Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议加强语法基础，避免重复和口头语，使用更准确的表达方式。

例: Yes, there are many rules at my school. For example, students are not allowed to bring phones to school, and everyone must wear a uniform. However, some rules seem unfair to us, but we have no way to change them.

提案: 回答不够连贯，表达含糊，建议使用连词连接句子，明确表达观点并提供具体理由。

例: Yes, I believe that appropriate rules can help students improve their lives and studies. However, some schools have unfair rules that do not support students' learning.

提案: 回答中有语法和词汇错误，建议注意词汇的准确使用和句子结构的完整性。

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher in primary school. She was my Chinese teacher and always cared about our studies and personal development.

提案: 表达不够流畅，语法错误较多，建议练习使用条件句和更准确的表达方式。

例: I prefer fewer rules at school because I believe students should learn to manage themselves. If there are too many rules, they might not develop this ability.

提案: 回答内容不够清晰，语法和词汇错误较多，建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点。

例: Yes, my Chinese teacher in primary school was very strict. Thanks to her, I found it easier to study literature in college because she gave me a strong foundation.

提案: 回答中有严重语法错误和表达不清，建议加强语法练习，使用简单句表达清晰观点。

例: I would not like to work as a teacher in a school without rules because it would be difficult to manage the students. I don't think I have the ability to be strict enough in such an environment.

× students don't can't bring phone in the school

✓ students can't bring phones to school

这里出现了两个情态动词“don't”和“can't”，这是错误的用法。应只使用“can't”表示禁止。同时，“phone”应使用复数形式“phones”，因为指的是一般的手机。建议去掉“don't”，并将“phone”改为复数。

× students can't bring phone in the school

✓ students can't bring phones to school

介词“in the school”用法不当，通常表示在学校里面，而这里应表达“带手机到学校”，应使用介词“to”。

× students must wear uniform in school

✓ students must wear uniforms at school

“uniform”应使用复数形式“uniforms”，因为指的是学生的制服。

× But some rules we don't think it's right

✓ But we don't think some rules are right

句子结构混乱，主语和宾语位置错误，应将“we”作为主语，“some rules”作为宾语，且“it's”应改为复数形式“are”。

× but we have not way to change date

✓ but we have no way to change that

“have not way”应为“have no way”，且“change date”表达不清，应为“change that（改变那个）”。

× the suitable rules make children benefit to their life or, uh, their study

✓ suitable rules help children benefit in their life and study

“make children benefit to”用法不当，应改为“help children benefit in”，且“or”应改为“and”表示两者都受益。

× But some school, the schools are unfair

✓ But some schools are unfair

“some school”应为复数“some schools”，且“the schools”重复，去掉“the”。

× Uh, it's not to the students study

✓ Uh, it's not good for the students' study

“not to the students study”表达错误，应改为“not good for the students' study”，表示对学生学习不利。

× she always mind our study and person personal development

✓ she always cares about our study and personal development

“mind”用法错误，应使用“cares about”；“person personal development”重复，应为“personal development”。

× I prefer to have fewer rules at school because I think should students should learn how to manage by themselves

✓ I prefer to have fewer rules at school because I think students should learn how to manage by themselves

句中多余的“should”应去掉，保持句子通顺。

× Uh, if have more rules at school, I think they never learn it

✓ If there are more rules at school, I think they will never learn it

缺少主语“there are”，且“never learn it”应加助动词“will”表示将来时。

× The really St. teacher is my Chinese teacher in my primary school

✓ The really strict teacher is my Chinese teacher in my primary school

“St.”应为“strict”的缩写，需写完整。

× so that it is easy for me to learn my course which about literally in my college

✓ so that it is easy for me to learn my course about literature in college

“which about literally”表达错误，应为“about literature”；“in my college”通常说“in college”。

× I have a good basis in the literature

✓ I have a good foundation in literature

“basis”用法不当，通常用“foundation”；“the literature”不加定冠词。

× I don't like to work as a teacher in a rule free school because I think it's difficult

✓ I don't like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because I think it would be difficult

表达假设时应使用情态动词“would”，更符合语境。

× It have many brave umm

✓ It has many problems

“It have”主谓不一致，应为“It has”；“brave”用词错误，应为“problems”或“difficulties”。

× It's I think student is difficult to manage and I have not ability to be a straight teacher for them

✓ I think students are difficult to manage and I don't have the ability to be a strict teacher for them

“It's I think”结构错误，应直接说“I think”；“student”应为复数“students”；“have not ability”应为“don't have the ability”；“straight teacher”应为“strict teacher”。