Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，存在语法错误和重复表达，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用连接词使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, there are many rules at my school. They help regulate the behavior of both students and teachers, which makes the school run more smoothly and safely.

提案: 表达不清晰，逻辑混乱，建议明确观点，使用连词连接句子，并用具体例子支持观点。

例: I don't think having too many rules is beneficial because students might focus too much on following rules instead of learning, which could negatively affect their academic performance.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，建议使用完整句子，清晰描述经历，并注意人称和时态一致。

例: Yes, my English teacher in senior high school was very dedicated. I struggled with English and lost interest, but he patiently helped me after class and encouraged me to improve.

提案: 表达不够自然，存在语法和词汇错误，建议简化表达，使用恰当词汇，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I think having more rules is beneficial because teenagers often lack self-discipline, so rules help regulate their behavior and can improve their academic performance.

提案: 回答含糊且语法错误严重，建议用简单明了的句子描述老师的严格，并说明具体要求。

例: Yes, my strictest teacher was in senior high school. She required us to complete assignments with detailed steps, or we wouldn't receive any marks.

提案: 表达不清晰且句子结构混乱，建议明确表达观点，使用连贯句子，并具体说明原因。

例: No, I wouldn't like to work in a school without rules because I would have to spend more time managing students' behavior, leaving less time to focus on their academic progress.

× This makes I school.

✓ This makes my school.

这里 'makes' 后面应该接宾语，'I' 是主格代词，应该用物主代词 'my' 来修饰 'school'。

× This makes my school runs more smoothly and safe.

✓ This makes my school run more smoothly and safely.

动词 'makes' 后接动词不定式或动词原形，不能用第三人称单数 'runs'。'safe' 应该用副词 'safely' 修饰动词 'run'。

× More safe.

✓ Safer.

比较级应使用 'safer'，而不是 'more safe'。

× If a school made too many rules, students may focus more attention on these rules so that they won't, uh, they can obey it, so they may do some better influence to their academic behaviors.

✓ If a school made too many rules, students might focus more attention on these rules so that they can't obey them, which may negatively influence their academic behaviors.

情态动词 'may' 在虚拟语气中应使用 'might'。'won't, uh, they can obey it' 语义混乱，应改为 'can't obey them'。'do some better influence' 用法错误，应改为 'negatively influence'。

× he asked me to her class, to her office and.

✓ he asked me to her class, to her office, and so on.

句子不完整，缺少连接词和完整表达，补充 'and so on' 使句子完整。

× Well alone I don't know rules, but I think more rules is benefit for school.

✓ Well, honestly I don't know the rules well, but I think more rules are beneficial for the school.

'rules' 是复数，谓语动词应使用复数 'are'。'benefit' 应用形容词 'beneficial'。

× You know teenagers are lack of self cultural ability, so the rules may help there to regulate their manners and may result some good some benefits to their academic performance.

✓ You know teenagers lack self-cultural ability, so the rules may help them regulate their manners and may result in some benefits to their academic performance.

'are lack of' 用法错误，应为 'lack'。'there' 应为 'them'。'result some good some benefits' 应为 'result in some benefits'。

× Yes, that's mustn't be my best teacher in Senior High School at the time she was strict to us and she asked us fished the method works with detailed stages or she will she wouldn't give us any scores.

✓ Yes, that must have been my best teacher in Senior High School. At that time, she was strict with us and asked us to finish the method works with detailed stages, or she wouldn't give us any scores.

'mustn't be' 用法错误，应为 'must have been'。'asked us fished' 应为 'asked us to finish'。句子结构混乱，需调整。

× No, I don't suppose I will love this because if I work in a real free school I have to pay more attention on regulated school students behavior and so that I will pay less attention on students academic performance.

✓ No, I don't think I would like this because if I worked in a rule-free school, I would have to pay more attention to regulating students' behavior, so I would pay less attention to their academic performance.

'don't suppose I will love' 用法不当，应为 'don't think I would like'。虚拟语气中时态应一致。'pay attention on' 应为 'pay attention to'。

× I have to pay more attention on regulated school students behavior and so that I will pay less attention on students academic performance.

✓ I have to pay more attention to regulating students' behavior, so I will pay less attention to students' academic performance.

'pay attention on' 是错误搭配，应为 'pay attention to'。