Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều từ lặp lại và sử dụng nhiều từ thừa như "uh" và "it's" gây mất tự nhiên. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy thêm các chi tiết cụ thể hơn về các quy tắc để câu trả lời sinh động và thuyết phục hơn.

例: Yes, there are several important rules at my school. For example, students are not allowed to sleep or talk during lessons to maintain discipline. These rules help create a focused learning environment for everyone.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp lại cụm từ "as you know" và câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối ý và giải thích cụ thể hơn về lợi ích của việc có nhiều quy tắc hơn.

例: Yes, I believe more rules can benefit students because they ensure fairness and equal opportunities. For instance, clear guidelines prevent misunderstandings and help maintain discipline among all students.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không phù hợp (ví dụ: "delicate" thay vì "dedicated"). Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng để diễn đạt ý kiến của mình một cách hiệu quả.

例: Yes, I had a dedicated teacher before. She always encouraged us to work hard and complete all assignments on time. Although her tasks were challenging, they helped me improve a lot.

提案: Bạn nên tránh nói lặp lại và sử dụng các từ không cần thiết như "It's no acceleration to say" gây khó hiểu. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và giải thích rõ ràng lý do bạn thích nhiều quy tắc hơn.

例: I prefer having more rules at school because they ensure fairness among students. Without clear rules, some students might have advantages over others, which is unfair.

× I think here are my teacher before it's, yeah, she's really delicate.

✓ I think here was my teacher before, yeah, she's really delicate.

The phrase 'here are my teacher' is incorrect because 'teacher' is singular and the verb 'are' is plural. The correct form is 'here was my teacher' to match the singular noun and past tense context.

× as you know, the rules keeps everything equal.

✓ as you know, the rules keep everything equal.

The subject 'rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'keep' instead of 'keeps' to agree in number.

× And I think the equity in school it's really necessary to keep every single student have the same benefits.

✓ And I think the equity in school is really necessary to keep every single student having the same benefits.

The phrase 'keep every single student have' is incorrect. After 'keep', the verb should be in the -ing form ('having') to indicate continuous action.

× She's always like want us to do anything like she want.

✓ She always wants us to do anything like she wants.

The verb 'want' needs to be in third person singular form 'wants' to agree with the subject 'she'. Also, 'like' is unnecessary here and can be omitted for clarity.

× And I don't like her stuff that she gives to us is is all.

✓ And I don't like the stuff that she gives to us; that's all.

The phrase 'her stuff that she gives to us is is all' is awkward and ungrammatical. 'The stuff that she gives to us' is clearer, and 'that's all' completes the thought properly.

× And yeah, they just, it's terrible.

✓ And yeah, it's just terrible.

The pronoun 'they' is unclear and inconsistent with the singular subject 'stuff'. 'It's' correctly refers to 'stuff'.

× It's no acceleration to say that the rules are really important and necessary.

✓ It's no exaggeration to say that the rules are really important and necessary.

The word 'acceleration' is incorrect in this context. The correct word is 'exaggeration' meaning an overstatement.

× And the equity in school is really.

✓ And the equity in school is really important.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a predicate adjective or complement to complete the thought.