Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, provide specific details about the unique rule to enrich your answer.

例: My school has very few rules because students are expected to follow general social norms. However, there is one unique rule that requires students to wear uniforms every day.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Provide a clear opinion with supporting reasons using linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I don't think students benefit from having more rules because they prefer to manage their own behavior. Moreover, too many rules can make them feel restricted and less motivated.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Respond directly with a clear topic sentence and provide specific examples or reasons to support your opinion.

例: No, I have never had a really dedicated teacher. For example, my math teacher was often strict and did not explain the lessons clearly, which made learning difficult.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Clearly state your preference and explain why, using linking words and correct sentence structure.

例: I prefer to have fewer rules at school because I believe students should be responsible for their own behavior without strict regulations.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains errors. Provide a clear response with supporting details and avoid incomplete sentences.

例: No, I have never had a really strict teacher. All my teachers were kind and understanding, possibly because I was a well-behaved student.

提案: Your answer is very unclear and contains many errors. Try to express your opinion clearly with supporting reasons and use correct grammar and vocabulary.

例: Yes, I would like to work in a rule-free school because I believe students can learn to make their own decisions and develop independence in such an environment.

× No, my school has few rules for students or students also crippled to violate the social rules.

✓ No, my school has few rules for students, and students also tend to violate social rules.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'crippled' which is not appropriate here; 'tend to' is a better phrase to express likelihood. Also, 'rules' is plural and should be consistent. The sentence structure was unclear and needed conjunction for clarity.

× So our schools doesn't need much rules.

✓ So our school doesn't need many rules.

The subject 'school' is singular, so 'doesn't' is correct, but 'rules' is plural and should be preceded by 'many' instead of 'much' because 'rules' are countable.

× However, there are only one unique rule in my school.

✓ However, there is only one unique rule in my school.

The phrase 'there are' is plural, but 'one unique rule' is singular, so 'there is' should be used to agree with the singular noun.

× Students umm, dislike regulating their behavior and and without, uh, rules, many rules, umm, they can control their behavior by themselves.

✓ Students dislike regulating their behavior, and without many rules, they can control their behavior by themselves.

The sentence had unnecessary fillers and repeated words. The modal verb 'can' is used correctly here to express ability. The sentence was cleaned up for clarity and correctness.

× No, unfortunately in my school all teachers were bothering at their job and they were not good teachers when I was.

✓ No, unfortunately, in my school all teachers were bothering at their job and they were not good teachers when I was there.

The sentence is missing 'there' at the end to complete the thought. The past tense 'were' is correctly used for 'teachers'.

× When I take a mathematic class he the teachers cross.

✓ When I took a mathematics class, the teacher was strict.

The original sentence has incorrect verb tense and word order. 'Take' should be past tense 'took' to match the past context. 'Mathematic' should be 'mathematics'. 'He the teachers cross' is unclear; likely meant 'the teacher was strict'.

× I don't like be regretted my behavior by rules and I can control my behavior without such a rules.

✓ I don't like being regulated by rules, and I can control my behavior without such rules.

'Be regretted' is incorrect; the correct form is 'being regulated'. Also, 'such a rules' is incorrect; 'rules' is plural and should not have 'a' before it.

× I can control my behavior without such a rules.

✓ I can control my behavior without such rules.

'Rules' is plural, so 'a' should be removed to match the plural noun.

× My teacher was own kindly to me.

✓ My teacher was very kind to me.

'Own kindly' is incorrect. The correct adjective is 'kind'. 'Very' is used to intensify the adjective.

× That is maybe because I was a Cribber student, so all teachers.

✓ That is maybe because I was a cribber student, so all teachers were kind to me.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Added 'were kind to me' to complete the thought. 'Cribber' is unclear but kept as is assuming it is a specific term used by the student.

× Yes, I wrecked it on do so in the roof with school students can run by themselves and think what is but and what is good by themselves.

✓ Yes, I would like to do so in a school where students can run by themselves and think about what is bad and what is good by themselves.

The original sentence is unclear and contains many errors. 'Wrecked it on do so in the roof' is incorrect; replaced with 'would like to do so'. Added 'a school where' for clarity. Corrected 'but' to 'bad'.