Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız doğal ve anlaşılır, ancak bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve kelime seçimi geliştirilmelidir. Örneğin, 'most strictest' ifadesi yanlıştır, sadece 'strictest' kullanılmalıdır. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizde daha fazla bağlaç kullanarak akıcılığı artırabilirsiniz. Cevabınızı 3-5 cümle arasında tutup, daha spesifik örnekler vermeniz faydalı olur.

例: My school has several strict rules, such as not allowing students to wear jewellery and requiring everyone to wear the school uniform. These rules help maintain discipline and create a sense of equality among students. For example, wearing uniforms reduces distractions and helps students focus on their studies.

提案: Cevabınızda fikirlerinizi net ifade etmişsiniz ancak cümle yapısı biraz basit ve tekrarlamalar mevcut. 'Affect' kelimesi iki kez kullanılmış, bunun yerine eş anlamlılar veya farklı yapılar tercih edilebilir. Ayrıca, cevabınızı bağlaçlarla zenginleştirip, nedenlerini veya örnekleri ekleyerek daha etkili yapabilirsiniz.

例: I value my freedom, so I believe that too many strict rules in high schools can negatively impact students' academic performance and overall school experience. For instance, excessive regulations might make students feel restricted and less motivated to participate actively in class.

提案: Cevabınız açık ve duygusal bir bağ kuruyor, bu çok iyi. Ancak, cümlelerinizde daha çeşitli bağlaçlar kullanarak akıcılığı artırabilirsiniz. Ayrıca, 'she was loving her job' ifadesi yerine 'she loved her job' daha doğrudur. Daha spesifik örnekler vererek cevabınızı zenginleştirebilirsiniz.

例: I had an excellent Turkish teacher in middle school who greatly influenced my values and life. She listened carefully to her students and was passionate about teaching, which made her lessons engaging. For example, she encouraged us to express our opinions freely, which boosted my confidence.

× In my city, my school is one of the most strictest schools and they had lots of rules such as not wearing any jewellery or wearing the school uniform.

✓ In my city, my school is one of the strictest schools and they had lots of rules such as not wearing any jewellery or wearing the school uniform.

The word 'strictest' is already a superlative form, so using 'most' before it is redundant and incorrect. You should use either 'most strict' or 'strictest', but not both together.

× In my city, my school is one of the most strictest schools and they had lots of rules such as not wearing any jewellery or wearing the school uniform.

✓ In my city, my school is one of the strictest schools and it has lots of rules such as not wearing any jewellery or wearing the school uniform.

The sentence starts in present tense ('my school is'), so the verb referring to the school should also be in present tense ('has' instead of 'had') to maintain consistency.

× In my city, my school is one of the most strictest schools and they had lots of rules such as not wearing any jewellery or wearing the school uniform.

✓ In my city, my school is one of the strictest schools and it has lots of rules such as not wearing any jewellery or wearing the school uniform.

The pronoun 'they' is used to refer to 'my school', which is singular. The correct pronoun should be 'it' to match the singular noun.

× In my city, my school is one of the most strictest schools and they had lots of rules such as not wearing any jewellery or wearing the school uniform.

✓ In my city, my school is one of the strictest schools and it has many rules such as not wearing any jewellery or wearing the school uniform.

The word 'lots of' is informal and less precise. 'Many' is more appropriate in formal contexts when referring to countable nouns like 'rules'.

× But they were good rules and I think they helped me much.

✓ But they were good rules and I think they helped me a lot.

The phrase 'helped me much' is not commonly used in affirmative sentences. 'Helped me a lot' is the correct and natural expression.

× I love my freedom and for some people, having lots of strict rules in high schools might affect their studying and affect their school life.

✓ I love my freedom and for some people, having lots of strict rules in high schools can affect their studying and affect their school life.

The modal verb 'might' suggests possibility but 'can' is more appropriate here to express general ability or possibility.

× I had a very good teacher when I was in middle school. She was a Turkish teacher and she changed my values and my life so much.

✓ I had a very good teacher when I was in middle school. She was a Turkish teacher and she changed my values and my life a lot.

The phrase 'so much' is informal and less precise in this context. 'A lot' is more appropriate to express a significant change.

× The reason why she was a good teacher was she was listening to her students and she was loving her job.

✓ The reason why she was a good teacher was that she listened to her students and loved her job.

The phrase 'was listening' and 'was loving' are incorrect here; simple past tense 'listened' and 'loved' should be used. Also, 'was' should be followed by 'that' to introduce the clause properly.