Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and unclear words like 'UH' and 'trout'. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about the rules.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school to maintain discipline. For example, we have a strict dress code where boys must wear traditional shirts and trousers. These rules help students follow a strict timetable and focus on their studies effectively.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using clearer linking words and more specific examples. Also, avoid vague phrases and try to explain your opinion more clearly.

例: I believe that some rules are necessary to prevent distractions during study time. However, too many rules can make students feel restricted. Therefore, rules should be flexible to balance discipline and freedom.

提案: Your answer has good content but needs clearer structure and grammar. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and explain your points with linking words. Also, clarify unclear phrases like 'stitching a style'.

例: Yes, I had many dedicated teachers in school. For example, Miss Taylor taught me English for three years. She was very patient and motivated me with her effective teaching style.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to organize your ideas logically with linking words and complete your sentences. Also, avoid vague statements and explain your opinion clearly.

例: I think rules are important because they help students manage their time and study discipline. However, too many rules can make students feel restricted and distracted. So, I prefer a balanced number of rules.

提案: Your answer has many grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'mystery teacher' and 'got a Spanish'. Avoid filler words and complete your sentences with specific examples.

例: Yes, I had a strict teacher in high school who punished us if we were late to class. For instance, he would give us extra homework as a punishment.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and contains many filler words. Try to speak more fluently and organize your ideas clearly. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I would like to work in a rule-free school because it would allow me to be more flexible. Teaching in such an environment would give me freedom to use creative methods and help students learn without restrictions.

× Well, I rules are really important for maintaining discipline at school campus.

✓ Well, rules are really important for maintaining discipline at the school campus.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'I rules' which is ungrammatical. The correct form is simply 'rules' without 'I'. Also, 'at school campus' needs the definite article 'the' before 'school campus'.

× It also helps children to maintain strict timetable and to focus on their studies regularly.

✓ It also helps children to maintain a strict timetable and to focus on their studies regularly.

The phrase 'maintain strict timetable' is missing the article 'a' before 'strict timetable'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article.

× In my school, there is a strict dress code UH, where students are not allowed to change in it.

✓ In my school, there is a strict dress code, where students are not allowed to change it.

The phrase 'change in it' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'change it' because 'change' here is a transitive verb and does not require the preposition 'in'.

× Especially boys have to wear traditional UH shirts and trout.

✓ Especially boys have to wear traditional shirts and trousers.

The word 'trout' is incorrect; the intended word is 'trousers' which is plural. Also, 'traditional' should directly modify 'shirts and trousers' without 'UH' which seems like a filler or error.

× Some rules are really important for keeping the study without distractions, and some rules sometimes make children feel that they are really restricted in freedom.

✓ Some rules are really important for keeping study free from distractions, but some rules sometimes make children feel that their freedom is really restricted.

The phrase 'keeping the study without distractions' is awkward and ungrammatical. It should be 'keeping study free from distractions'. Also, 'restricted in freedom' is better expressed as 'their freedom is restricted'. The conjunction 'and' is better replaced with 'but' to show contrast.

× When I was in school, I got many dedicated teachers who were really knowledgeable, patient, and far more approachable than I thought.

✓ When I was in school, I had many dedicated teachers who were really knowledgeable, patient, and far more approachable than I thought.

The verb 'got' is informal and less appropriate here; 'had' is the correct past tense verb to indicate possession or experience in this context.

× Uh, one teacher for example, I can say, uh, Miss Taylor, who taught me English at high school for three years.

✓ For example, one teacher I can mention is Miss Taylor, who taught me English in high school for three years.

The original sentence is fragmented and awkward. Reordering and clarifying the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I was really impressed by stitching a style who is helped me to motivate.

✓ I was really impressed by her teaching style, which helped to motivate me.

The phrase 'stitching a style' is incorrect; it should be 'teaching style'. Also, 'who is helped me to motivate' is ungrammatical; it should be 'which helped to motivate me'. The pronoun 'her' is needed to refer to the teacher.

× And rules help children to maintain more disciplined way to study, to time management and to exercise.

✓ Rules help children to maintain a more disciplined way to study, manage time, and exercise.

The phrase 'more disciplined way' requires the article 'a'. Also, 'to time management' is incorrect; it should be 'manage time' to parallel the other verbs.

× But some rules really distract students because they fail them.

✓ But some rules really distract students because they restrict them.

The phrase 'because they fail them' is unclear and ungrammatical. The intended meaning is likely that rules restrict students, so 'restrict them' is a better choice.

× They are they have no freedom.

✓ They feel they have no freedom.

The original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. Adding 'feel' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× So I think more rules cannot.

✓ So I think there should not be more rules.

The original sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. The correction completes the thought properly.

× Yes, I got a mystery teacher when I was in high school.

✓ Yes, I had a strict teacher when I was in high school.

The word 'mystery' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'strict'. Also, 'got' is informal; 'had' is more appropriate.

× He really is caught and punished us when we did something wrong.

✓ He really caught and punished us when we did something wrong.

The phrase 'is caught' is incorrect in past tense narration; it should be 'caught' to match past tense.

× For example, if we became late in class.

✓ For example, if we were late to class.

The phrase 'became late' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'were late'. Also, 'in class' is better expressed as 'to class' in this context.

× He uh, got a Spanish.

✓ He gave us a punishment.

The phrase 'got a Spanish' is unclear and ungrammatical. The intended meaning is that he punished the students.

× He gave us punishments, uh, and I have.

✓ He gave us punishments, and I have experienced them.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'experienced them' completes the thought.

× Yes, uh, definitely I'd, uh, like to be a teacher, teacher in the role free school.

✓ Yes, definitely I'd like to be a teacher in a rule-free school.

The phrase 'role free school' is incorrect; it should be 'rule-free school'. Also, removing repeated words improves clarity.

× I like a teaching profession and Rose free school would help me to become more flexible and, uh, it will give me more freedom and uh, I will teach students, uh, in a restriction free environment.

✓ I like the teaching profession and a rule-free school would help me become more flexible; it will give me more freedom, and I will teach students in a restriction-free environment.

The phrase 'a teaching profession' should be 'the teaching profession' as it refers to a specific profession. 'Rose free school' is a mishearing of 'rule-free school'. Also, 'restriction free' should be hyphenated as 'restriction-free'.

× So I believe if I get a chance.

✓ So I believe I will do well if I get a chance.

The sentence is incomplete and needs completion to express a full thought.