Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接有条理，先给出主题句（是否喜欢买鞋及频率），然后用一到两句具体原因或变化说明。注意语法连贯（如时态和代词），避免重复词（如“I I”）。可以用连接词（but, because）来衔接句子。

例: Yes, I do like buying shoes. I used to buy them frequently before I started university because I enjoyed trying new styles, but since I began university I have learned to save money and buy less often.

提案: 回答清晰且内容相关，但句子较长且有重复（如“online”/“apps”）。用更简洁的结构并加入具体例子或频率会更自然。注意单复数和搭配（save time 而不是 save times）。

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it saves time and lets me browse many styles whenever I want. For example, I usually check two shopping apps and buy when there is a discount.

提案: 回答要更具体并使用自然表达（例如“three to five hundred”或“300 to 500”），减少口头语“uh”。可以给出货币单位和更明确的范围，同时用连接词说明差异。

例: It depends on the type. For sports shoes I usually spend about 300 to 500 yuan, while for fashionable or designer shoes I tend to spend more, maybe around 600 to 1000 yuan.

提案: 回答表达了理由，但句子断裂且有语法错误（例如“a comfortable shoes is”）。应先给出明确立场，然后用连贯句子说明两个具体原因，最后做简短总结。避免简单句堆砌。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I exercise a lot and walk my dog regularly. Comfortable shoes help me stay active and protect my feet during long walks, so they are more important to me than purely fashionable ones.

× Yes, I really like especially before getting to university I often buy shoes even though I have a lot of shoes. But when I have go to university I I have learned to save money.

✓ Yes, I really liked buying shoes, especially before I started university. I often bought shoes even though I had a lot. But when I went to university, I learned to save money.

句子中涉及时态与动词形式问题：原句混用现在时和过去时且有不正确的动词形式（例如“have go”应为“went/started”）。建议保持时间线一致：描述过去习惯用过去时（liked, often bought, had, went, learned）。另外避免重复词（“I I”）。改善方法：确定说话时间（过去或现在），然后统一使用相应时态；把不规则动词用过去式。

× Yes, I often buy shoes online because it can save times and I can choose shoes whenever I want and just to open the apps and look through shoes and they often have discounts online.

✓ Yes, I often buy shoes online because it can save time, and I can choose shoes whenever I want: I just open the app and look through them, and they often have discounts.

原句中“save times”中“times”用法错误，应为不可数名词“time”。“apps”与上下文可以用单数“app”或复数，但更自然为单数；此外代词指代不明确，需用“them”指代鞋。建议学习可数/不可数名词用法并使用恰当代词。

× Umm, I think it depends on, uh, the types of shoes. Uh, if I, uh, I want to buy sports shoes, I usually spend about, uh, three to five hundreds. If I want to buy some fashion shoes, I will spend more.

✓ Umm, I think it depends on the type of shoes. If I want to buy sports shoes, I usually spend about three to five hundred. If I want to buy some fashion shoes, I will spend more.

原句中“types of shoes”在此处更自然用单数短语“type of shoes”表达总体类别。数字表达“three to five hundreds”错误，英语中“hundred”在具体数词后不加复数，应为“three to five hundred”。建议复习可数名词单复数规则和数字后名词形式。

× Now I prefer to buy comfortable shoes because I do have a lot of exercise and work very often. Especially I have a pet dog. So take it outside if necessary. A comfortable shoes is very important.

✓ Now I prefer to buy comfortable shoes because I do a lot of exercise and work very often. I also have a pet dog, so I take it outside when necessary. Comfortable shoes are very important.

原句存在代词和数一致错误：“a lot of exercise”前不需要“have”作动作，应说“do a lot of exercise”；“take it outside”中的“it”可指狗，但更自然连成句；“A comfortable shoes”中冠词和复数不一致，应为“comfortable shoes are”。建议注意主谓一致、代词指代清晰以及冠词与名词数一致。