Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct vocabulary and grammar, for example, use 'rules' instead of 'roles' and avoid redundancy. Also, make your sentences clearer and more concise in English (Malaysia).

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For instance, we have a dress code that requires all students to wear a standard uniform to maintain a neat appearance.

提案: Improve sentence structure and grammar, and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be more specific with examples in English (Malaysia).

例: Yes, I believe more rules can benefit students because they help maintain discipline. For example, having clear career guidelines creates a safer and more organised environment, which benefits both students and teachers. Therefore, following these rules ensures everyone can focus on their studies without disruptions.

提案: Reduce filler words like 'uh' and improve fluency. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct verb tenses in English (Malaysia).

例: Yes, I once had a very dedicated math teacher who often stayed after school to help us understand complex math concepts. She was patient and explained difficult topics clearly, which made it easier for us to grasp the subject. As a result, I became more confident in math and enjoyed learning it much more.

提案: Correct vocabulary and grammar, avoid incomplete sentences, and use linking words to explain your opinion clearly in English (Malaysia).

例: I prefer to have fewer rules at school because it can cultivate students' creativity and responsibility. Having too many rules may block creativity and limit freedom.

提案: Improve sentence fluency and grammar, avoid repetition, and use linking words to explain the effect of the strictness in English (Malaysia).

例: Yes, I have a strict math teacher who always asks us to memorise the multiplication table within 10 seconds. However, because of her strictness, I managed to memorise it quickly.

提案: Use correct vocabulary ('rules' instead of 'roles'), avoid filler words, and make your sentences clearer and more concise in English (Malaysia).

例: No, I would not like to teach at a rule-free school because I believe some rules are necessary to maintain an effective teaching and learning environment. They also help make the school safer and more organised.

× Uh, yes, we have some roles in our school.

✓ Uh, yes, we have some rules in our school.

The word 'roles' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'rules' which refers to regulations. 'Roles' means positions or functions, which is not the intended meaning.

× For example, we have dress code to be followed that was created by our school so that every students will have a standardised the way of a they wear this cool uniform.

✓ For example, we have a dress code to be followed that was created by our school so that every student will have a standardised way of wearing this cool uniform.

The sentence misses the article 'a' before 'dress code'. 'Every students' should be 'every student' because 'every' is followed by singular noun. 'Standardised the way of a they wear' is incorrect; it should be 'standardised way of wearing' to use the correct noun and gerund form.

× every students will have a standardised the way of a they wear this cool uniform.

✓ every student will have a standardised way of wearing this cool uniform.

'Every' requires a singular noun, so 'students' should be 'student'. Also, 'the way of a they wear' is incorrect; it should be 'way of wearing' to correctly express the manner.

× career guideline can create a safer and more organizing environment, which is not just benefit the student or also the teacher as well.

✓ Career guidelines can create a safer and more organized environment, which not only benefits the students but also the teachers.

'Career guideline' should be plural 'career guidelines' to match the context. 'More organizing' should be 'more organized' as an adjective. 'Is not just benefit' is incorrect; it should be 'not only benefits'. Also, 'student' and 'teacher' should be plural to match the meaning.

× Therefore, following this rule ensure everyone can focus UH on their study without having disruption.

✓ Therefore, following these rules ensures everyone can focus on their studies without disruption.

'Rule' should be plural 'rules' to match the context. 'Ensure' should be 'ensures' to agree with singular subject 'following these rules'. 'Study' should be plural 'studies' as it refers to general academic work. 'Having disruption' is incorrect; 'without disruption' is the correct phrase.

× Yes, I once had a very dedicated math teacher who often stay after school to have A to help us understand, uh, the more complex uh, math uh, concept.

✓ Yes, I once had a very dedicated math teacher who often stayed after school to help us understand the more complex math concepts.

'Stay' should be in past tense 'stayed' to match 'once had'. 'Have A to help' is incorrect; it should be 'to help'. 'Concept' should be plural 'concepts' to match 'more complex'.

× She was patient and explained difficult topic clearly, which made it easier for us to uh, grasp uh, the subject.

✓ She was patient and explained difficult topics clearly, which made it easier for us to grasp the subject.

'Topic' should be plural 'topics' because 'difficult' implies more than one. The rest is correct.

× And I become more confident in math and enjoy learning it, uh, much more.

✓ And I became more confident in math and enjoyed learning it much more.

'Become' and 'enjoy' should be in past tense 'became' and 'enjoyed' to match the past context of the sentence.

× I prefer to have a fewer room, uh, in the school because it can cultivate the creativity and the responsibility of the students because by having a, a lot of rules can actually block or halt the creativity and can halt the freedom.

✓ I prefer to have fewer rules in the school because it can cultivate the creativity and responsibility of the students, as having a lot of rules can actually block or halt creativity and freedom.

'A fewer room' is incorrect; it should be 'fewer rules' because 'rules' is countable. 'The creativity' and 'the responsibility' should be without 'the' to generalize. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and grammar.

× She always ask us to remember the multiplication table in 10 second, but by hers uh strictness, I actually managed to remember or memorise the metrical table under 10 second.

✓ She always asks us to remember the multiplication table in 10 seconds, but because of her strictness, I actually managed to memorize the multiplication table under 10 seconds.

'Ask' should be 'asks' to agree with third person singular subject 'she'. 'In 10 second' should be 'in 10 seconds' (plural). 'By hers strictness' is incorrect; it should be 'because of her strictness'. 'Metrical table' is a typo; correct is 'multiplication table'.

× No, I would not like to uh teach at the rule free school because I believe some roles are important or necessary uh to maintain an effective teaching and learning environment and it will make the school safer and organized by having roles in the school.

✓ No, I would not like to teach at a rule-free school because I believe some rules are important or necessary to maintain an effective teaching and learning environment, and they will make the school safer and more organized by having rules in the school.

'Rule free school' should be 'a rule-free school' with hyphen and article. 'Roles' should be 'rules' as the intended meaning is regulations. 'It will' should be 'they will' to agree with plural 'rules'. Added commas for clarity.