Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复表达，且句子结构不够清晰。建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用更准确的表达方式。

例: Yes, there are various rules at my school related to studying, resting, and exercising. For example, we are not allowed to use mobile phones in the classroom because they distract us from focusing on our studies.

提案: 回答内容重复且表达不够流畅，建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并避免重复信息。

例: Yes, I believe students benefit from having more rules. For instance, at my university, rules such as banning mobile phones in class help us concentrate better on lessons.

提案: 回答偏离问题主题，且语法错误较多。建议直接回答问题，并提供具体例子或描述。

例: No, I haven't had a really dedicated teacher yet. Most of my teachers are friendly and easy-going, which helps create a positive learning environment.

提案: 句子结构不完整，表达不清晰。建议使用完整句子，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I prefer having more rules at school because they help create a better educational atmosphere. For example, banning mobile phones prevents distractions and helps students focus.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达混乱，建议简化句子，直接回答问题并提供具体说明。

例: No, I haven't had a strict teacher. All my teachers are easy-going, which makes the learning environment comfortable and enjoyable.

提案: 回答较为完整，但语法和词汇使用有待提高。建议注意单复数和冠词的使用，丰富词汇表达。

例: No, I wouldn't want to work in a school without rules. Rules are essential for maintaining order and creating a positive learning environment, such as those related to studying, resting, and exercising.

× Yes, there are variety of rules in my school concerning studying, resting or even doing exercising.

✓ Yes, there are a variety of rules in my school concerning studying, resting or even doing exercise.

这里缺少冠词“a”，短语应为“a variety of”，表示“各种各样的”。此外，“doing exercising”不正确，应为“doing exercise”或直接用“exercising”。

× Doing exercise.

✓ Doing exercise.

该句为片段句，缺少主语和谓语，建议合并到前一句或补充完整句子。

× For example, when we are studying in the classroom, we are not allowed to use mobile phones because it will influence our focus on the study.

✓ For example, when we are studying in the classroom, we are not allowed to use mobile phones because they will affect our focus on studying.

“it”指代不明确，应使用复数“they”指代“mobile phones”。“influence our focus on the study”表达不自然，改为“affect our focus on studying”更准确。

× In my university, there are so many rules related to study, relaxing or even exercising.

✓ In my university, there are so many rules related to studying, relaxing or even exercising.

“related to”后应接动名词形式，表示相关的活动，故“study”应改为“studying”。

× For example, we are not allowed to use mobile in the class because they will obstruct us from concentrating on the lessons.

✓ For example, we are not allowed to use mobile phones in the class because they will obstruct us from concentrating on the lessons.

“mobile”应为复数形式“mobile phones”，以匹配代词“they”。

× The teachers I met were all friendship and easy going and they help students to obey a variety of rules related to study, resting or exercising.

✓ The teachers I met were all friendly and easy-going, and they help students to obey a variety of rules related to studying, resting or exercising.

“friendship”是名词，形容词应为“friendly”。“easy going”应加连字符为“easy-going”。“related to study”应为“related to studying”。

× And through the guidance of the teachers, we can have a better educational atmosphere in the school.

✓ Through the guidance of the teachers, we can have a better educational atmosphere in the school.

句首不宜用“and”连接，建议去掉。

× From my perspective, have many rules in school allows students to create a more educational atmosphere for example, we are not allowed to use mobile phones in the school and which will help students to.

✓ From my perspective, having many rules in school allows students to create a more educational atmosphere. For example, we are not allowed to use mobile phones in the school, which helps students to focus.

“have many rules”应改为动名词短语“having many rules”作主语。句子过长且结构混乱，需拆分。句尾不完整，补充完整表达。

× No, I haven't, the teacher I have bets are all easy going.

✓ No, I haven't. The teachers I have met are all easy-going.

“have bets”应为“have met”，表示“遇到过”。“easy going”应加连字符为“easy-going”。句子应分为两句。

× And finally, which allow students to enjoy a more comfortable learning atmosphere.

✓ Finally, this allows students to enjoy a more comfortable learning atmosphere.

句子缺少主语，“which”指代不明，改为“this”并补充主语。句首不宜用“and”。

× For example, the teachers help us to focus on my study and enjoying our campus life.

✓ For example, the teachers help us to focus on our studies and enjoy our campus life.

“my study”与主语“us”不一致，应改为“our studies”。“enjoying”应改为动词原形“enjoy”，与“help”搭配。

× From my perspective, rule are very important in the campus life.

✓ From my perspective, rules are very important in campus life.

“rule”应为复数“rules”，与谓语“are”一致。去掉“the”更符合习惯用法。

× For example, the rules related to the study, resting or exercising play an important role in creating a better educational atmosphere.

✓ For example, the rules related to studying, resting or exercising play an important role in creating a better educational atmosphere.

“related to”后应接动名词形式，故“the study”改为“studying”。