Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하며, 문법 오류를 줄이기 위해 주어와 동사의 일치를 신경 써야 합니다.

例: Yes, when I was in high school, students had to wear school uniforms, avoid running in the corridors, and were not allowed to smoke.

提案: 'Lowe's'라는 단어가 문맥에 맞지 않고, 어휘 선택이 부적절합니다. 또한, 문장 연결이 자연스럽지 않아 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 적절한 단어 선택과 연결어 사용에 주의하세요.

例: Yes, I think more rules are good for students because they can help improve self-control and reduce violence among students.

提案: 문장이 매우 불명확하고 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 문법과 어휘 사용에 주의하며, 간결하고 명확한 문장으로 답변을 구성해야 합니다.

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher in high school. She inspired me a lot, and her influence has lasted for many years.

提案: 'lures'라는 단어가 잘못 사용되었고, 문법 오류가 있습니다. 올바른 단어 선택과 문장 구조를 개선하여 명확한 답변을 하도록 하세요.

例: I prefer to have more rules because they can reduce fights among students and help teachers manage the class better.

提案: 문장 연결이 부자연스럽고, 시제와 문법 오류가 있습니다. 연결어를 적절히 사용하고 시제를 일관되게 유지하세요.

例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher in middle school. However, her dedication was excellent, and thanks to her, I improved my mathematics skills.

提案: 'little preschool'이라는 표현이 부적절하며, 문장이 명확하지 않습니다. 의미 전달을 위해 정확한 어휘 선택과 문장 구성을 연습하세요.

例: I wouldn't like to work in a school without rules because it would be hard to supervise students and maintain authority.

× Yes, when I was in high school, students should wear school uniforms and do not run in the corridor and do not also do not smoke.

✓ Yes, when I was in high school, students had to wear school uniforms and were not allowed to run in the corridor or smoke.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'should' to describe past rules, which is inappropriate. 'Should' is a modal verb expressing advice or obligation in the present or future, not past rules. The correct modal verb for past obligation is 'had to'. Also, the negative commands are awkwardly expressed; 'were not allowed to' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I think Lowe's is good for students because rules can improve students self-control and it can reduce students violence.

✓ Yes, I think rules are good for students because they can improve students' self-control and reduce student violence.

The original sentence misuses 'Lowe's' which seems to be a typo for 'rules'. Also, 'students self-control' lacks possessive apostrophe, and 'students violence' should be 'student violence' as 'violence' is uncountable and refers collectively to students. The correction fixes these quantifier and possessive errors.

× Yes, when I was in high school, my student his Perry dedication, so I like her. So I had touched it in now maybe it lasted for it last for seven years.

✓ Yes, when I was in high school, my teacher was very dedicated, so I liked her. I have been touched by her dedication, which has lasted for about seven years.

The original sentence is confusing and contains many errors: 'my student his Perry dedication' is nonsensical; 'I had touched it in now' is incorrect tense and structure; 'maybe it lasted for it last for seven years' is redundant and ungrammatical. The correction clarifies meaning, corrects tense, and improves sentence structure.

× I find it better to have more lures because it can reduce students fight or it can help teacher to govern students.

✓ I find it better to have more rules because they can reduce student fights and help teachers govern students.

The original sentence has a typo 'lures' instead of 'rules'. Also, 'students fight' should be 'student fights' to correctly pluralize the noun. 'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to agree with the plural subject. The correction fixes these quantifier and pluralization errors.

× Yes, when I was in middle school, the teacher was very strict. However, her dedication is very was very good so I can improve my mathematics skills.

✓ Yes, when I was in middle school, the teacher was very strict. However, her dedication was very good, so I was able to improve my mathematics skills.

The original sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly: 'her dedication is very was very good' is ungrammatical; 'I can improve' should be past tense 'I was able to improve' to match the past context. The correction aligns all verbs to past tense appropriately.

× I don't want to work little preschool because I cannot go around my students. Also it can reduce my power.

✓ I don't want to work in a preschool without rules because I cannot supervise my students properly. Also, it would reduce my authority.

The original sentence has errors: 'work little preschool' is incorrect; 'cannot go around my students' is awkward; 'it can reduce my power' is vague. The correction clarifies meaning, uses correct prepositions and modal verbs to express hypothetical situation and authority.