Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and some awkward phrasing. To improve, focus on using correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, there were some rules at my university. For example, we had to be quiet in the library to respect others who were studying. Also, students needed a parking permit to park their cars in designated areas. These rules helped maintain a respectful and organized environment.

提案: Your response is relevant but has grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. To improve, use correct verb forms and clearer vocabulary. Also, try to use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to contrast ideas and make your answer more coherent.

例: It depends on the place. At my university, the existing rules were sufficient because everyone used common sense to maintain a good environment and respect each other. However, in some other places, having more rules might be necessary to ensure order and discipline.

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but contains many grammatical errors and unclear phrases. To improve, focus on correct sentence structure and verb usage. Also, try to combine sentences using linking words to make your answer more fluent and natural.

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher named Daisy at my English school. She was my first teacher and helped me a lot, even though I struggled to communicate at first. She was very committed to helping me and other students learn, which was incredible. Thanks to her dedication, I have learned many things that I still use today.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. To improve, clarify your opinion and use correct grammar. Also, avoid repetition and use linking words to explain your reasons logically.

例: I prefer to have fewer rules at school because it shows that the university trusts students to act responsibly. This creates a respectful environment where everyone uses common sense to maintain order without too many restrictions.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrasing and grammatical mistakes. To improve, organize your ideas clearly and use proper vocabulary. Provide specific examples and use linking words to connect your points.

例: Yes, I attended a very strict school for one year. All the teachers followed strict rules, such as limiting bathroom breaks, forbidding laughing or talking during class, and banning phone use. The environment was very controlled and disciplined.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward expressions. To improve, use clearer sentence structures and correct verb forms. Also, try to link your ideas smoothly to make your response more coherent.

例: I have never thought about becoming a teacher, and it is not something I dream of. Although I respect the profession, I prefer to help people in other ways. Therefore, I do not see myself working as a teacher in the future.

× there was not really restrict ones

✓ there were not really strict ones

The phrase 'there was' is incorrect because 'ones' is plural, so the correct form is 'there were'. Also, 'restrict' is an adjective incorrectly used; the correct adjective is 'strict'.

× there was not really restrict ones

✓ there were not really strict ones

The word 'restrict' is a verb, but here an adjective is needed to describe 'ones'. The correct adjective is 'strict'.

× the people who was studying

✓ the people who were studying

The subject 'people' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' instead of 'was' to agree in number.

× to parking our car in the common areas

✓ to park our car in the common areas

After 'needed to', the base form of the verb should be used, so 'parking' should be 'park'.

× the rules was enough

✓ the rules were enough

The subject 'rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' instead of 'was'.

× I don't think it needed new rules

✓ I don't think it needed new rules

No correction needed here as 'needed' is correctly used in past tense and the sentence is acceptable in context.

× I believe in some places it should have more the

✓ I believe in some places there should be more

The phrase 'it should have more the' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'there should be more' to indicate existence or quantity.

× I had it in my English school

✓ I had one in my English school

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used to refer to 'a dedicated teacher'. The correct pronoun is 'one'.

× I didn't have it an idea about how to talk her understand very well in English

✓ I didn't have an idea about how to make her understand me very well in English

The phrase is unclear and uses 'it' incorrectly. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and uses proper pronouns and verb forms.

× She was so dedicated to make me and all the other students to learn

✓ She was so dedicated to making me and all the other students learn

After 'dedicated to', the gerund form of the verb should be used, so 'make' becomes 'making'. Also, 'to learn' is corrected to 'learn' after 'making'.

× I prefer to have fear rules

✓ I prefer to have fewer rules

The word 'fear' is incorrect here; the correct quantifier for countable nouns like 'rules' is 'fewer'.

× it it shows that it is cold university

✓ it shows that it is a cool university

The repetition 'it it' is a typo. Also, 'cold' is incorrect in this context; 'cool' is the appropriate adjective to describe the university positively.

× the environment, it respects the student

✓ the environment respects the students

The phrase 'it respects the student' is awkward; better to say 'the environment respects the students' for clarity and correct plural form.

× I had a very restricted school that I studied there for a new year

✓ I studied at a very strict school for a year

The original sentence misuses 'had' and 'there' and 'new year' is incorrect; 'a year' is the correct time expression.

× So all the teachers that worked there, they had the same beliefs as the school rules had it

✓ So all the teachers who worked there had the same beliefs as the school rules

The pronoun 'they' is redundant after 'all the teachers'. Also, 'had it' is unnecessary and incorrect.

× Going in the bathroom, laugh, speaking, who's the phone?

✓ Going to the bathroom, laughing, speaking, using the phone?

The verbs need to be in gerund form to list activities properly. 'Who's the phone?' is incorrect; it should be 'using the phone'.

× I never thought about it being a teacher

✓ I never thought about being a teacher

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect here; 'thought about being a teacher' is correct.

× I really dream or rich about it

✓ I really dream or think about it

The phrase 'dream or rich about it' is incorrect; likely intended 'dream or think about it'.

× it's not something that I really would like to do

✓ it's not something I would really like to do

The adverb 'really' is better placed before 'like' for natural English word order.