Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit long and slightly unclear. Try to be more direct and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy. Also, clarify your points with specific examples.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must arrive on time and follow the dress code. These rules help maintain discipline and create a good learning environment.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid vague words like 'mutiny'. Also, use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

例: I think students benefit most from having only essential rules. If there are too many rules, students might feel frustrated and ignore them. Therefore, schools should focus on important rules that teach responsibility.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has some grammar errors. Try to finish your thoughts clearly and use correct verb forms. Also, add linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated maths teacher. He encouraged every student to do their best and always gave us homework. If we failed to complete it, he would give us extra tasks to help us improve.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'stuff'. Use more precise vocabulary and linking words to connect your ideas.

例: I prefer fewer rules at school, focusing on important ones like arriving on time and behaving properly in class. This way, students can easily follow the rules without feeling overwhelmed.

提案: Your answer has repetition and some awkward phrasing. Try to avoid repeating words and use correct prepositions. Also, organize your answer with linking words for clarity.

例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher in class 7. He strictly enforced school rules and punished students who were late. He also contacted our parents if we misbehaved, so we had to follow his rules carefully.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammar mistakes. Try to complete your sentences and avoid repetition. Use linking words to express your ideas clearly and logically.

例: No, I would not like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school. Teaching requires managing students and enforcing rules, which can be stressful. I prefer a flexible job that allows me to enjoy my life more.

× Yes, there are many rules for students at my school because rules are what makes a person's life well structured.

✓ Yes, there are many rules for students at my school because rules are what make a person's life well structured.

The subject 'rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' instead of 'makes' to agree in number. In English, plural subjects take plural verbs.

× So in my school we have the rule that we have to be there within a time limit and there are different rules about it.

✓ So in my school we have the rule that we have to be there within a time limit and there are different rules regarding it.

The preposition 'about' is less appropriate here; 'regarding' is more suitable when referring to rules related to a specific topic or condition.

× So we have to abide all these rules to just leave our school life.

✓ So we have to abide by all these rules to just live our school life.

The verb 'abide' requires the preposition 'by' to indicate compliance. Also, 'leave our school life' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'live our school life.'

× Will students do benefit from rules?

✓ Do students benefit from rules?

The modal 'will' is incorrectly used here. The correct question form for present simple is 'Do students benefit from rules?'. 'Will' is for future tense, which is not appropriate here.

× But if there's more rules, then there will be more mutiny among students to not follow the rules.

✓ But if there are more rules, then there will be more mutiny among students not to follow the rules.

The phrase 'there's' is a contraction of 'there is' which is singular, but 'rules' is plural, so it should be 'there are'. Also, 'to not follow' is better as 'not to follow' for correct infinitive placement.

× Well yes, I did really have a dedicated teacher.

✓ Well yes, I really had a dedicated teacher.

The auxiliary 'did' is unnecessary here because the simple past 'had' already indicates past tense. Using both is redundant and ungrammatical.

× He used to pursue every student in the class to perform well and do all the tasks.

✓ He used to encourage every student in the class to perform well and do all the tasks.

The verb 'pursue' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is likely 'encourage' or 'motivate'. 'Pursue' means to chase or follow, which is not appropriate here.

× He always gave us for homework and whenever we fail to do that, he would always punish us.

✓ He always gave us homework, and whenever we failed to do it, he would always punish us.

The phrase 'gave us for homework' is incomplete; it should be 'gave us homework'. Also, tense consistency requires 'failed' instead of 'fail' to match past context.

× But he had.

✓ But he did.

The sentence 'But he had.' is incomplete and unclear. It likely intends to affirm previous statement, so 'But he did.' is appropriate to complete the thought.

× So I think fewer rules are better than abundant of rules because fewer rules are easy to follow by students.

✓ So I think fewer rules are better than an abundance of rules because fewer rules are easy for students to follow.

The phrase 'abundant of rules' is incorrect; the correct form is 'an abundance of rules'. Also, 'easy to follow by students' should be 'easy for students to follow' for correct idiomatic expression.

× So this teacher was really strict among about the rules in the school.

✓ So this teacher was really strict about the rules in the school.

The phrase 'strict among about' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'strict about' when referring to rules or regulations.

× So he was really strict and always we had to maintain ourselves According to him.

✓ So he was really strict and we always had to conduct ourselves according to him.

The phrase 'maintain ourselves' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'conduct ourselves'. Also, 'According to him' should not be capitalized and is better placed at the end of the sentence.

× Not really I won't.

✓ Not really, I wouldn't.

The phrase 'I won't' (I will not) is incorrect here because the context is about willingness or preference, which requires the conditional 'would' form: 'I wouldn't'.

× I don't really want to be a teacher because it's too much of A hassle to teach students and make them follow their rules.

✓ I don't really want to be a teacher because it's too much of a hassle to teach students and make them follow their rules.

The article 'A' should be lowercase 'a' in 'too much of a hassle'. Articles in the middle of a sentence are not capitalized unless starting a sentence or proper noun.