Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, mention specific rules and explain their importance briefly.

例: Yes, there were several rules at my school, such as following a dress code and being punctual. I always tried to be on time, but sometimes I forgot and was reminded by my class teacher. These rules helped maintain discipline among students.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Focus on expressing your opinion clearly with supporting reasons. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because' to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I believe more rules can help students become more punctual. For example, a dress code promotes equality, and being on time encourages students to be energetic and focused during lessons.

提案: Your answer is confusing and does not directly address the question. Try to clearly describe a dedicated teacher you had, explaining why you think they were dedicated, using simple and correct sentences.

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher at school. He always prepared lessons carefully and helped students understand difficult topics. His commitment inspired me to study harder.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and does not answer the question. Always provide a clear opinion and explain your choice with reasons or examples.

例: I prefer to have fewer rules at school because it allows students to be more creative and enjoy learning without feeling restricted.

提案: Your answer is vague and lacks detail. Provide a clear response with examples or reasons to support your answer.

例: Yes, I had a really strict teacher who enforced rules strictly and expected students to complete all assignments on time. Although strict, he helped us improve our discipline.

提案: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Clearly state your opinion and explain why you feel that way, using proper sentence structure.

例: No, I would not like to work as a teacher in a school without rules because rules are important to maintain order and help students learn effectively.

× Yet there were many roles at my school I remember such as dress code and punctual on time I remember I will try to be on a time but sometime I got forget and I got finished by my class in charge.

✓ Yet there were many rules at my school I remember such as dress code and punctuality. I remember I tried to be on time but sometimes I forgot and I was scolded by my class in charge.

The word 'roles' is incorrect here; it should be 'rules' (plural noun) to refer to regulations. 'Punctual on time' is incorrect; 'punctuality' is the correct noun form. 'I will try to be on a time' should be 'I tried to be on time' to match past tense. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb). 'I got forget' is incorrect; it should be 'I forgot' (past tense). 'I got finished by my class in charge' is incorrect; it should be 'I was scolded by my class in charge' to convey the intended meaning.

× Yes, I think UH rules next to them more punctual, such as the dress code that shows the equality among all the students and the role of her being on time that makes student energetic and put restriction on their enjoyable mood.

✓ Yes, I think more rules help them be more punctual, such as the dress code that shows equality among all the students and the rule of being on time that makes students energetic and puts restrictions on their enjoyment.

The phrase 'UH rules next to them more punctual' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'more rules help them be more punctual'. 'Role of her being on time' should be 'rule of being on time'. 'Makes student energetic' should be 'makes students energetic' (plural). 'Put restriction on their enjoyable mood' should be 'puts restrictions on their enjoyment' for correct verb agreement and noun usage.

× Yes, in my school I had a really dedicated childhood and people prepared. He is a restricted teacher. He does not cooperate with any children. He is also now very dangerous.

✓ Yes, in my school I had a really dedicated teacher who was well prepared. He is a strict teacher. He does not cooperate with any children. He is also very strict now.

'Dedicated childhood and people prepared' is incorrect; it should be 'dedicated teacher who was well prepared'. 'Restricted teacher' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'strict'. 'He is also now very dangerous' is incorrect and likely a misuse of 'dangerous'; it should be 'He is also very strict now' to maintain meaning.

× Yes, I prefer.

✓ Yes, I prefer fewer rules.

The sentence 'Yes, I prefer.' is incomplete and lacks an object. It should specify what is preferred, e.g., 'Yes, I prefer fewer rules' to complete the thought.

× Guess I had a really strict teacher in my life.

✓ I guess I have had a really strict teacher in my life.

The sentence lacks the subject 'I' at the beginning and the tense should be present perfect 'have had' to indicate experience up to now. 'Guess' alone is informal and incomplete.

× No, I don't like to be a teacher in rural preschool.

✓ No, I don't like to be a teacher at a rural preschool.

The preposition 'in' is less appropriate here; 'at' is used to indicate working at a specific place. Also, 'a' is needed before 'rural preschool' as it is a singular countable noun.