Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer should be more natural and clear. Avoid filler words like "umm" and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct. Also, provide more specific details about the rules. For example, mention what "no relationship" means and clarify "do the homework during the day."

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For instance, students are not allowed to have romantic relationships on campus. Additionally, we must complete our homework assignments during the day before attending classes.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more concise. Avoid filler phrases like "like" and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I don't think more rules would benefit students because excessive regulations can reduce their self-discipline and hinder independent thinking, which is essential for achieving great success in the future.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear meaning. Please use correct sentence structures and clarify your ideas. For example, explain why not having a dedicated teacher is lucky or what you mean by "being positive to lead children."

例: Actually, I have never had a really dedicated teacher, which I consider lucky because most of my teachers were friendly and encouraged us to behave well in class.

提案: Your answer needs clearer expression and better grammar. Avoid filler words like "OK" and "uh." Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons for your preference.

例: I prefer fewer rules at school because too many rules can harm students' discipline and independent thinking. With fewer rules, students have more freedom to manage their time and develop deeper thinking skills.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating words and filler phrases like "like." Also, try to express your feelings about the experience more smoothly.

例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher when I was about 14 years old, around 15 years ago. Whenever I made a mistake, the teacher would hit my hand, which was very painful.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors and filler words. Please organize your ideas logically, use correct grammar, and avoid filler words. Clearly explain why both too many and too few rules are problematic.

例: No, I would not like to work in a school without any rules. Having too many rules can limit independent thinking, but having too few rules can create a chaotic environment that is not good for students.

× Yes, there are several and the first to come into our mind is no relationship for students in the school.

✓ Yes, there are several and the first to come to our mind is no relationship between students in the school.

The phrase 'come into our mind' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to' as in 'come to our mind'. Also, 'relationship for students' should be 'relationship between students' to correctly express the idea of relationships among students.

× And besides, let's umm, you have to do the homework during the day.

✓ And besides, umm, you have to do the homework during the day.

The phrase 'let's umm, you have to do' is incorrect because 'let's' (let us) is not appropriate here. Removing 'let's' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× Well, I don't think so because too many rules means that children may lose self-discipline or fail to make like huge achievements in the future because they lost the ability to think independently.

✓ Well, I don't think so because too many rules mean that children may lose self-discipline or fail to make huge achievements in the future because they lose the ability to think independently.

'Too many rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'mean' not 'means' (subject-verb agreement). Also, 'like huge achievements' is incorrect; 'like' should be removed. 'Lost' should be 'lose' to maintain present tense consistent with 'may'.

× Actually no haven't.

✓ Actually, no, I haven't.

The sentence is missing the subject 'I' and a comma for clarity. 'No haven't' is incorrect; it should be 'no, I haven't' to form a proper negative response in present perfect tense.

× Most teacher that I have are very friendly and being positive to lead children with nice behaviors.

✓ Most teachers that I have are very friendly and are positive in leading children to have good behavior.

'Most teacher' should be plural 'Most teachers'. 'Being positive' is incorrect here; it should be 'are positive'. 'Nice behaviors' is better expressed as 'good behavior'.

× Well, I prefer to have fewer rules because more rules means the damage to children's discipline of to thinking independently, and fewer rules means freedom.

✓ Well, I prefer to have fewer rules because more rules mean damage to children's discipline and to their independent thinking, and fewer rules mean freedom.

'More rules means' should be 'more rules mean' (subject-verb agreement). 'The damage to children's discipline of to thinking independently' is incorrect; it should be 'damage to children's discipline and to their independent thinking'. Also, 'means' should be 'mean' for plural subject 'fewer rules'.

× They can have arranged their own time and develop the ability to, OK, uh, have deeper thinking.

✓ They can arrange their own time and develop the ability to have deeper thinking.

'Have arranged' is incorrect here; it should be 'arrange' to match the modal 'can'. Also, 'have deeper thinking' is acceptable but could be improved to 'think more deeply' for naturalness.

× And every time I made a mistake, my teacher would punch me, punch my hand, and that really hurt, hurt it.

✓ And every time I made a mistake, my teacher would punch me, punch my hand, and that really hurt.

The repetition 'hurt, hurt it' is redundant and incorrect. Removing the second 'hurt it' makes the sentence correct and clear.

× No, I don't, because too many will owe too less.

✓ No, I don't, because too many is as bad as too few.

The phrase 'too many will owe too less' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is that too many rules and too few rules are both bad. 'Too many is as bad as too few' expresses this clearly.

× Rows are both not good things.

✓ Both are not good things.

'Rows' is a misspelling of 'rules'. Also, the sentence structure is awkward. Corrected to 'Both are not good things' to refer to both too many and too few rules.

× Too many rules means, umm, the laws of independent thinking.

✓ Too many rules means, umm, the loss of independent thinking.

'Laws of independent thinking' is incorrect; the intended word is 'loss' meaning losing independent thinking.

× And the two last rules means, uh, it may be a chaotic environment for students to stay in.

✓ And too few rules mean, uh, it may create a chaotic environment for students to stay in.

'Two last rules' is incorrect; it should be 'too few rules'. Also, 'means' should be 'mean' for plural subject. The sentence is rephrased for clarity.