Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ không chính xác như "supply more" và "phoning class". Hãy tập trung vào việc trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must wear uniforms to promote equality among everyone. Also, using phones during class is not allowed because it can distract us from learning.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và mạch lạc, nhiều từ không phù hợp và câu không hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và giải thích lý do cụ thể để làm rõ quan điểm của mình.

例: Yes, I think more rules could help students because they create a safer and more organized environment for learning.

提案: Bạn cần sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Câu trả lời nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng và chi tiết cụ thể về giáo viên đó. Tránh sử dụng từ không đúng như "give up a nurse".

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated literature teacher in secondary school. She was always patient and never gave up on her students.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề, sau đó giải thích lý do cụ thể và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp.

例: I prefer fewer rules at school because it gives us more freedom to express ourselves and act independently.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và giải thích cụ thể về giáo viên nghiêm khắc đó.

例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher who was also dedicated. She worked hard to help us learn and never gave up on any student.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề, giải thích lý do cụ thể và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp để làm rõ quan điểm của bạn.

例: No, I would not like to work as a teacher in a school without rules because it would be difficult to maintain discipline and create a good learning environment.

× Uh yes there are some regulations at my school that the student must follow.

✓ Uh yes there are some regulations at my school that the students must follow.

The noun 'student' should be plural 'students' to agree with 'some regulations' referring to multiple students. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× We can use our phoning class because it can distract us from learning.

✓ We cannot use our phones in class because they can distract us from learning.

The phrase 'phoning class' is incorrect; it should be 'phones in class'. Also, 'can distract us from learning' is correct, but the sentence context suggests prohibition, so 'cannot use' fits better.

× Yeah, uh, Harimaru's name. Umm, safer and modish supply environment for students. But it is.

✓ Yeah, um, I think a safer and more modern school environment would benefit students.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs restructuring to form a complete and coherent sentence.

× But I was in secondary school, my literature teacher with the most dedicated teacher I have ever met.

✓ When I was in secondary school, my literature teacher was the most dedicated teacher I have ever met.

The sentence lacks the past tense verb 'was' to link the subject and complement properly.

× She never let her down or give up a nurse.

✓ She never let us down or gave up on us.

The phrase 'give up a nurse' is incorrect and unclear. The correct phrase is 'gave up on us' to express perseverance.

× I love if yes, there are fewer, fewer rules at my school because it it it give us more freedoms.

✓ I would love it if there were fewer rules at my school because it would give us more freedom.

'Fewer' is correct for countable nouns like 'rules'. 'Give' should be 'would give' to match the conditional mood. 'Freedoms' is usually uncountable as 'freedom'.

× She did everything for us to take in knowledge, never give up on us and just lie down she.

✓ She did everything for us to gain knowledge, never gave up on us, and never let us down.

The verbs need to be in past tense to maintain consistency. 'Lie down she' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'never let us down'.

× No, I would not because teaching is not my profession and. Always at a roof free school which is a very. Not great I guess.

✓ No, I would not because teaching is not my profession, and being at a rule-free school is not great, I guess.

The sentence is fragmented and missing modal verb structure. 'Roof free school' should be 'rule-free school'. The sentence needs to be combined properly.