Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Votre réponse contient des erreurs grammaticales et des expressions maladroites, comme "may must" qui est incorrect. Essayez d'utiliser des phrases simples et correctes pour exprimer vos idées clairement. Par exemple, utilisez "students must stay in the classroom" au lieu de "may must stay". De plus, évitez les répétitions inutiles et améliorez la fluidité de la phrase.

例: At my school, when a teacher is absent, students must stay in the classroom for the entire session and are not allowed to leave during that time.

提案: Votre réponse est claire mais pourrait être améliorée en ajoutant des mots de liaison pour mieux structurer l'argumentation. Par exemple, utilisez "However" ou "On the other hand" pour introduire l'idée de limite. Aussi, essayez d'être plus spécifique sur les raisons pour lesquelles trop de règles peuvent être négatives.

例: Rules are important in school; however, there should be limits because too many rules can make students feel restricted and less motivated to learn.

提案: Votre réponse est interrompue et contient des erreurs grammaticales, notamment "tried to well explain" et la phrase incomplète. Travaillez sur la construction de phrases complètes et correctes, et utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre votre discours plus fluide.

例: In my second year of secondary school, I had a dedicated teacher who was very serious and committed. She explained the lessons clearly to ensure that everyone was learning and understanding the material.

提案: Votre réponse est compréhensible mais contient des erreurs comme "make a pressure" au lieu de "put pressure on". Utilisez des expressions idiomatiques correctes et des mots de liaison pour améliorer la cohérence.

例: I believe that having rules, including some strict ones, helps maintain discipline and order at school. However, too many rules can put pressure on students and reduce their motivation.

提案: Votre réponse contient des erreurs de vocabulaire et de grammaire, notamment "misbehaved with students" qui est incorrect, et "dropped a rural" qui semble être une faute de frappe ou un mot mal utilisé. Soyez précis et utilisez le vocabulaire approprié pour décrire les situations.

例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher who often treated students harshly. For example, once I accidentally dropped a ruler on the floor, and she punished me by sending me out of the classroom.

提案: Votre réponse est claire mais pourrait être améliorée en utilisant des mots de liaison pour mieux organiser les idées. Par exemple, commencez par "I don't think" ou "In my opinion" et utilisez "because" pour expliquer votre raisonnement.

例: I don't think working in a rule-free school would be a good idea because without rules, students might behave freely, which could lead to many problems, disruptions, and fights.

× In my school, if a teacher is absent, the students may must stay in a classroom for the whole session.

✓ In my school, if a teacher is absent, the students must stay in a classroom for the whole session.

The sentence incorrectly uses two modal verbs 'may' and 'must' together, which is grammatically incorrect. Only one modal verb should be used to express modality. Here, 'must' is appropriate to indicate obligation.

× Despite the importance of rules in school, it should have limits because if there are too many rules, students might feel restricted and lose motivation.

✓ Despite the importance of rules in school, there should be limits because if there are too many rules, students might feel restricted and lose motivation.

The original sentence uses 'it should have limits' which is incorrect because 'it' does not refer to a specific noun. The correct structure is 'there should be limits' to indicate existence or presence of limits.

× She tried to well explain the lessons and.

✓ She tried to explain the lessons well.

The adverb 'well' is incorrectly placed between 'to' and the verb 'explain'. In English, adverbs modifying verbs usually come after the verb or at the end of the phrase, so 'explain the lessons well' is correct.

× And to make sure that everybody is learning and understanding.

✓ She also tried to make sure that everybody was learning and understanding.

The original sentence is a fragment starting with 'And' and lacks a subject and verb. It should be combined with the previous sentence or rewritten to form a complete sentence with subject and verb.

× I believe that having rules and sometimes strict rules can spread the discipline and order at school, but too many rules can make a pressure on students and they can feel that they are less motivated.

✓ I believe that having rules, and sometimes strict rules, can promote discipline and order at school, but too many rules can put pressure on students and make them feel less motivated.

The phrase 'make a pressure' is incorrect; 'pressure' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'spread the discipline' is awkward; 'promote discipline' is more natural.

× She usually misbehaved with students.

✓ She usually behaved badly towards students.

The verb 'misbehave' is intransitive and does not take an object. The phrase 'misbehaved with students' is incorrect. Instead, use 'behaved badly towards students' to express the intended meaning.

× For example, one time I dropped a rural on the floor.

✓ For example, one time I dropped a ruler on the floor.

The word 'rural' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'ruler', which is a measuring tool. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar error.

× For that reason she dismissed me from school.

✓ For that reason, she expelled me from school.

The verb 'dismissed' is not typically used for students being removed from school; 'expelled' is the correct term. Also, a comma is needed after 'For that reason' for clarity.