Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as 'to to address' and awkward phrasing like 'using a unified uniform at our class.' To improve, try to respond directly and clearly with correct grammar, and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and natural, for example, by saying 'Yes, when I was at school, we had to wear a uniform, and teachers enforced this rule.'

例: Yes, when I was at school, we had to wear a uniform, and the teachers made sure everyone followed this rule.

提案: Your answer is a bit confusing and contains awkward phrasing like 'what it's actually to be done.' To improve, respond directly with clear and natural language, and use linking words to explain your opinion. For example, you could say, 'No, I believe the current rules are sufficient because they guide students well; however, it's important to allow some freedom for creativity and personal growth.'

例: No, I believe the current rules are sufficient because they guide students well; however, it's important to allow some freedom for creativity and personal growth.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by adding more specific details and linking words to make it more coherent. Also, avoid repeating 'English' unnecessarily. For example, you could say, 'Yes, my English teacher was excellent. Thanks to her teaching methods, I developed fluency and confidence in speaking the language.'

例: Yes, my English teacher was excellent. Thanks to her teaching methods, I developed fluency and confidence in speaking the language.

× we had to to address using a unified uniform at our class and even teachers obliged us to do that.

✓ we had to wear a unified uniform in our class and even teachers obliged us to do that.

The phrase 'address using a unified uniform at our class' is incorrect. The verb 'address' is wrongly used here; the correct verb is 'wear' when talking about clothing. Also, the preposition 'at' should be 'in' when referring to being inside a classroom. Therefore, the sentence should be corrected to 'we had to wear a unified uniform in our class'. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× No, I think that the current schooling system is already instructive with students, so I think what it's actually to be done is to allow for some space for freedom.

✓ No, I think that the current schooling system is already instructive for students, so I think what actually needs to be done is to allow some space for freedom.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect preposition use. 'Instructive with students' should be 'instructive for students' to indicate the system benefits students. The phrase 'what it's actually to be done' is ungrammatical; it should be 'what actually needs to be done'. Also, 'allow for some space for freedom' is better as 'allow some space for freedom' for conciseness. These changes improve sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.