Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains many hesitations and incomplete thoughts. Try to speak more fluently and clearly, avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm', and complete your sentences. Also, provide specific examples of the rules to make your answer more informative and natural.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must respect teachers and classmates to maintain a positive learning environment. Additionally, we are required to wear uniforms every day to promote equality among students.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but try to reduce filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence flow. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly, such as 'however' or 'on the other hand'.

例: I believe that having some rules at school helps students develop important skills like discipline and time management. However, if the rules are too strict and limit creativity, they could have a negative effect on students' growth.

提案: Your answer shows a good attempt to provide an example, but it is incomplete and contains many hesitations. Try to finish your sentences fully and provide more specific details about how the teacher helped you. This will make your answer more effective and natural.

例: Yes, I have had several dedicated teachers. For instance, one biology teacher noticed I was struggling, so she asked me challenging questions to encourage me to think critically and improve my understanding.

提案: Your answer is relevant and contains a clear opinion, but it has some hesitations and minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid filler words and use correct grammar, such as 'too many rules' instead of 'too much rules'. Also, use linking words like 'because' to explain your opinion.

例: From my perspective, it is important to find a balance between rules and freedom at school because this fosters both development and innovation. I believe that too many rules restrict students' creativity.

提案: Your answer is clear and provides specific details, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, use 'insisted' instead of 'insist' and 'recording' should be 'recording of'. Also, try to use linking words like 'although' to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I have had a strict professor at university who was very particular about punctuality and insisted on recording every experiment in great detail. Although it was challenging at first, it has helped me become more organized.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and repetitions. Try to avoid repeating words and use correct grammar, such as 'rules are necessary' instead of 'rules is necessary'. Also, provide a more complete explanation to make your answer more effective.

例: I would not like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because without rules, it would be very hard to maintain discipline and manage time. I think some rules are necessary to create a structured environment that helps both teachers and students.

× Yes, there are several rules in our school.

✓ Yes, there are several rules at our school.

The preposition 'in' is less appropriate when referring to rules applying to a school; 'at' is the correct preposition to indicate location or institution where rules apply.

× we should umm, aware uni uh, umm, we should wear.

✓ we should be aware and wear uniforms.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. The verb 'aware' needs to be preceded by 'be' to form 'be aware'. Also, 'wear' needs an object, here 'uniforms' is implied. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammatical completeness.

× But if UH they are so strict and restrict their creativity, they might do more harm.

✓ But if they are too strict and restrict creativity, they might do more harm.

The modal verb 'might' is used correctly, but 'so strict' is better expressed as 'too strict' to indicate excessiveness. Also, 'their creativity' is better as 'creativity' to generalize the idea.

× one of my teacher when she found out that I have problem with biology course is she starts to ask me the challenging question to encourage me to.

✓ one of my teachers, when she found out that I had a problem with the biology course, started to ask me challenging questions to encourage me.

'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' after 'one of my'. 'Have' should be past tense 'had' to match past context. 'Problem' needs an article 'a problem'. 'Biology course' needs 'the' as a specific course. 'Starts' should be past tense 'started'. 'The challenging question' should be plural 'challenging questions' for general encouragement.

× And I believe that too much rules restrict uh, creativity in students.

✓ And I believe that too many rules restrict creativity in students.

'Rules' is plural, so 'too much' (used with uncountable nouns) should be 'too many' for countable nouns like 'rules'.

× Already I have a strict professor at university.

✓ I already have a strict professor at university.

The adverb 'already' should be placed before the main verb 'have' for correct adverb placement.

× He was a very particular about punctuality and insist on a recording everyday experiments with great details.

✓ He was very particular about punctuality and insisted on recording everyday experiments with great detail.

'A very particular' should be 'very particular' without 'a'. 'Insist' should be past tense 'insisted' to match past context. 'A recording' is incorrect; 'recording' is uncountable here. 'Everyday experiments' is correct, but 'with great details' should be 'with great detail' as 'detail' is uncountable in this context.

× I don't like to be a teacher in in a rule free school because without rule it could it would be very hard to maintain discipline and manage time.

✓ I don't want to be a teacher in a rule-free school because without rules it would be very hard to maintain discipline and manage time.

'Don't like to be' is better expressed as 'don't want to be' for preference. 'Rule free' should be hyphenated as 'rule-free'. 'Without rule' should be plural 'without rules'. 'Could it would' is redundant; 'would' alone is correct.

× I think some rules is necessary to to create a structured environment and it helps.

✓ I think some rules are necessary to create a structured environment and help.

'Rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. The repeated 'to' is a typo and removed. 'It helps' is changed to 'help' to agree with plural subject 'rules'.