Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy. For example, instead of repeating 'rules' multiple times, you can use pronouns or synonyms. Also, add a linking word to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, my school has a set of rules that help regulate student behaviour, ensuring everyone follows the guidelines and maintains discipline.

提案: Your answer is a bit fragmented and lacks fluency. Try to combine your ideas into complete sentences and use linking words to clarify your opinion. Also, avoid short, incomplete sentences.

例: I don't think adding more rules would always be beneficial because it depends on whether the rules are logical and meaningful.

提案: Good answer but try to improve grammar and sentence structure. For example, use 'whom' or 'who' correctly and ensure subject-verb agreement. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I have had a few dedicated teachers who put their heart and soul into their classes, ensuring that each student reaches their full potential.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured. To improve, try to use linking words like 'because' or 'therefore' to connect your ideas more smoothly and avoid short sentences.

例: I prefer fewer rules because adding more might make students more rebellious; therefore, teachers should act as role models to guide students to be better individuals.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and redundancy. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid repeating words unnecessarily. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I have had strict teachers who enforced rules and sometimes gave punishments, but I believe they are kind-hearted and only want the best for us.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Also, avoid formal phrases like 'said school' in speaking.

例: The idea of a rule-free school sounds interesting; however, I wouldn't want to teach there because I believe some rules are necessary to keep students on the right track.

× The rules have to be. Logical.

✓ The rules have to be logical.

The original sentence incorrectly splits the sentence into two parts with a period, causing a sentence fragment. The correction combines the parts into a complete sentence, improving clarity and grammatical correctness.

× From the classes alone, you can tell that they put their heart and soul into making sure everyone of their students reach their full potential.

✓ From the classes alone, you can tell that they put their heart and soul into making sure every one of their students reaches their full potential.

The phrase 'everyone of their students' should be 'every one of their students' to correctly refer to each individual student. Also, 'reach' should be 'reaches' to agree with the singular subject 'every one'.

× I do. And these teachers, they might be very strict with the rules or they might even have some punishments for us.

✓ I have. And these teachers might be very strict with the rules or might even have some punishments for us.

The phrase 'I do' is inappropriate as it does not match the past tense context of the question. 'I have' correctly answers the question about past experience. Also, removing the redundant pronoun 'they' after 'these teachers' improves sentence flow.

× But I believe that everyone of these strict teachers are kind and hard and all they want to do is do what's best for us.

✓ But I believe that every one of these strict teachers is kind and hard-working and all they want to do is do what's best for us.

'Everyone' should be 'every one' to refer to individual teachers. The verb 'are' should be 'is' to agree with the singular subject 'every one'. Also, 'hard' should be 'hard-working' to correctly describe the teachers.