Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be more structured and clear. Start with a direct response to the question, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. For example, explain why the dress code is important and how speaking English helps students.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. Firstly, we have a strict dress code to ensure uniformity among students. Additionally, everyone is encouraged to speak English to improve their language skills. These rules help maintain discipline and promote learning.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Begin with a clear opinion, then support it with reasons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and finish your sentences properly. Try to explain how too many rules might affect students negatively.

例: I don't believe that more rules would benefit students. While schools should teach moral values and proper behaviour, too many rules can restrict students' freedom to express themselves. Therefore, a balance between discipline and freedom is important for their development.

提案: Your answer is positive but could be more concise and better organised. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific examples using linking words. Avoid filler words and ensure grammatical accuracy.

例: Yes, the teachers at my school do their jobs very well. They first teach us moral values and then allow us some freedom to express ourselves. Moreover, they are approachable, so we feel comfortable sharing our problems with them.

× When I was in my school, there are few rules that every student must follow.

✓ When I was in my school, there were few rules that every student must follow.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was in my school'), so the verb 'are' should be in the past tense 'were' to agree with the time frame. This is a 'There be' issue where the verb tense does not match the time context.

× Firstly dress code because it brings uniformity among the among the children and students and no one can dress more and or no one can dress less and everyone should speak in English so that they can improve their.

✓ Firstly, the dress code brings uniformity among the children and students; no one can dress too much or too little, and everyone should speak in English so that they can improve their skills.

The phrase 'among the among the' is repetitive and incorrect. Also, 'dress more and or dress less' is awkward; it should be 'dress too much or too little' to express the intended meaning clearly. Adding commas and conjunctions improves sentence clarity and flow.

× I don't think so that the students would benefit more from morals because school is the place where they teach how we should be in the society, how should we behave with others, but we should have a little bit freedom in our school so that we can express ourselves but imposing more rules on the children, it would impact their career and they and.

✓ I don't think that students would benefit more from more rules because school is the place where they teach us how we should be in society and how we should behave with others. However, we should have a little bit of freedom in our school so that we can express ourselves. Imposing more rules on children would impact their career negatively.

The original sentence has modal verb misuse and awkward phrasing. 'Would benefit more from morals' is incorrect; it should be 'would benefit more from more rules.' Also, 'how should we behave' should be 'how we should behave' to maintain statement form. The sentence is long and confusing; breaking it into smaller sentences improves clarity.

× The teachers in our school are very excellent because they teach us the moral values 1st and then they give us a little bit freedom to express among ourselves.

✓ The teachers in our school are excellent because they teach us moral values first and then give us a little bit of freedom to express ourselves.

'Very excellent' is redundant; 'excellent' alone suffices. '1st' should be spelled out as 'first.' 'A little bit freedom' needs the preposition 'of' to be correct. 'Express among ourselves' is incorrect; it should be 'express ourselves.' These are pronoun and adjective usage issues.

× And yeah, we we'll be very free with our teachers to share any problems and anything and they take care of us better.

✓ We are very free with our teachers to share any problems or anything, and they take care of us well.

The sentence has unnecessary conjunctions and awkward phrasing. 'And yeah, we we'll be' is incorrect and redundant. 'Share any problems and anything' is repetitive; 'problems or anything' is better. 'Take care of us better' should be 'take care of us well' for correct adverb usage. This is an issue with conjunction and sentence structure.