Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use correct grammar and concise structure. Start with a clear topic sentence then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and remove redundancy (e.g., don’t repeat ideas).

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy new shoes about once a month because I like trying different styles; for example, I often choose trendy sneakers for casual wear and leather shoes for work.

提案: Be more precise and use correct verb agreement and articles. Give a brief specific example and a linking word to connect ideas. Avoid repeating the same idea about trends and quality.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. For instance, I purchased a pair of running shoes from an international website last year because they offered a unique design and high-quality materials.

提案: Use clear currency expression and correct sentence structure. State a typical price range and give one specific recent example, using linking words. Fix article and plural forms.

例: I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes, typically between $50 and $100. For example, last month I bought a pair of Nike sneakers for $75 because they were durable and comfortable.

提案: Give a direct opinion then support it with a specific reason and one short example. Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Use linking words like because or for example.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they protect my feet and help me walk long distances without pain. For example, I own two pairs of cushioned walking shoes that I wear for commuting and weekend walks.

× Of course I like to buying shoes and I like to wear different types of shoes and I always tries trendy shoes and I moreover I'm also take shoes once a month.

✓ Of course I like buying shoes and I like to wear different types of shoes and I always try trendy shoes and I also buy shoes once a month.

Multiple errors: 'like to buying' mixes infinitive and gerund; correct is 'like buying' (verb + -ing) or 'like to buy'. 'tries' is wrong because subject I takes base verb 'try' (third-person singular error - but corrected here as part of verb form). 'I'm also take' is ungrammatical; use simple present 'I also buy' to express habitual action. Suggestion: use consistent simple present for habits, use gerund after 'like'.

× Indeed, I bought a shoes from online platform several times and it also give a very unique design with latest trends and it gives the best quality shoes also.

✓ Indeed, I bought shoes from an online platform several times, and they have very unique designs with the latest trends and good quality.

'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and cannot take 'a' (singular article); use 'shoes' or 'a pair of shoes'. 'from online platform' needs an article: 'from an online platform'. 'it also give' uses singular pronoun with plural noun and wrong verb form; change to 'they have' (subject-verb agreement). 'a very unique design' may be okay but 'unique' is absolute; better to use 'very unique' sparingly; adjusted to 'very unique designs' to match plural. Suggestion: match article with noun number, use correct pronouns for plural, and maintain subject-verb agreement.

× Well I like to buy mid range shoes and and I'm not spending too much money on shoes.

✓ Well, I like to buy mid-range shoes and I don't spend too much money on them.

'I'm not spending' (present continuous) is awkward for habitual actions; use simple present 'I don't spend'. 'mid range' should be hyphenated 'mid-range'. 'shoes' repeated; replace second 'shoes' with pronoun 'them'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and ensure correct hyphenation and pronoun reference.

× For example, last month I bought a 5000. I bought a Nike shoes of 5000 and it's a very reliable and good quality shoes.

✓ For example, last month I spent 5000 on a pair of Nike shoes; they are very reliable and of good quality.

'bought a 5000' is incorrect structure; express amount spent as 'spent 5000' and include currency if needed. 'a Nike shoes' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'a pair of Nike shoes' or remove 'a'. 'it's... shoes' mixes singular 'it' with plural 'shoes' and wrong adjective order; use 'they are very reliable and of good quality'. Suggestion: use 'spent' for amounts, match articles to noun number, and use correct pronouns for plural subjects.

× Well I mostly preferred comfortable shoes and it keeps my feet very healthy and give me good comfortable and I mostly like like 2 shoes that are very comfortable in walking also and with a good quality.

✓ Well, I prefer comfortable shoes most of the time; they keep my feet healthy and are comfortable to wear. I usually have two pairs of shoes that are very comfortable for walking and of good quality.

'mostly preferred' uses past tense 'preferred' incorrectly for general preference; use simple present 'prefer'. 'it keeps my feet' uses singular pronoun for plural 'shoes'; use 'they keep'. 'give me good comfortable' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'are comfortable to wear'. 'like like 2 shoes' has repetition and uses digit; use words 'two pairs of shoes'. 'comfortable in walking' should be 'comfortable for walking'. Suggestion: use simple present for general preferences, match pronouns to plural nouns, and use clear noun phrases like 'two pairs of shoes'.