Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to reduce filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more natural and confident. Also, add a linking phrase to connect your example smoothly and provide a bit more detail about the rules.

例: Yes, there are several rules for students at my school. For example, we must wear a uniform in a specific color throughout the entire year, which helps promote unity and discipline among students.

提案: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly. Also, be specific about what kind of rules or projects you mean.

例: Yes, I believe students would benefit from having more rules at school because they create a structured environment. For instance, rules about project deadlines help students manage their time better.

提案: Try to answer the question directly first, then explain your preference. Reduce filler words and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: No, I haven't had a really dedicated teacher because I prefer studying by myself. Therefore, I create my own study plans, which help me stay organized and focused.

提案: Clarify your answer and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly and provide specific reasons.

例: I prefer to have fewer rules at school because too many rules can be overwhelming and may cause students to rebel, which makes the rules less effective.

提案: Reduce filler words and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples of how the teacher was strict.

例: I had a really strict math teacher in high school. He was very disciplined and demanding; for example, he gave us frequent assessments and homework to make sure we understood the material.

提案: Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly and provide specific challenges you might face.

例: No, I would not like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because managing children and dealing with parents from different cultural backgrounds can be challenging, which would make me feel pressured.

× I yes I believe students would benefit from having more roles at school because it helps create a structured environment where they can focus on their studies, for example projects and various thing.

✓ Yes, I believe students would benefit from having more rules at school because it helps create a structured environment where they can focus on their studies, for example, projects and various things.

The word 'roles' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'rules' which fits the context of school regulations. Also, 'thing' should be plural 'things' to match the plural context. Additionally, the sentence needed a clearer start by removing the extra 'I' and adding a comma after 'for example' for clarity.

× I prefer they have a few rooms at the school because when you push it hard all of things reverse and it might not work as well.

✓ I prefer they have a few rules at the school because when you push it hard, all things reverse and it might not work as well.

The word 'rooms' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'rules' to match the topic of school regulations. Also, 'all of things' is incorrect; it should be 'all things' without 'of'. Adding a comma after 'hard' improves readability.

× He was very, umm, disciplined and demanding and give us, uh, giving us uh, assessments and homework to ensure we understand the math and, umm, he was very tough.

✓ He was very, umm, disciplined and demanding and gave us, uh, assessments and homework to ensure we understood the math, and, umm, he was very tough.

The verb 'give' should be in past tense 'gave' to agree with the past tense context. Also, 'giving us' is redundant and incorrect here. 'Understand' should be changed to past tense 'understood' to maintain tense consistency.