Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều từ ngữ thừa và ngập ngừng như "umm", "uh" làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và tránh lặp lại từ không cần thiết. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể hơn.

例: Yes, there are many rules at my school that help students develop a sense of responsibility, such as punctuality and respecting others.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu sự hoàn chỉnh và rõ ràng, có nhiều ngập ngừng và câu chưa kết thúc. Bạn nên trả lời đầy đủ ý, sử dụng liên từ để làm rõ ý kiến và tránh ngắt quãng không cần thiết.

例: Yes, I think more rules can help some students stay disciplined, but others might feel restricted and less motivated.

提案: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và thiếu chi tiết cụ thể. Bạn nên sử dụng thì đúng, tránh lặp từ và cung cấp ví dụ rõ ràng, liên kết các ý bằng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I have been lucky to have many dedicated teachers, especially in primary and secondary school. For example, one teacher always encouraged me to practice presentations, which improved my confidence.

提案: Câu trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng có nhiều từ ngập ngừng như "mmm", "umm" làm giảm tính tự nhiên. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và có thể bổ sung thêm lý do hoặc ví dụ để câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: I prefer a moderate number of rules at school because it helps students feel less restricted and more motivated to learn effectively.

提案: Câu trả lời tốt về nội dung và cấu trúc nhưng có một số từ ngập ngừng như "uh". Bạn nên tránh sử dụng những từ này để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I had a strict teacher in high school who emphasized discipline and always reminded us to stay focused and submit assignments on time.

提案: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa chính xác như "rural free school" thay vì "rule-free school". Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác, ngữ pháp đúng và cung cấp ví dụ rõ ràng hơn để làm rõ ý kiến.

例: No, I would not want to teach in a rule-free school because without rules, students might become careless and lack discipline, which affects learning.

× Yes, I would say that there are a wide range of rules for students at my school.

✓ Yes, I would say that there is a wide range of rules for students at my school.

The phrase 'a wide range' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× Umm, which, uh, help give students a sense of responsibility.

✓ These rules help give students a sense of responsibility.

The original sentence is a fragment and lacks a clear subject. Adding 'These rules' clarifies the subject and completes the sentence structure.

× Yes, but I think it depends on what kind of students are.

✓ Yes, but I think it depends on what kind of students they are.

The sentence is missing the subject 'they' before the verb 'are', causing a sentence structure error.

× So some students, uh, will obey the rules. Seriously.

✓ So some students will obey the rules seriously.

The adverb 'seriously' should be placed after the verb phrase to modify it properly, avoiding sentence fragmentation.

× On the other hand, some students feel.

✓ On the other hand, some students do not obey the rules.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Completing the sentence clarifies the intended meaning.

× For example, they, they always gives me a pretend presentation that uh, can combine.

✓ For example, they always give me a pretend presentation that can combine.

The subject 'they' is plural, so the verb should be 'give' instead of 'gives' to agree in number.

× I prefer to have a moderate amount at schools, umm so that students can feel less restricted and more motivated to study better.

✓ I prefer to have a moderate amount of rules at school so that students can feel less restricted and more motivated to study better.

The phrase 'a moderate amount' should be followed by a countable noun 'of rules'. Also, 'at schools' is better as 'at school' to refer generally.

× For instance, when schools doesn't have any rules, students can be negligent and subjective.

✓ For instance, when schools don't have any rules, students can be negligent and subjective.

The subject 'schools' is plural, so the verb should be 'don't' instead of 'doesn't' to agree in number.

× No, I would not like to work as a teacher in a rural free school because I find it really not discipline.

✓ No, I would not like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because I find it really undisciplined.

The phrase 'rural free' is incorrect; it should be 'rule-free'. Also, 'not discipline' is incorrect; the adjective 'undisciplined' properly describes the noun.