Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваша відповідь не є природною і містить багато граматичних помилок, що ускладнює розуміння. Спробуйте давати чіткі, короткі речення, уникаючи зайвих слів і повторів. Використовуйте просту структуру: спочатку відповідайте прямо, потім додавайте деталі.

例: There are not many rules at my school because the system believes that fewer rules help students learn better. This approach encourages more freedom and responsibility among students.

提案: Ваша відповідь містить багато пауз і незавершених думок. Намагайтеся формулювати свої ідеї чітко і логічно, використовуючи зв'язки між реченнями. Уникайте надмірної складності і говоріть природно.

例: I think having too many strict rules can harm students' behavior and discipline. Therefore, it's better to find a balance between rules and freedom to create a positive learning environment.

提案: Ваша відповідь не є зрозумілою через неправильну граматику і структуру речень. Намагайтеся відповідати прямо, використовуючи прості речення і конкретні приклади.

例: Yes, I had a dedicated teacher who always encouraged me and inspired me to improve my grades gradually.

提案: Ваша відповідь містить багато повторів і помилок у словах. Намагайтеся говорити чітко, використовуючи правильну лексику і уникаючи зайвих пауз. Використовуйте зв'язки для логічного викладу думок.

例: I prefer having more rules at school because they help students stay organized and balance their schoolwork with personal life.

提案: Ваша відповідь не є повною і містить помилки. Намагайтеся давати повні речення і пояснювати свої думки, щоб відповідь була зрозумілою і логічною.

例: No, I have never had a strict teacher who forced me to study a subject. My teachers were usually supportive and encouraging.

提案: Ваша відповідь не відповідає на питання і містить багато пауз. Намагайтеся відповідати прямо і повністю, використовуючи чіткі речення без зайвих звуків.

例: I would not like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because I prefer a career as a motion designer or engineer in the future.

× Well, honestly speaking, they're lot.

✓ Well, honestly speaking, there are a lot.

The phrase 'they're lot' is incorrect because 'they're' is a contraction of 'they are', which does not fit here. The correct phrase is 'there are a lot' to indicate the existence of many rules. This is a singular and plural issue because 'lot' needs to be preceded by 'a' and 'there are' to agree with the plural noun implied.

× and most of my eyes are in most of our time, our school system thinks that it's gonna be better to forbid rules to get their students better and.

✓ and most of my time, our school system thinks that it's better to forbid rules to help students improve.

The phrase 'most of my eyes are in most of our time' is incorrect and confusing. 'Eyes' is incorrectly used instead of 'time'. Also, 'gonna' is informal and 'forbid rules to get their students better' is awkward. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun and word usage.

× Well, I had to say so because actually spending too much on providing a strong and generally varied rules can effectively decrease a student's behavior and a generally discipline at all.

✓ Well, I have to say so because actually spending too much on providing strong and generally varied rules can effectively decrease a student's good behavior and general discipline.

The phrase 'I had to say so' should be 'I have to say so' to express present opinion. Also, 'a generally discipline' is incorrect; 'general discipline' is correct. Modal verb usage and article usage are corrected here.

× Honestly speaking, I had that one and who always somebody waited me to and inspired me to do more things just gradually just getting my grades better.

✓ Honestly speaking, I had that one teacher who always encouraged me and inspired me to do more things, gradually improving my grades.

The sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect word choice such as 'somebody waited me to'. The correction uses appropriate verbs and adverbs to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× I prefer more having a fever rolls at school because this is what actually helps people to, this is what actually helps students be organized and make a balance between their school and personal life, I think.

✓ I prefer having fewer rules at school because this actually helps students be organized and balance their school and personal life, I think.

The phrase 'a fever rolls' is incorrect; it should be 'fewer rules' because 'rules' is countable plural. 'Fewer' is used with countable nouns. This is a singular and plural issue.

× Well, honestly speaking, I have never had a strict teacher who would who would force me to study. He is a subject.

✓ Well, honestly speaking, I have never had a strict teacher who would force me to study a subject.

The phrase 'He is a subject' is incorrect and confusing. It should be 'to study a subject' to complete the meaning. The pronoun 'He' is incorrectly used here.