Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid repetition like 'better better' and use correct grammar. Also, organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. For example, start by stating that there are rules, then explain what they are and why they exist.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school to maintain discipline. For instance, students must wear proper uniforms, including a tie, socks, and shoes. These rules help create a respectful and orderly environment.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with specific examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I believe students benefit from having certain rules because they learn important skills. For example, rules teach them to respect others and follow laws, which helps them in daily life.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many errors. Use simple and clear sentences to describe your experience. Start with a topic sentence and add specific details about the teacher's dedication.

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated maths teacher. She was knowledgeable and always tried to help me with my problems. She understood my difficulties and supported me patiently.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and correct grammar. Use linking words like 'however' or 'on the other hand' properly to connect your points. Also, avoid repetition and be concise.

例: I prefer having a moderate number of rules at school. Too many rules can make students bored and distracted. However, reasonable rules help students focus and achieve their goals effectively.

提案: Your answer is quite good but can be improved by correcting minor grammar mistakes and using more precise vocabulary. For example, use 'assignments' instead of 'estimate' and 'strictness' instead of 'our strictness'.

例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher during my school years. She was particular about punctuality and discipline, often reminding us to stay focused and complete our assignments on time. Although her strictness was sometimes intimidating, it helped me develop a strong work ethic and improve my time management skills.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: No, I would not like to work in a rule-free school because without rules, there would be a lack of discipline and punctuality. Although students might feel more relaxed, rules are important to create a focused learning environment.

× Yes, there are certain rules suggest to 1st to maintain the discipline as well as to wear proper uniform such as wearing a tie, a better better socks, better school uniforms and having a shoes.

✓ Yes, there are certain rules suggested firstly to maintain discipline as well as to wear proper uniform such as wearing a tie, better socks, better school uniforms and having shoes.

The phrase 'suggest to 1st' is incorrect; it should be 'suggested firstly' to indicate the order. Also, 'a better better socks' and 'having a shoes' are incorrect quantifier and article usage. 'Socks' and 'shoes' are plural and do not take 'a'. The word 'better' is repeated unnecessarily. Correct quantifiers and articles must be used with countable and uncountable nouns.

× From my viewpoint, student will get fruitful result for for following a certain rule.

✓ From my viewpoint, students will get fruitful results from following certain rules.

The noun 'student' should be plural 'students' to agree with the plural context. 'Result' should be plural 'results' to match the plural subject. Also, 'for for' is a repetition error and 'a certain rule' should be plural 'certain rules' to generalize the statement.

× Say they learn server skills like how to respect others, how to follow the UH laws and regulation and how to confirm confront in how to confront some things.

✓ For example, they learn several skills like how to respect others, how to follow the UH laws and regulations, and how to confront certain situations.

The phrase 'Say they learn server skills' is incorrect; 'Say' should be 'For example' and 'server' should be 'several'. 'Confirm confront in how to confront some things' is incorrect and should be 'how to confront certain situations'. Prepositions and word choices must be appropriate for clarity.

× Yes, I have vividly reminisce my maths teacher who was very keen and heavy, have a very good exposure of knowledge and always try to solve the problem I have and always have the better understanding towards me and for and apart from this they always always.

✓ Yes, I vividly remember my maths teacher who was very keen and strict, had a very good knowledge and always tried to solve the problems I had and always had a better understanding towards me. Apart from this, they always...

The verb 'reminisce' is incorrectly used; 'remember' is appropriate here. The tense should be past tense 'had' and 'tried' to match the past context. 'Heavy' is incorrect adjective here; 'strict' fits better. The sentence is incomplete and repetitive; corrections improve clarity and grammar.

× Having a moderately role that is a beneficial for student.

✓ Having a moderate role is beneficial for students.

'Moderately' is an adverb and should be 'moderate' as an adjective to describe 'role'. 'A beneficial' is incorrect; 'beneficial' is an adjective and does not take 'a'. 'Student' should be plural 'students' to generalize.

× Having a more rush, the student get bored and neither focus on the study.

✓ Having more rules, the students get bored and neither focus on their studies.

'Rush' is incorrect; it should be 'rules'. 'Student' should be plural 'students' to agree with the plural verb 'get'. 'Study' should be plural 'studies' to indicate general academic work.

× On the other end, having a moderate role they can focus on the study and they can also fulfil their aspiration and the outcome will be more productive.

✓ On the other hand, having a moderate role helps them focus on their studies and also fulfill their aspirations, resulting in more productive outcomes.

The phrase 'On the other end' is incorrect; it should be 'On the other hand'. 'Study' should be plural 'studies'. 'Aspiration' should be plural 'aspirations'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× She was very particular about punctuality and discipline, often reminding us to stay focused and complete our estimate on time.

✓ She was very particular about punctuality and discipline, often reminding us to stay focused and complete our assignments on time.

The word 'estimate' is incorrect in this context; 'assignments' is appropriate. The past tense 'was' and 'reminding' are correct.

× Although our strictness was sometimes intimidating, it helped me to develop a strong work ethic and improve my time management skill.

✓ Although her strictness was sometimes intimidating, it helped me to develop a strong work ethic and improve my time management skills.

'Our strictness' is incorrect; it should be 'her strictness' referring to the teacher. 'Skill' should be plural 'skills' to indicate multiple abilities.

× No, no, because rule free school does not launch the certain about the discipline and her and also the rules and regulation to be followed and the punctuality.

✓ No, because a rule-free school does not enforce discipline, rules, regulations, or punctuality.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'rule free school' should be 'a rule-free school' with hyphen and article. 'Does not launch the certain about the discipline and her' is incorrect; 'does not enforce discipline' is correct. 'Rules and regulation' should be plural 'rules and regulations'. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× Rule free school is often free the student get open minded and does not have any fear or anxiety about the rule to be followed.

✓ A rule-free school often makes students open-minded and they do not have any fear or anxiety about the rules to be followed.

'Rule free school is often free the student get open minded' is incorrect. It should be 'A rule-free school often makes students open-minded'. 'Rule' should be plural 'rules'. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.