Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be more natural and clear. Avoid repetition and use proper sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. For example, mention the rules clearly and explain their importance briefly.

例: Yes, there are several rules for students at my school. Firstly, we have a strict dress code to maintain discipline. Secondly, students must be punctual and attentive in class. Lastly, active participation during lessons is encouraged to enhance learning.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons. Also, improve grammar and sentence flow for better effectiveness.

例: Yes, I believe students would benefit from having more rules. For instance, additional rules can help improve discipline and ensure that students study regularly. Moreover, these rules encourage active participation in class, which ultimately helps students achieve their academic goals.

提案: Your answer needs better sentence structure and grammar. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific examples using linking words to explain why the teacher is good.

例: Yes, I have a teacher who does his job very well. His name is Mr. Rajeev, and he teaches mathematics. He explains formulas in various ways, which helps students understand better. Additionally, he is very efficient and patient, making learning enjoyable.

× That rules are common for all students.

✓ Those rules are common for all students.

The demonstrative pronoun 'That' is singular and should be used with singular nouns. Since 'rules' is plural, the correct demonstrative pronoun is 'Those'. Use 'Those' to refer to plural nouns.

× With the help of more rules, they make discipline and study on the time, and they participate in the classroom and achieve their goals.

✓ With the help of more rules, they maintain discipline, study on time, participate in the classroom, and achieve their goals.

The phrase 'make discipline' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'maintain' when referring to discipline. Also, 'study on the time' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'study on time' meaning punctually. The sentence structure is improved by using parallel verbs without 'and' before each verb except the last.

× He is my mathematic teacher and he explain the formulas in various ways and he is very efficient in mathematic he.

✓ He is my mathematics teacher and he explains the formulas in various ways and he is very efficient in mathematics.

The noun 'mathematic' is incorrect; the correct form is 'mathematics'. The verb 'explain' should be 'explains' to agree with the third person singular subject 'he'. The last part 'he is very efficient in mathematic he' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'he is very efficient in mathematics'.