Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Try to avoid repetition and incomplete phrases. Use a topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific examples. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences for clarity.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must wear the proper uniform every day. Additionally, they are expected to maintain good personal hygiene, such as having a neat haircut. These rules help maintain discipline and a positive learning environment.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Focus on expressing your opinion clearly with supporting reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid repetition.

例: In my opinion, having more rules can benefit students because they promote discipline. For instance, rules help students develop good habits and focus on their studies. However, it is important that the rules are balanced so they do not become too strict or stressful.

提案: Your answer should be more organized and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details about the teacher's qualities. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I have a teacher who does her job very well. She is my class 8 maths teacher and also tutors me in the evening. She is very intelligent and disciplined, which helps me understand the subject better. I really appreciate her teaching style.

× a student must have come in proper uniform and as well as in to be well gro well groomed like in a well maintained haircut or or.

✓ a student must come in proper uniform and also be well groomed, like having a well-maintained haircut.

The phrase 'must have come' incorrectly uses the past participle form 'come' after 'must'. The modal verb 'must' should be followed by the base form of the verb, so 'must come' is correct. Also, the sentence structure was unclear and redundant, so it was simplified for clarity.

× In my opinion students have some impact of this rule because they they shows the discipline for student and these these are the most need for a learner in his life to do in well balance thing.

✓ In my opinion, students are impacted by these rules because they show discipline, and these are most needed for a learner in life to do things in a well-balanced way.

The verb 'shows' is incorrectly used with the plural subject 'students'; it should be 'show' to agree in number. Also, 'have some impact of this rule' is awkward; 'are impacted by these rules' is clearer. The phrase 'most need' should be 'most needed'. The sentence was restructured for grammatical correctness and clarity.

× she's wor was very intelligent and most disciplined teacher.

✓ she was a very intelligent and disciplined teacher.

The phrase 'she's wor was' is incorrect and confusing. The correct past tense form is 'she was'. Also, 'most disciplined' can be simplified to 'disciplined' for clarity. The sentence was corrected to proper past tense and clearer expression.