Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и избыточные слова, что снижает естественность речи. Следует избегать повторов и использовать более точные выражения. Также стоит улучшить структуру ответа, начав с прямого утверждения, а затем добавив детали с помощью связующих слов.

例: Yes, my school has several rules for students. For example, we have a dress code that requires everyone to wear a white T-shirt and black pants. I think this rule helps maintain discipline and a sense of unity among students.

提案: Ответ неясен и содержит много пауз и повторов, что затрудняет понимание. Рекомендуется формулировать мысли чётко и логично, используя связующие слова для объяснения своей точки зрения.

例: In my opinion, having more rules could help students behave better and create a more organized environment. However, it's important that these rules are fair and not too strict.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и повторения, что снижает качество речи. Следует использовать правильные времена и избегать излишних повторов, а также структурировать ответ с помощью связующих слов.

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher named Tatiana. She was kind and always willing to help us whenever we needed extra time or support. Her dedication made learning easier and more enjoyable.

提案: Ответ содержит много повторов и нечетких выражений. Рекомендуется говорить более уверенно и использовать связующие слова для объяснения причин своего мнения.

例: I prefer fewer rules at school because students can have more freedom to express their opinions and develop their own sense of responsibility. This helps them become better individuals.

提案: Ответ содержит повторы и нечеткие формулировки. Следует избегать лишних слов и использовать более точные выражения, а также структурировать ответ логично.

例: Yes, I had a strict teacher named Tatiana. She was very strict and would lower our scores even for a single mistake. Although it was tough, it motivated us to be more careful.

提案: Ответ нечеткий и содержит много пауз и повторов. Рекомендуется выражать мысли ясно и использовать связующие слова для объяснения своей позиции.

例: I don't want to be a teacher because I prefer working in petroleum engineering. Also, I believe schools need rules to help students develop discipline, so I wouldn't want to teach in a rule-free school.

× Are there any rules for student at your school?

✓ Are there any rules for students at your school?

The noun 'student' should be plural 'students' because the question refers to rules applying to multiple students, not just one.

× Of course our schools have a rules for students.

✓ Of course our school has rules for students.

The subject 'school' should be singular to match the context, and 'rules' should not have the article 'a' because 'rules' is plural.

× some of them I can uh, tell you it's uh, having a dress code.

✓ some of them I can tell you are having a dress code.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect here; 'some of them' refers to plural 'rules', so the verb should agree in plural form 'are'.

× Everybody should have a white T-shirt and black, uh, pants.

✓ Everybody should have a white T-shirt and black pants.

No comma is needed between 'black' and 'pants'; 'pants' is plural and correctly used here.

× I for my opinion, uh, if the students will have more rules and they will, they will be good for, for this roles.

✓ In my opinion, if the students have more rules, it will be good for these roles.

'Will' is incorrectly used after 'if'; in conditional sentences, present tense is used after 'if'. Also, 'roles' should be 'rules' and 'this' should be 'these' to match plural.

× I think they should have more benefits and uh, yeah, that's OK.

✓ I think they should have more benefits, and yeah, that's OK.

No major grammar error here; added a comma for clarity.

× Her name was Tatiana and she she were kind.

✓ Her name was Tatiana and she was kind.

The verb 'were' is incorrect for singular third person; it should be 'was'.

× She was a kind, she were very dedicated.

✓ She was kind; she was very dedicated.

Again, 'were' should be 'was' for singular third person past tense.

× If we need some, we if we had need some time, she could help and to make everything to make us.

✓ If we needed some time, she could help us and do everything to assist us.

The sentence is confusing and ungrammatical; corrected to proper conditional past tense and clearer structure.

× I would like to prefer, I would like to prefer fewer, fewer rolls at school because uh students, uh, will be more, will have more freedom and will have, uh, will have more uh, their own opinion to uh, to be a good people and make their own rules.

✓ I would prefer fewer rules at school because students will have more freedom and will be able to have their own opinions, be good people, and make their own rules.

'Rolls' should be 'rules'; 'like to prefer' is redundant, 'would prefer' is correct; sentence restructured for clarity and grammar.

× Yeah, I had, yeah, I had one strict teacher.

✓ Yes, I had one strict teacher.

Repeated phrase 'yeah, I had' is redundant; simplified for clarity.

× Her name was Tatiana and she was really strict.

✓ Her name was Tatiana and she was really strict.

No correction needed; sentence is correct.

× if we had only one mistake she, she could, uh, make, she could make our, uh, score a little bit fewer because of one, only one, uh, mistake.

✓ If we made only one mistake, she could lower our score a little because of that one mistake.

'Had' should be 'made' for mistakes; 'fewer' is incorrect for 'score', use 'lower'; sentence restructured for clarity.

× I don't like to work with children.

✓ I don't like working with children.

After 'like', the gerund form 'working' is more natural than the infinitive 'to work'.

× I can be a teacher of petroleum, but not to teach, uh, something in Rule free school because every school should have rules to make, uh, to make the children more strict.

✓ I can be a petroleum teacher, but not teach in a rule-free school because every school should have rules to make children more disciplined.

'Teacher of petroleum' is better as 'petroleum teacher'; 'in Rule free school' should be 'in a rule-free school'; 'more strict' is better as 'more disciplined' for clarity.