Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Try to start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. For example, you can say: "Yes, there are many rules at my school. For instance, students must wear the correct uniform and arrive on time. Also, during class, strict rules are enforced to maintain discipline."

例: Yes, there are many rules at my school. For instance, students must wear the correct uniform and arrive on time. Also, during class, strict rules are enforced to maintain discipline.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations. Try to give a clear opinion and support it with reasons using linking words. For example, say: "Yes, I believe more rules can help students develop good habits because they encourage discipline and responsibility."

例: Yes, I believe more rules can help students develop good habits because they encourage discipline and responsibility.

提案: Your answer has good content but needs better structure and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add details with linking words. For example: "Yes, I have had many teachers, but one who was very dedicated is Mr. Kadir. I learned a lot from him because he explained lessons clearly and was always helpful."

例: Yes, I have had many teachers, but one who was very dedicated is Mr. Kadir. I learned a lot from him because he explained lessons clearly and was always helpful.

提案: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Try to give a clear preference and explain why using linking words. For example: "I prefer to have more rules at school because they help maintain order and create a good learning environment."

例: I prefer to have more rules at school because they help maintain order and create a good learning environment.

× I guess in our school there are many rules for students, especially strictly for uniform and timetables that they this they ruled that you can come on time on school and within uniform and also during class there is a very strict role that you can't.

✓ I guess in our school there are many rules for students, especially strict ones about uniform and timetables. They have rules that you must come to school on time and wear the uniform. Also, during class, there is a very strict rule that you must follow.

The original sentence misuses the adverb 'strictly' instead of the adjective 'strict' to describe 'rules'. Also, the sentence structure is confusing and contains unclear phrases like 'they this they ruled'. The correction uses 'strict' as an adjective and clarifies the meaning. In English, adjectives describe nouns directly, while adverbs modify verbs, adjectives, or other adverbs.

× I guess in our school there are many rules for students, especially strictly for uniform and timetables that they this they ruled that you can come on time on school and within uniform and also during class there is a very strict role that you can't.

✓ I guess in our school there are many rules for students, especially strict ones about uniform and timetables. They have rules that you must come to school on time and wear the uniform. Also, during class, there is a very strict rule that you must follow.

The phrase 'they this they ruled' is incorrect and confusing. It seems to misuse pronouns and verbs. The correction replaces this with 'They have rules' to correctly use the pronoun 'they' referring to the school authorities or rules and a proper verb 'have'. Proper pronoun use is essential for clarity.

× I guess in our school there are many rules for students, especially strictly for uniform and timetables that they this they ruled that you can come on time on school and within uniform and also during class there is a very strict role that you can't.

✓ I guess in our school there are many rules for students, especially strict ones about uniform and timetables. They have rules that you must come to school on time and wear the uniform. Also, during class, there is a very strict rule that you must follow.

The original sentence uses 'you can come on time' and 'you can't' incorrectly. 'Can' implies permission or ability, but here the intended meaning is obligation or prohibition. The correction uses 'must' to express obligation and 'must follow' to indicate the rule that must be obeyed. Modal verbs like 'must' are used to express necessity or obligation.

× Yes, I have many teachers but and some are very dedicated teacher for me and the one Mr. Kadir who is a great teacher, I learn a lot of from Sir Mohammed Kadir.

✓ Yes, I have many teachers, and some are very dedicated teachers for me. One of them is Mr. Kadir, who is a great teacher. I have learned a lot from Sir Mohammed Kadir.

The original sentence uses 'I learn' which is present tense, but the context suggests past experience. The correction changes 'I learn' to 'I have learned' to correctly use the present perfect tense indicating experience up to now. Also, 'teacher' should be plural 'teachers' when referring to 'some'. Proper tense usage is important to convey the correct time frame.

× Yes, I have many teachers but and some are very dedicated teacher for me and the one Mr. Kadir who is a great teacher, I learn a lot of from Sir Mohammed Kadir.

✓ Yes, I have many teachers, and some are very dedicated teachers for me. One of them is Mr. Kadir, who is a great teacher. I have learned a lot from Sir Mohammed Kadir.

The phrase 'some are very dedicated teacher' is incorrect because 'some' refers to multiple, so the noun should be plural 'teachers'. The correction changes 'teacher' to 'teachers' to agree in number with 'some'. Singular and plural agreement is essential for grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I have many teachers but and some are very dedicated teacher for me and the one Mr. Kadir who is a great teacher, I learn a lot of from Sir Mohammed Kadir.

✓ Yes, I have many teachers, and some are very dedicated teachers for me. One of them is Mr. Kadir, who is a great teacher. I have learned a lot from Sir Mohammed Kadir.

The phrase 'I learn a lot of from' is incorrect because 'a lot of' should be followed by a noun. The correction removes 'of' to say 'I have learned a lot from', which is correct. 'A lot' can be used as an adverb meaning 'much' without 'of' when not followed by a noun.

× Yes, I think the rules are important for students because uh, they, when we, uh, provide any rules to the student, then student should be, uh, able to do that. And it's good for these habits. And also, you know, yeah.

✓ Yes, I think the rules are important for students because when we provide any rules to the students, they should be able to follow them. It is good for developing these habits.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and articles: 'to the student' should be 'to the students' to match plural, and 'student should be able to do that' is unclear. The correction uses 'students' and 'they' properly and replaces 'do that' with 'follow them' for clarity. Correct pronoun and article use improves sentence clarity.

× Yes, I think the rules are important for students because uh, they, when we, uh, provide any rules to the student, then student should be, uh, able to do that. And it's good for these habits. And also, you know, yeah.

✓ Yes, I think the rules are important for students because when we provide any rules to the students, they should be able to follow them. It is good for developing these habits.

The phrase 'it's good for these habits' is vague and awkward. The correction changes it to 'It is good for developing these habits' to clearly express the benefit of rules in forming good habits. Using appropriate adjectives and phrases enhances meaning.

× I prefer morals because we can allow suitable role for that.

✓ I prefer more rules because we can allow suitable rules for that.

The original sentence uses 'morals' instead of 'more rules' and 'role' instead of 'rule'. Also, 'we can allow suitable role' is unclear. The correction changes 'morals' to 'more rules' and 'role' to 'rules' to match the intended meaning. Correct pronoun and word choice is necessary for clarity.