Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Избегайте лишних пауз и слов-паразитов, используйте связки для логичности. Например, начните с общего утверждения, затем приведите конкретные правила.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For instance, students must wear a uniform, which is quite traditional. Also, punctuality is important, so we are not allowed to be late for lessons.

提案: Ответ должен быть более ясным и связным. Используйте связующие слова и конкретные примеры, чтобы объяснить свою точку зрения.

例: Yes, I believe more rules can benefit students because they teach responsibility. For example, following rules helps us develop good habits that are useful in adult life.

提案: Старайтесь использовать более разнообразную лексику и избегать повторов. Также улучшите грамматическую структуру и связность ответа.

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher in 9th grade. She was disciplined and responsible, always encouraging us to be better people. Her lessons were engaging and interesting.

提案: Ответ должен быть более чётким и грамматически правильным. Используйте связки для плавного перехода между идеями.

例: I prefer fewer rules at school because it allows students to feel more freedom. This can make the learning environment more comfortable and enjoyable.

提案: Используйте более точные выражения и избегайте прямого перевода с родного языка. Сделайте ответ более связным и естественным.

例: Yes, I had a very strict math teacher in 7th grade. Although she was strict and I was a bit scared of her, her lessons were clear and creative.

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и понятным. Избегайте сложных и запутанных фраз, используйте простые предложения для выражения своих мыслей.

例: I don't think teaching children is suitable for me because it can be stressful. However, some people enjoy working in schools without many rules.

× for each school have their own rules

✓ for each school has its own rules

The subject 'each school' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' (third person singular) and the possessive pronoun should be 'its' instead of 'their'.

× we should uh, strongly be on similar uniforms

✓ we should strongly wear similar uniforms

The phrase 'be on similar uniforms' is incorrect. The correct verb to use with 'uniforms' is 'wear'.

× don't late for school lessons

✓ don't be late for school lessons

The verb 'late' needs the auxiliary verb 'be' to form the correct phrase 'be late'.

× St. rules can affect students behavior

✓ School rules can affect students' behavior

'St.' is unclear and likely a typo for 'school'. Also, 'students behavior' needs a possessive apostrophe to become 'students' behavior'.

× Like to be response like senses of responsibility convenient

✓ Like being responsible and having a sense of responsibility is convenient

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'To be response' is incorrect; it should be 'being responsible'. 'Senses of responsibility convenient' is also incorrect and needs rephrasing.

× She always helped us to be good person

✓ She always helped us to be good people

'Person' is singular, but the subject 'us' is plural, so 'people' should be used.

× the the lessons was very captivating

✓ the lessons were very captivating

'Lessons' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' instead of 'was'.

× when school have fewer rules

✓ when schools have fewer rules

'School' should be plural 'schools' to agree with the plural verb 'have'.

× I have very extremely strict teacher

✓ I have a very extremely strict teacher

The article 'a' is missing before 'very extremely strict teacher'.

× I very frightened by her

✓ I was very frightened by her

The verb 'frightened' needs an auxiliary verb 'was' to form the past tense passive voice.

× she gave a lesson very well, very understandably and creatively

✓ she gave a lesson very well, very understandably, and creatively

A comma is needed before 'and' in a list of adverbs for clarity.

× To my personality, teaching the children, it's not my work

✓ Personally, teaching children is not my job

'To my personality' is incorrect; 'Personally' is the correct adverb. Also, 'my work' is better expressed as 'my job'.

× it's in the way it's hard to understand and feel their senses of students

✓ it's difficult to understand and relate to students' feelings

The phrase is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Feel their senses of students' is incorrect; it should be 'relate to students' feelings'.

× this very nervous job

✓ this is a very stressful job

'Nervous' describes a feeling, not a job. 'Stressful' is the correct adjective to describe a job causing stress.

× it's enjoy

✓ it's enjoyable

'Enjoy' is a verb; the adjective form 'enjoyable' should be used here.