fixes the present participle/form misuse and restores correct sentence flow.

× I prefer to try them on in a shop so I can check the comfort and this is important for me.

✓ I prefer to try them on in a shop so I can check the comfort, and this is important to me.

The sentence needs a conjunction and correct prepositional phrase. 'And this is important for me' is understandable but more natural is 'important to me.' Add a comma before 'and' to join the two independent clauses. Suggestion: use 'and' with proper comma and 'important to me' for natural phrasing.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because. I am keen on walking on the street and this is essential for me.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I am keen on walking on the streets, and this is essential to me.

The original has a sentence fragment 'because.' without an object clause. Combine the fragment with the next sentence to form a complete reason clause: 'because I am keen on walking on the streets.' Use plural 'streets' or 'walking on the street' depending on meaning; 'streets' is more natural. Also join with 'and' plus comma, and use 'essential to me' rather than 'for me.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by completing 'because' clauses and ensure proper conjunctions and prepositions.