Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding repetition and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add specific details using linking words. For example, avoid repeating words like 'know' and use correct sentence structures.

例: Yes, there are many rules for students at my school. For instance, wearing a school uniform is very important because it helps to identify students easily and promotes a sense of unity.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly and avoid redundancy. For example, start with your opinion and then give reasons with proper sentence structure.

例: No, I don't think students would benefit from having more rules because too many rules can make them feel frustrated, and as a result, they may find it difficult to concentrate on their studies.

提案: Improve clarity and vocabulary. The phrase 'sold my problems' is incorrect; you might mean 'solved my problems'. Also, add linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I have had a really dedicated teacher. My maths teacher was very kind and always solved my problems patiently without getting irritated.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains contradictory ideas. Clarify your opinion and use linking words to explain your reasons logically. Also, avoid redundancy and grammatical errors.

例: I prefer to have fewer rules at school because it is easier for students to follow them, which helps maintain discipline effectively.

提案: Try to use correct grammar and avoid informal phrases like 'anger issue'. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific examples to support your points.

例: Yes, I have had a strict teacher who often got frustrated quickly and scolded me without reason. Sometimes, she even blamed me for mistakes I did not make, which was quite unfair.

提案: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary. Avoid repetition and clarify your reasons using linking words. For example, start with your opinion and then explain why.

例: No, I would not like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because I am not interested in teaching, and I also lack the patience required to manage students effectively.

× Yes, of course there are lots of rules for students at school, but more specific I remember wearing school uniform is very crucial for all as it helps to know know about the identity of course.

✓ Yes, of course there are lots of rules for students at school, but more specifically I remember wearing the school uniform is very crucial for all as it helps to know about the identity, of course.

The phrase 'more specific' should be 'more specifically' to correctly use the adverb form modifying the verb 'remember'. Also, 'school uniform' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific uniform. The repeated word 'know' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'know'. Adding a comma before 'of course' improves sentence clarity.

× No, I don't think so. That more and more rules for students may benefit because they get frustrated and they cannot do focus on their studies.

✓ No, I don't think so. More and more rules for students may not benefit them because they get frustrated and cannot focus on their studies.

The word 'That' at the beginning of the sentence is unnecessary and incorrect here. Also, 'cannot do focus' is incorrect; it should be 'cannot focus'. The sentence structure is improved by removing 'That' and correcting the verb phrase.

× Yes, my maths teacher was really dedicated and she was very sweet and also she always sold my problems without getting irritated.

✓ Yes, my maths teacher was really dedicated and she was very sweet and also she always solved my problems without getting irritated.

The verb 'sold' is incorrect in this context; the correct past tense verb is 'solved' as it refers to resolving problems. This is a past tense issue where the wrong verb form was used.

× Well, according to me, I prefer to have fewer rules at schools because it becomes more effortless for students to follow these rules and they cannot break the rules.

✓ Well, according to me, I prefer to have fewer rules at school because it becomes more effortless for students to follow these rules and they cannot break the rules.

The word 'schools' should be singular 'school' because the context refers to the student's own school in general. Using plural here is incorrect as it changes the meaning.

× Well I really remember I have had a really strict teacher and she has anger issue so she easily get frustrated and scold me without any reason and sometimes she scold me for the wrong mistakes which I did not do.

✓ Well, I really remember I had a really strict teacher and she has anger issues so she easily gets frustrated and scolds me without any reason and sometimes she scolds me for mistakes I did not make.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. 'I have had' should be 'I had' to maintain past tense. 'Anger issue' should be plural 'anger issues'. The verbs 'get' and 'scold' need third person singular forms 'gets' and 'scolds' to agree with 'she'. Also, 'wrong mistakes' is redundant; 'mistakes' suffices. 'Which I did not do' is better expressed as 'I did not make'.

× I don't think so that that I can teach students and role free school because I don't have interest in this field and I also don't have patience to teach the students.

✓ I don't think that I can teach students in a rule-free school because I don't have interest in this field and I also don't have the patience to teach students.

The repeated 'that that' is incorrect; only one 'that' is needed. 'Role free school' is a misspelling; it should be 'rule-free school'. The preposition 'in' is needed before 'a rule-free school'. 'Patience' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'teach the students' can be simplified to 'teach students' for general meaning.