Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa không được truyền đạt hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, ví dụ như giải thích rõ ràng về các quy tắc và lý do tại sao chúng tồn tại.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For instance, students are not allowed to eat food in the classroom to keep the environment clean and prevent distractions.

提案: Câu trả lời không rõ ràng và có nhiều từ không đúng hoặc không hoàn chỉnh, làm giảm tính hiệu quả. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và giải thích cụ thể hơn về lợi ích của việc có nhiều quy tắc hơn.

例: Yes, I believe that having more rules can help students develop better discipline and maturity, which are important for their personal growth.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không chính xác và nói lắp. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và có cấu trúc tốt hơn, ví dụ như mô tả cụ thể về giáo viên và cách họ thể hiện sự tận tâm.

例: Yes, I had a dedicated teacher in grade 6 who always encouraged us to be disciplined and follow the school rules strictly.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và tránh lặp từ. Bạn nên trình bày rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, đồng thời sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp.

例: I prefer having more rules at school because they help me stay disciplined and make better progress in my studies.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và không hoàn chỉnh, làm cho ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng và giải thích cụ thể hơn về giáo viên nghiêm khắc đó.

例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher in grade 7 who expected all students to follow the rules carefully and work hard.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, giải thích lý do cụ thể và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh để thể hiện quan điểm của mình.

例: Absolutely not. I think working as a teacher in a school without any rules would be very difficult because students might not behave properly or focus on learning.

× Yes, my school has a lot of rules for a student because they want to teach their student about the disk fly.

✓ Yes, my school has a lot of rules for students because they want to teach their students about discipline.

The pronouns 'a student' and 'their student' are inconsistent and incorrect. 'A student' is singular, but 'they' and 'their' refer to plural. Also, 'disk fly' seems to be a mishearing or typo for 'discipline'. Use plural 'students' and 'their students' to match the plural subject 'they'.

× For example, my school has a rule related to.

✓ For example, my school has a rule related to this.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'related to'. Adding 'this' or specifying the rule completes the sentence structure.

× They, uh, don't allow to eat food in the classroom.

✓ They, uh, don't allow eating food in the classroom.

The verb 'allow' should be followed by a gerund (-ing form) or an object plus infinitive. 'Don't allow to eat' is incorrect; 'don't allow eating' is correct.

× Yes, uh, if there are more rules, students would become more disk fly and uh, they will become more mature and also they can live like a a.

✓ Yes, uh, if there are more rules, students would become more disciplined and, uh, they will become more mature and also they can live like adults.

'Disk fly' is a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'disciplined'. Also, 'live like a a' is incomplete; 'live like adults' is a proper phrase. Correct adjective and complete the sentence for clarity.

× Yes, uh, I remember having a dedicated teacher when, umm, I was in class in grade 6. Umm, my T-shirt.

✓ Yes, uh, I remember having a dedicated teacher when, umm, I was in grade 6. Umm, my teacher.

'My T-shirt' is a mispronunciation or error for 'my teacher'. Also, 'in class in grade 6' is redundant; 'in grade 6' suffices.

× She's always want her student to be disciplined and follow her rules.

✓ She always wants her students to be disciplined and follow her rules.

In the present simple tense, third person singular verbs require an -s ending: 'wants' not 'want'. Also, 'student' should be plural 'students' to match the context.

× Actually I prefer having more role in school because I I feel myself, umm, have more progress when I follow my school's rules and become disciplined and mature.

✓ Actually, I prefer having more rules in school because I feel I make more progress when I follow my school's rules and become disciplined and mature.

'More role' is incorrect; it should be 'more rules'. Also, 'I feel myself have more progress' is awkward; 'I feel I make more progress' is correct.

× Yes, I have ever had a really strictly teacher when I was in grade 7, so my teachers sees is really really want his student to be.

✓ Yes, I have had a really strict teacher when I was in grade 7, so my teacher really wanted his students to be disciplined.

'Strictly' is an adverb but should be the adjective 'strict' to describe 'teacher'. 'Have ever had' is incorrect; 'have had' or 'had' is correct. 'Teachers sees is really really want' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'teacher really wanted'. Also, 'student' should be plural 'students'.

× Absolutely not. Because. Works as a teacher in a free rules school is actually crazy because students would wouldn't follow a A.

✓ Absolutely not. Because working as a teacher in a rule-free school is actually crazy since students wouldn't follow any rules.

The sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. 'Works as a teacher' should be 'working as a teacher'. 'Free rules school' should be 'rule-free school'. 'Would wouldn't' is contradictory; corrected to 'wouldn't'. 'Follow a A' is incomplete; corrected to 'follow any rules'.