Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. For example, instead of 'come at a time', say 'arrive on time'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For instance, students must arrive on time to avoid missing lessons, wear a clean and ironed uniform, and keep their nails and hair trimmed according to school guidelines.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by adding linking words and more specific reasons. Also, avoid absolute words like 'definitely' to sound more natural.

例: Yes, I believe students can benefit from having more rules because this is a crucial age for building habits. Therefore, the lessons they learn now tend to stay with them throughout their lives.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'Uh' and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, try to combine sentences to avoid repetition and improve fluency.

例: Yes, I have had many dedicated teachers. For example, Mr. Amit often held extra classes on weekends if the coursework was incomplete, and he regularly contacted students to ensure they were studying.

提案: Improve your answer by correcting grammar mistakes and avoiding repetition. Use linking words to express your opinion clearly and naturally.

例: I prefer a balanced number of school rules. While there shouldn't be too many, having some rules is essential to maintain discipline among students.

提案: Avoid repeating phrases and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I had several strict teachers, such as Mr. Amit. Although he was strict, we now understand that his approach was for our own good, and what he taught us continues to benefit us today.

提案: Make your answer more natural by combining sentences and using linking words. Also, avoid repeating the same idea with different words.

例: I think it would be very difficult to work in a school without any rules because the lack of discipline would make it hard to manage and teach students effectively.

× They have to wear iron and clean uniform, trim their nails and hair as per the school guideline.

✓ They have to wear ironed and clean uniforms, trim their nails and hair as per the school guidelines.

The adjective 'iron' is incorrect here; the correct form is 'ironed' to describe the uniform. Also, 'uniform' should be plural 'uniforms' to agree with 'students'. 'Guideline' should be plural 'guidelines' as it refers to multiple rules. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× He used to take classes even during the weekends if the coursework is not complete.

✓ He used to take classes even during the weekends if the coursework was not complete.

The sentence mixes past habitual action 'used to' with present tense 'is'. The correct tense after 'used to' is past tense 'was' to maintain consistency in time reference.

× I prefer to have balance in school rules.

✓ I prefer to have a balance in school rules.

The noun 'balance' requires an article 'a' when used in this context. Without it, the sentence is grammatically incomplete.

× There has to be a role, a rule.

✓ There has to be a rule.

The word 'role' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'rule'. Also, 'a rule' is singular and correct in this context.

× There has to be rules in order to maintain discipline among students.

✓ There have to be rules in order to maintain discipline among students.

The phrase 'There has to be' is singular and does not agree with the plural noun 'rules'. The correct form is 'There have to be' to match the plural subject.

× Whatever he taught us, that time is now is now benefiting us.

✓ Whatever he taught us at that time is now benefiting us.

The phrase 'that time is now is now' is repetitive and incorrect. Adding 'at' before 'that time' clarifies the time reference, and removing the repeated phrase improves sentence clarity.