Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In your answer, try to use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, say "There are certain rules for students at my school," instead of "As per my perspective, there is a certain rules." Also, be more concise and clear, and avoid repeating phrases like "before 5 minutes before." Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: There are several rules for students at my school. For instance, students must arrive at least five minutes before lectures start and wear the proper uniform. These rules help maintain discipline and punctuality.

提案: Your answer has many hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to speak more fluently and complete your thoughts. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to explain your reasons clearly. For example, say "Yes, I believe students would benefit from more rules because it helps them develop discipline."

例: Yes, I believe students would benefit from more rules because following them helps improve their discipline and responsibility. This can lead to better academic performance and behavior.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to give a direct response with supporting details. Avoid filler words like "uh" and complete your sentences. For example, say "Yes, I have had several dedicated teachers who were passionate about teaching and helped me learn a lot."

例: Yes, I have had several dedicated teachers who were very passionate about teaching. They made lessons interesting and helped me understand difficult topics better.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases like "too much ketchup and the restaurant." Try to express your opinion clearly and use simple, relevant vocabulary. For example, say "I prefer more rules at school because they help maintain order, but rules should not be too strict."

例: I prefer having more rules at school because they help keep order and discipline. However, the rules should be reasonable and not too strict so that students can feel comfortable.

× As per my perspective, there is a certain rules for the student at my school.

✓ As per my perspective, there are certain rules for the students at my school.

The subject 'rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'rules' and 'students' should both be plural to agree in number. This is a singular and plural issue.

× a student should be on the time to their lectures and at least reach to the school before 5 minutes before to start lectures

✓ a student should be on time to their lectures and at least reach the school 5 minutes before the lectures start

The phrase 'on the time' should be 'on time'. The preposition 'to' after 'reach' is incorrect; it should be omitted. Also, 'before 5 minutes before' is redundant; it should be '5 minutes before'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions.

× and as well have proper uniform and they are not allowed to.

✓ and also have proper uniforms and they are not allowed to do otherwise.

The pronoun 'they' is unclear and the sentence is incomplete. 'Uniform' should be plural 'uniforms' to match 'students'. The sentence needs completion for clarity. This is an incorrect use of pronouns.

× Yes, I believe the students, uh, were benefit more from rules, uh, in order to uh, follow those rules and uh, maintains their ability into the rules.

✓ Yes, I believe the students would benefit more from rules in order to follow those rules and maintain their ability to do so.

The modal verb 'would' is appropriate here instead of 'were'. Also, 'maintains' should be 'maintain' to agree with the plural subject 'students'. This is a modal verb usage issue.

× Yes, Sir, I have several time, uh, much dedicated teacher who are the very, uh, interesting to pass their knowledge to the students, especially as me and I was a like a high uh.

✓ Yes, Sir, I have had several dedicated teachers who are very interesting in passing their knowledge to the students, especially to me when I was in high school.

The phrase 'have several time' is incorrect; it should be 'have had several times' or 'have had several dedicated teachers'. 'Was a like a high' is unclear and should be 'when I was in high school'. This is a past tense and sentence structure issue.

× Uh, I believe, uh, to have more rules is uh, better than fewer rules at schools.

✓ I believe that having more rules is better than having fewer rules at school.

The phrase 'to have more rules is better' is awkward; 'having more rules is better' is correct. Also, 'schools' should be singular 'school' to refer to the general concept. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers.

× Uh, but in somehow like it depends. Uh, uh, students shouldn't be like too much, uh, ketchup and the restaurant under the restaurant and the school, but they are normal and basic rules is fine.

✓ But somehow, it depends. Students shouldn't be too strict or controlled like in a restaurant, but normal and basic rules are fine at school.

The original sentence is unclear and contains unrelated words like 'ketchup' and 'restaurant' that do not fit the context. The sentence structure is incorrect and needs rephrasing for clarity. This is a sentence structure error.