Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to directly state the rules and provide specific examples using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid filler words and repetition to make your response more natural and effective.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students are not allowed to wear casual clothes; we must wear uniforms. Also, talking during lessons is prohibited to maintain discipline.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks structure. Express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I don't think adding more rules would benefit students. In my opinion, having only important rules helps maintain order without making students feel restricted.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and confusing. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details about the teacher's dedication. Use linking words to organize your response.

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher. She always prepared interesting lessons and encouraged me to learn more. Because of her support, I improved a lot in my studies.

提案: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Clearly state your preference and explain why, using specific reasons and linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I prefer to have fewer rules at school because too many rules can be restrictive. However, some important rules are necessary to keep order and ensure a good learning environment.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many hesitations. Clearly describe your experience with a strict teacher and explain your opinion using linking words and specific details.

例: Yes, I had a strict teacher at school. Although he was strict, he was very experienced and worked hard to help students learn. I believe his strictness motivated us to study better.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Clearly state your opinion and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I would not like to work in a school without rules because I believe rules are important for maintaining discipline. Without rules, it would be difficult to manage students effectively.

× Uh, when I was a student at my school, my school, uh, his, his many, uh, roles.

✓ Uh, when I was a student at my school, my school had many rules.

The pronoun 'his' is incorrectly used to refer to 'my school'. The correct possessive pronoun for 'school' (an object) is 'its'. However, it is clearer to use 'had' to indicate possession of 'many rules'. Also, 'roles' is a wrong word here; it should be 'rules'. Suggestion: Use 'my school had many rules' to express possession correctly.

× So for example, uh, I can't, uh, uh, wear, uh, what I want.

✓ So for example, I couldn't wear what I wanted.

The sentence refers to past rules, so the modal verb 'can't' (present) should be changed to 'couldn't' (past). Also, 'what I want' should be 'what I wanted' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Uh, also I can't, uh, speak a lot of darling say, uh, lesson, uh, in the other important thing.

✓ Also, I couldn't talk a lot during lessons, which was another important rule.

Again, 'can't' should be 'couldn't' to reflect past tense. The phrase 'speak a lot of darling say' is unclear and likely meant 'talk a lot during'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Uh, I never think about that, but uh, to my mind, uh, uh, moral, so it's not me.

✓ I have never thought about that, but in my opinion, rules are not for me.

The sentence uses present tense 'never think' incorrectly for a past or present perfect context; 'have never thought' is correct. 'Moral' is likely a mispronunciation or misuse of 'rules'. 'So it's not me' is unclear; corrected to 'rules are not for me' for clarity.

× So, umm, more benefit, uh, for students, uh, because uh, uh, school health school has uh, uh, important rules only and not other rules.

✓ So, I think more rules would benefit students because my school has only important rules and no others.

The phrase 'more benefit' is incorrect; it should be 'more rules would benefit'. 'Health school' is unclear and likely a mishearing; corrected to 'my school'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I had really dedicated teacher because when I was the student, I, I wanted to learn and study a lot of things in the my teacher water and My teacher's water experiences.

✓ I had a really dedicated teacher because when I was a student, I wanted to learn and study a lot of things from my teacher's knowledge and experience.

The singular article 'a' is missing before 'really dedicated teacher'. 'The student' should be 'a student'. 'My teacher water' and 'My teacher's water experiences' are incorrect and unclear; corrected to 'my teacher's knowledge and experience' for meaning and grammar.

× I don't uh, prefer to have morals at school because uh, uh, rules are uh, and lots of rules, uh, are not uh, good and important for students.

✓ I don't prefer to have many rules at school because lots of rules are not good or important for students.

'Morals' is incorrect here; it should be 'rules'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness, removing unnecessary fillers.

× Uh, uh, but uh, to my mind, uh school, uh, his uh, uh, school has and uh, should roles.

✓ But in my opinion, the school has rules and should have rules.

'His' is incorrectly used for 'school'; the correct possessive pronoun is 'its', but better to rephrase. 'Should roles' is incorrect; it should be 'should have rules'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Yes, of course, I had a real estate child at my school because, uh, our strict teacher is not uh, uh, bad for students.

✓ Yes, of course, I had a really strict teacher at my school because our strict teacher was not bad for students.

'Real estate child' is a mispronunciation or error; corrected to 'really strict teacher'. The verb tense is adjusted to past 'was' to match the context.

× Uh, because uh, to my mind, uh, uh, St. teacher, uh, uh, his hard work and experience and uh, uh, he won't, uh, he want to study and learn and share a, a his.

✓ Because in my opinion, the strict teacher had hard work and experience, and he wanted to study, learn, and share his knowledge.

'St. teacher' is corrected to 'strict teacher'. 'His hard work' is correct but the sentence is incomplete and unclear; rephrased for clarity. 'He won't' is incorrect; changed to 'he wanted'. The sentence is completed logically.

× I would not like to work as a teacher in a roof of high school because I don't like teaching in the I haven't experienced that, and I have some experience and some abilities to do.

✓ I would not like to work as a teacher in a rule-free high school because I don't like teaching in such an environment. I haven't experienced that, and I have some experience and abilities to teach.

'Roof of high school' is incorrect; corrected to 'rule-free high school'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness. 'I don't like teaching in the' is incomplete; completed as 'in such an environment'.